Fishing in the Catacombs:
Thought one: Using Tazar's PoV doesn't have to mean seeing through his eyes and hearing all his thoughts. It can mean looking over his shoulder. Your first version comes close to that already.
Thought two: If Alda explains here (absently?) to Tazar why the only flesh they eat is fish, it will show Tazar that she knows more than she allows herself to know.
For the connoisseur of calamities: A car driven into the second story of an office building: https://pjmedia.com/instapundit/285946/
Y'know, I totally forgot.
Janet's Aussie accent is VERY real. (Ask her about mercaptans.)
Amy, Janet, it was a terrific weekend. I don't know who got the chocolate, but don't eat it all at once. Even if it's begging you.
Thanks also to to M.
Norm, Elishiva, everyone wished you were there. K****, you've been designated the Mystery Guest.
Most improbable romance. No dream-worlds. Max 3300 word.
For more frequent, lighter contests: caption contests. Prize of 50 review points.
It doesn't look like that hotel has a pool.
I'll know by Tuesday.
Nah, you're doin' good.
What days? If Amy's up to it I might be able to join you for a day. (Amy, I want you and Janet to have a whole day together.) (And if you're not up to it, I'll understand.)
Over the last few days I have had a creeping BFO*: I need to pay more attention the weaknesses of characters I'm going to bring in than to their strengths. I have to figure out just how to work with this.
*Blinding Flash of the Obvious
Tazar speaking moreut around Airen? I was wondering about that.
http://www.girlgeniusonline.com/comic.php?date=20111019
And, just for the punchline, http://www.girlgeniusonline.com/comic.php?date=20111024
Gee, Janet, I hope your dad does okay. That's a real rough spot.
"It was the best of times, it was the worst of times."
And the comma joins independent clauses, too!
Oh ... and I went down t NC for my sister-in-law's father's 90th birthday. I stood on line for 25 minutes to get a card ... with just four people in front of me--including the one at the register. Did my back no end of ill, then two days later I drove home and less than 24 hours later spent several hours leaning far forward in a chair with one hand stretched out on a shoulder-high powerr supply knob and the other poking controls on my scope. The next morning my back told me plain what it thought of all that, and it's not right yet. I'm getting around with naproxin and a cane.
Sounds like your vacation paid you for the time and effort, if not for the lucre.
I've been chasing some distractions, and learning more about how electronic components behave at low current levels. And under other interesting circumstances. I spent four days trying to figure out WHAT was happening and HOW it could be happening ... and then remembered that MOSFETs have a Miller capacitance too ... and learned that it's a sneaky son of a so-and-so that gets LARGER as the device turns on and SMALLER as it turns off ... with interesting consequences. (Look up Miller Effect.)
I've also been wrangling some network problems, soon to be fixed, I hope.
On my problems with Pausonallie: She's changed since I invented her. I just had the idea of her being the True Heir of G-Aunt Maugram, just now coming into her own. Have to think.
Have (metric) tonnes of reviews to catch up on.
Been away on Family. My sister-in-law's father is celebrating his 90th birthday, so I was down in NC to celebrate. Sister-in-law choked up when she thanked the NY contingent for coming down. Brother got his birthday present a week early.
Errands tomorrow, suit to cleaners. Back to breadboard ... and modding my kit pwer supply.
Sleep now.
Where is NJC t? What is he about? Whither dost he wander?
Side projects are popping up more side alleys than any sorcerer's nightmare. I need, eventually, to get to project A. But it will help to do project B first, both because having B will help with A and because if I don't get B outt of the way, it will be in my way while I work on A. And then ...
In thinking about how to test B under severe-but-realistic load, I've been thinking about project C. Which started small, but quickly became interesting. I spent most of yesterday filling pages with algebra to understand the non-linearities of parallel-series combinations of fixed and variable resistors (both as potentiometers and as rheostats). My bladder woke me overnight and as I took care of business it occurred to me that I could (probably) finesse the problem with current sources. Looks workable, but will be ten hours or more of lab work. LATER. I just now thought of a useful mod for project B. I'll try to do it. And project C has a detail to be worked out using an RC network to drive a MOSFET to provide a brief, fast reset current to the timing circuit on each side of an astable multivibrator. (The MOSFET's gate may be approximated as a capacitance that depends on the voltage on its drain terminal.)
I've got a circuit layout for project B to breadboard and test. I need to do a clean drawing of the layout, and I need to test it in parts: Current source, three-way current mirror, and voltage source. The voltage source first with only the voiltage output, on the circuit board, and then with the power block (not complete yet) including both the voltage output and the current bootstrap transistors.
And then I need to test it. Unfortunately, I passed up the chance to stock up on 5- and 10-ohm 10-watt sand-cased power resistors.
And, oh, yes, The Rockpile.
"I shall turn his balls to gunstones." Find the mocking scene and mock away.
You -have- heard of the Darwin Awards?
Any good advice and practice in English composition will help the writer. There are some differences between essay and narrative, but they are small compared to topic order, divisions, and the use of grammar (as a tool, not merely a study).
If the story is good enough, the 'bad' style might be accepted as good, at least long enough to garner a slew of imitators.
Depends what you need to improve.
But I'd put Matt Bird's =The Secrets of Story= near the top of the list.
Post in a group with points and reciprocate when you get reviews. Look for one of the fantasy related groups to call home and start a forum thread.
What, alligators Get No Love?
