Ouch. I realized yesterday morning that I'd missed two scenes in The Rockpike. On reflection I realized one of them might be better later, but one of them should occur now. In fact, it should be Merran's first meeting of the people of the Rockpile.
I'll do at least six reviews today. (I could do 18.) But I'm going to spend time on The Rockpile too.
No, he doesn't. And I'm not a fan in general. But this has a lot to recommend it.
I'd boot the bootalicious too, and any bodacious so bold as to butt it's way in. "Behira-blessed backside" hits the funnybone without parading the hepcat
Just watched the Gilliam =Munchausen= with my father. I'd forgotten how well it's put together.
Oh, a couple paragraphs from finishing this too-long chapter. I start typing after the reviews (yours and a few others).
And at some point I may turn the partial episode from The True and Complete Account of the Instructive Adventures of the Daring and Sagacious Count Hulhausen Lundersot, and of His Life and Times into a full short. It might make a nice giveaway.
I owe you two reviews. I probably won't be able to do them tomorrow, so Friday. For now, I suggest swapping out hip words like bootie.
What's up, Chuck?
Vomiting while not in control of your breathing tends either to suffocate you or destroy youy lungs.
Spilled Pu.
Pain from heat, pain from muscle damage, pain from cutting/tearing, pain from exposure to chemicals (iodine in the wound) ...
No, it's not real science. But hey, I can extrapolate (said the guy who had two debridement in a sensitive place without anesthesia--and don't bother asking where). I'm also very sensitive to dental pain.
The process of tearing down and rapidly rebuilding tissues releases substances that signal the pain nerves to raise an alarm. This is at a level that saturates the normal triggers and, with the other rebuilding going on, all the pain receptors trigger at once and don't stop. The triggers get more sensitive as they are kept firing longer.
Maybe paralyze the vocal cords and pad the teeth and jaws to prevent permanent damage?
Humboldt
Humbolter
Humbuggler
Magnificand
Löwenzähmer (Google Translate gives this for Liontamer)
Hulhauzen Lundersot is meant to evoke Baron Munchausen.
Nearly finished now with the new Rockpile chapter, draft (-1). It's a here-to-there chapter with a lot of milieu and setting, and enough little adventure that I hope it will be engaging. It looks like about 7000 words. We'll see if I can have it ready before the weekend so Amy can ask me for 3000 more words to describe yellow rock. I =really= want to get started on the full version of =The Seeming=. I want you to meet Count Hulhauzen Lundersot.
People often tell you in their author's notes. When they don't, look for what you can offer. Keep it constructive and welcome criticism yourself even when you disagree with it. Reviewers should see themselves more as contributing than correcting, an sometimes the author will disagree. (But if two or more reviewers hit the same spot, consider that you may have a problem, even if it's not what they think it is.)
It can take weeks to build the recip relationships you need with writers whose work AND reviews you appreciate.
I glanced at the first chapter of =Strike Wing=. You've got reviews from published writers. That's pretty good.
I haven't looked to see if you'te active in any group forums. That helps to maintain recip relationships.
String cheese
Pastrami
Mayor McCheese
Grammar checking requires something close to the strong AI problem
I suggest you investigate Rosanoff's Three Laws of Nonsense.
Or you can accept that the Oxonians in Washington State are the world's greatest experts on English as actually she is spoken.
I've got a sequence of scenes that provide experiences, leak info about milieu, and call for mood shifts. And, of course, description that must stand Amy's scrutiny. It's going slowly; I'm thinking and scribbling notes, then writing, then rewriting, then scribbling more notes and rewriting again.
Sorry.
I'm renaming the chapter now called The Rockpile to The Seeming.
An explicit first-person narrator can steer the story into description and the reader knows the narrator is piloting the story. In the third person, you need an excuse to move the spotlight over the scenery. This wasn't always so true--look at the description in some of Chesterton's stories, or the opening of Carr's =Hag's Nook=--but that style would never escape a modern editor's scythe.
More's the pity.
I'm working slowly on Pausonalie and Merran's trip to the place where the Seemings are held. I keep finding ways to cut it and flesh bits out. It takes a lot of time each time I pick it up.
I owe a passel of reviews. Look for them in the next 30 hours.
I do have an entry in the latest contest. Probably the shortest contest entry ever, it'll fit in a twit with room to spare.
Does it help fill in the milieu? Would it fit if you added more milieu?
