A first-person narrative is a missive to the reader so the fourth wall is already brokren. The question then is breaking the narrative. When the narrator tells us what he does or doesn't like, he's doing that.
702 2017-06-24 15:10:34
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I just put a chapter up in B2. It came out as 1900 words, not 1700. Not too bad. This launches Melayne, but I'll try to get back to The Rockpile before I get too far along in her adventure. She's not going to like it.
703 2017-06-22 16:49:35
Re: The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B. (1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
This question carries information about the culture with it.
704 2017-06-22 07:33:31
Re: The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B. (1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Guardsmen
Use different words for the different forces.
705 2017-06-21 17:55:34
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Got six reviews done (should have been eight) and about 1400 words that will need to be turned into maybe 1700 of a character relating what happened since Melayne was there last. Arghh. Why do the ideas flow at all the wrong times.
We'll see if I can break Melyne's heart--twice.
706 2017-06-21 17:51:20
Topic: Depicting Bright People (0 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Sarsh Hoyt linked to this: http://esr.ibiblio.org/?p=7451
707 2017-06-21 07:56:12
Re: Please post here regarding a completed review (671 replies, posted in Alpha to Omega - Review Group)
Reviewed Randy's Dangerous Alliance, Ch's 11 and 12. (I've got a lot of catching up to do ...)
708 2017-06-21 03:35:09
Re: Titles in The Pendragon and The Beast of Caer Baddan (206 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
The reader should have to check the cover front matter, or acknowledgements to be sure it is fiction. (The Red Book of Westmarch)
709 2017-06-21 02:17:41
Re: Titles in The Pendragon and The Beast of Caer Baddan (206 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
The key is our use of auxilliary verbs, esp. 'do' and 'done'.
710 2017-06-20 23:07:05
Re: Titles in The Pendragon and The Beast of Caer Baddan (206 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Per the review: I don't mean that you should claim the story is true history, but to use some of the style of a history, with 'sidebars' (as leading chapter notes) to remind the reader of people and their last appearances, etc. As I envision these notes, they don't give any hint of the plot that is to follow, but only remind the reader.
711 2017-06-20 22:51:38
Re: Favorite Quotes (14 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
You could take almost anything from this page. A few that ring especially true:
◾“Misers get up early in the morning; and burglars, I am informed, get up the night before.” – Tremendous Trifles
◾“The act of defending any of the cardinal virtues has today all the exhilaration of a vice.” – A Defense of Humilities, The Defendant, 1901
◾“A dead thing can go with the stream, but only a living thing can go against it.” – The Everlasting Man, 1925
◾“Fallacies do not cease to be fallacies because they become fashions.” – ILN, 4/19/30
◾“What embitters the world is not excess of criticism, but an absence of self-criticism.” – Sidelights on New London and Newer New York
◾“He is a [sane] man who can have tragedy in his heart and comedy in his head.” – Tremendous Trifles, 1909
◾“Moderate strength is shown in violence, supreme strength is shown in levity.” – The Man Who was Thursday, 1908
◾“The simplification of anything is always sensational.” – Varied Types
◾“Customs are generally unselfish. Habits are nearly always selfish.” – ILN 1-11-08
◾“The person who is really in revolt is the optimist, who generally lives and dies in a desperate and suicidal effort to persuade other people how good they are.” – Introduction to The Defendant
◾“To have a right to do a thing is not at all the same as to be right in doing it.” – A Short History of England, Ch.10
◾“All the exaggerations are right, if they exaggerate the right thing.” – “On Gargoyles,” Alarms and Discursions
◾“The comedy of man survives the tragedy of man.” – ILN, 2-10-06
◾“When learned men begin to use their reason, then I generally discover that they haven’t got any.” – ILN, 11-7-08
◾“The free man owns himself. He can damage himself with either eating or drinking; he can ruin himself with gambling. If he does he is certainly a damn fool, and he might possibly be a damned soul; but if he may not, he is not a free man any more than a dog.” – Broadcast talk 6-11-35
◾“The reformer is always right about what is wrong. He is generally wrong about what is right.” – ILN, 10-28-22
◾“Reason is always a kind of brute force; those who appeal to the head rather than the heart, however pallid and polite, are necessarily men of violence. We speak of ‘touching’ a man’s heart, but we can do nothing to his head but hit it.” – Charles II, Twelve Types
◾“Man is always something worse or something better than an animal; and a mere argument from animal perfection never touches him at all. Thus, in sex no animal is either chivalrous or obscene. And thus no animal invented anything so bad as drunkeness – or so good as drink.” – Wine When it is Red, All Things Considered
◾“When we step into the family, by the act of being born, we do step into a world which is incalculable, into a world which has its own strange laws, into a world which could do without us, into a world we have not made. In other words, when we step into the family we step into a fairy-tale.” – Heretics, CW, I, p.143
◾“A thing may be too sad to be believed or too wicked to be believed or too good to be believed; but it cannot be too absurd to be believed in this planet of frogs and elephants, of crocodiles and cuttle-fish.” – Maycock, The Man Who Was Orthodox
◾“Do not enjoy yourself. Enjoy dances and theaters and joy-rides and champagne and oysters; enjoy jazz and cocktails and night-clubs if you can enjoy nothing better; enjoy bigamy and burglary and any crime in the calendar, in preference to the other alternative; but never learn to enjoy yourself.” – The Common Man
