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Need sleep now.  Will try to get it before dinner tonorrow.

What seems amateurish?  Grammar?  I'm sure I could nit it, but it looked solid.  Commas are a stylebook thing, and I battle everyone about them.

You open with a series of short sentences.   Sentence lengths are one tool of composition, which is (roughly speaking) how we organize thoughts into phrases, clauses, sentences, and paragraphs.  Is this what leaves you dissatisfied?

You're not the only one who feels it can be better.  Poets and musical composers tinker with a work for years looking to make it better.  (See Saint Saens' Trois Chorales, a foundation work of the repertoire.)

Fell Night --a multiple entendre, 'fell' as verb or adjective.  Another title tool.

Can you use irony or oxymoron?  Flames of Darkness, Light the Way into Darkness?

I've got 1300.  My publishing has slowed as I learn of more skills that I need to learn, and I'm way behind on reviews, too.  But at some point I'm going to need those points, x3.

Okay, it's not Windows on your end.  I don't know what servers TNBW uses, but the different parts of their site are often out of sync, so I assume the platform archtecture has compromises.  That said, my results with the site do depend on the quality of my wireless connections.  And commercial carriers have QoS controls that might look at delays (possibly imposed near their periphery) and use those to calibrate the QoS for your connection.  When you look at the conflicting pressures on the implementors (corporate goals vs. customer service vs. getting it out tomorrow) it's a miracle it works at all.
Which doesn't make me any less angry about the crappy work.  (Actually crap makes good fertilizer.  This is more like toxic waste--cyanide of dioxin of biphenol.)

This site is especially dependent on the quality of the internet connection.  The Windows internet protocol stack seems to amplify poor connections instead of doggedly and smartly pushing through them.

Sesquipedaliophilia.

Good news with a high price: I'm looking at my current chapter and the storyline around it, and I see too much development and not enough action.  And far too much show of what should be told.

Reviewers demand more and more detail from me.  Sometimes they're right, but sometimes they're (you're) steering me toward turning a moment into a scene, a scene into a chapter, and a chapter into the whole book.

Which means that either I'm not giving you the right description or I'm not keeping your eyes busy with the right thing.

Working out bits of plot.  I think I know the B2 cliffhanger, and in its resolution I think Merran will have to kill for the first time.  It will be fully justified, but her mother will be a witness ... and Momma's concern will prevent her from learning anything important about what Merran has been up to.  And Momma's lack of concern, combined with Merran's sense of having crossed a line, will send Merran off on the trip she shouldn't take.  Kirsey will guess ... .

I have a a review to finish.

I think Rex Stout had Archie Goodwin make an occasional remark of that sort.  That's good enough for me.