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(1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

Got a sort-of-an outline typed up.  Now I either go back to The Rockpile or fill in a missing previous chapter.

Oh, that chapter I put up a couple days ago? 4600 words.  Ouch.

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(19 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)

That seems to happen when the network connection is balky.

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(1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

I think I know how to rewrite the Erevain episode to cut 40% or more from it while keeping the guts and improving the pace.  I'll put notes together after my errrands, which might take an hour or eight.

"If you like your doctor, you can keep your doctor."  "Corpse-man."

Apropos Alda, there's a book called =Switching Time= about a woman with severe MPD.  Even her alters had alters.  AldaM reminds me of the idea of an alter.

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(8 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)

Banned by B...F... ?  Hey, I been t'rown outa better joints###### webpages than that!

Dinner will be late.

Need sleep now.  Will try to get it before dinner tonorrow.

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(1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

I think I finally have draft zero of the chapter that gets Merran & Company out from Maurand's house.  I expect to find problems when I type it up.  It goes to 14 columns in shorthand, so I'm expecting about 3800 words.

It's not quite the end of their stay.  I may tack that on, too.

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(4 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)

What seems amateurish?  Grammar?  I'm sure I could nit it, but it looked solid.  Commas are a stylebook thing, and I battle everyone about them.

You open with a series of short sentences.   Sentence lengths are one tool of composition, which is (roughly speaking) how we organize thoughts into phrases, clauses, sentences, and paragraphs.  Is this what leaves you dissatisfied?

You're not the only one who feels it can be better.  Poets and musical composers tinker with a work for years looking to make it better.  (See Saint Saens' Trois Chorales, a foundation work of the repertoire.)

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(1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

Finally ... a linear outline for missing chapter 2.  mc 1 is written somewhere.  I need to find and edit it.  But this one is mostly talk and family dynamics, with a surprise.

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(21 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)

Fell Night --a multiple entendre, 'fell' as verb or adjective.  Another title tool.

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(21 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)

My point is that irony and oxymoron can make a strong title.

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Can you use irony or oxymoron?  Flames of Darkness, Light the Way into Darkness?

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(1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

You got my head whirlin'.

Are you gonna use the Alda-kitchen axis as camouflage?

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This inline review has a selection/comment that does not expand for me under X-line: https://www.thenextbigwriter.com/update … 872/#start

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(1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

Been away from the Rockpile.  Been working on a missing chapter in Maurand's household.  Realized I'm missing another chapter, which I have ... but it's too long.  Aargh.

I've got 1300.  My publishing has slowed as I learn of more skills that I need to learn, and I'm way behind on reviews, too.  But at some point I'm going to need those points, x3.

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(19 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)

Last week Optimum's entire DNS system in the northeast USA went down for several hours overnight.

Maybe it was a bug.

Maybe it was hackers probing weaknesses.

Choose your preferred dose of worry.

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Okay, it's not Windows on your end.  I don't know what servers TNBW uses, but the different parts of their site are often out of sync, so I assume the platform archtecture has compromises.  That said, my results with the site do depend on the quality of my wireless connections.  And commercial carriers have QoS controls that might look at delays (possibly imposed near their periphery) and use those to calibrate the QoS for your connection.  When you look at the conflicting pressures on the implementors (corporate goals vs. customer service vs. getting it out tomorrow) it's a miracle it works at all.
Which doesn't make me any less angry about the crappy work.  (Actually crap makes good fertilizer.  This is more like toxic waste--cyanide of dioxin of biphenol.)

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(1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

There's a lot to be rewrit there.

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This site is especially dependent on the quality of the internet connection.  The Windows internet protocol stack seems to amplify poor connections instead of doggedly and smartly pushing through them.

If you're determined to shoot yourself in the foot, don't start by putting that foot in your mouth.

Sesquipedaliophilia.

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(1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

Norm ... all you need to do to fix K's problem (with this chapter) is fit the word 'history' in this title.