◾“Do not look at the faces in the illustrated papers. Look at the faces in the street.” – ILN, 11/16/07
◾“The whole curse of the last century has been what is called the Swing of the Pendulum; that is, the idea that Man must go alternately from one extreme to the other. It is a shameful and even shocking fancy; it is the denial of the whole dignity of the mankind. When Man is alive he stands still. It is only when he is dead that he swings.” – The New House, Alarms and Discursions
◾“To hurry through one’s leisure is the most unbusiness-like of actions.” – “A Somewhat Improbable Story.” Tremendous Trifles
◾“There have been household gods and household saints and household fairies. I am not sure that there have yet been any factory gods or factory saints or factory fairies. I may be wrong, as I am no commericial expert, but I have not heard of them as yet.” – ILN, Dec 18, 1926
◾“Over-civilization and barbarism are within an inch of each other. And a mark of both is the power of medicine-men.” – ILN, 9-11-09
◾“By experts in poverty I do not mean sociologists, but poor men.” – ILN, 3/25/11
◾“Women have a thirst for order and beauty as for something physical; there is a strange female power of hating ugliness and waste as good men can only hate sin and bad men virtue.” – Chesterton on Dickens
◾“Marriage is a duel to the death which no man of honour should decline.” – Manalive
◾“Idolatry is committed, not merely by setting up false gods, but also by setting up false devils; by making men afraid of war or alcohol, or economic law, when they should be afraid of spiritual corruption and cowardice.” – ILN, 9/11/09
◾“I say that a man must be certain of his morality for the simple reason that he has to suffer for it.” – ILN 8/4/06
◾“To the humble man, and to the humble man alone, the sun is really a sun; to the humble man, and to the humble man alone, the sea is really a sea.” – Heretics, CW I, p128
◾“Great truths can only be forgotten and can never be falsified.” – ILN, 9-30-33
◾“The first two facts which a healthy boy or girl feels about sex are these: first that it is beautiful and then that it is dangerous.” – ILN, 1/9/09
◾“I have little doubt that when St. George had killed the dragon he was heartily afraid of the princess.” – The Victorian Age in Literature
◾“Art, like morality, consists of drawing the line somewhere.” – ILN, 5/5/28
If you are getting the impression that GKC is the most quotable writer since or including Shakespeare, you're right.
712 2017-06-20 08:43:01
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
A few hours ago set to work on reviews. But as I was submitting the first one, Optimum's DNS went out all over the Northeast.
I'm giving odds on malware, maybe from China. And on the servers affected running Microsoft software.
Before that, I set a lot of plot logic in place. Melayne will have a few long flashbacks, I think. But for now, I need to get Merran through the Rockpile, introduce her to people she likes enough to stay (OUTSIDE the Rockpile, for which think B5 Downbelow or a bohemian district) and then get her moving again, without Jamen.
Melayne noted in the chapter that parallels Ch1 in B1 that Merran had never even seen a sea. She's going to see one soon.
Rockpile first. Reviews before that.
713 2017-06-20 05:25:04
Re: The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B. (1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
714 2017-06-19 09:17:36
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I've been trying to finish and peel back layers of task. Bad news: My imagination gave me a new section of plot thread Saturday night in between slpeep periods Good news: I got enough of that written out to set it aside. Bad news: I wasn't as far along with the previous task as I thought.
Rinse, lather, repeat.
715 2017-06-14 06:27:30
Re: The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B. (1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I think they copied the costumes from the original 19th century production.
716 2017-06-14 04:38:34
Re: The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B. (1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Be careful of the Mikado. Be even more careful of his DIL-E.
717 2017-06-14 02:59:26
Re: The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B. (1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Maybe ask B. Douglas Slack (AKA Tom Oldman)?
718 2017-06-14 02:48:58
Re: The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B. (1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Broken Foe. Juggernaut Fist.
719 2017-06-14 01:33:25
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Go ahead and hit it. My recent offline discussion with Her Amyness have me thinking and mulling and cogitating and stewing.
720 2017-06-07 23:15:09
Re: Say the first word that comes to mind... (1,634 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
721 2017-06-07 23:12:21
Re: The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B. (1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I go for precision, even when it means my 'style' varies. Which comes first for you, style or substance? ("... full of sound and fury, signifying nothing.")
722 2017-06-06 12:54:31
Re: Say the first word that comes to mind... (1,634 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Cinderella! Now isn't that a nice story?
723 2017-06-04 05:26:42
Re: Say the first word that comes to mind... (1,634 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
baer-sarker
724 2017-06-03 07:30:47
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Found a consistency gap (not hole!) in the chapter I'm working on. Not sure how long it will take for me to think it through.
(And a second gap, for which I will want t edit the two previous chapters. Not big edits.)
725 2017-06-03 06:58:20
Re: The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B. (1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I wonder if Apollo's survival of that pain comes from the surgeon cheatimg and insisting, with medical reason on a 'mild' musle relaxant that also has analgesic effects?