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KH, I just read your last reviews on Sylph.  I'll say the same thing I would say about Shelob: this milieu is more than just setting.  Leave her alone.  Whether this develops fully as a Milieu Story or not, Sylph is as important to the story as the University President is to yours.  Meaning you could put something else in her place, but the something else has to fit the place.

The University President couldn't be an old stoner whose conversation is interrupted by recurring fugue states.  (Or maybe he could be, and maybe you'd like to take up the challenge, but it will be a distraction in the story.)  So too Zylph must be a critter of the wierd.  She doesn't have to be an ant colony.  She could be a sentient slime mold or an eight-foot porcupine with blinding speed, but she has to crepulate us or horripilate us, or both.

Postscript: The Big Story Message is If these are our friends, what will we meet as enemies?

Condolences are inadequate.  It must be so, yet I offer mine.

In the USA there's a technical difference.  Prison is for felony terms.  Jails are for the not-yet-convicted.  The facilities used for misdemeanor terms may be either.

The argument against spelling reform is that you lose history. I would never have remembered  gaol but it's a good example.

I'll remember that.  But it will have to be designed in, not bolted on the side.  Or worse, nailed on the side.  With finishing nails.

I'm wondering ... Kha's cleansing in Sil's power comes before or after Anver's staff gets to regrow?

It would be something if the whole titanic battle/campaign turned on Kha's unselfishness in returning Sil's power.

Excuse me!  Kha killed a dragon.  Granted, she came back as a woman and took to his bed, but whe was still a dragon.

That humankind is the most dangerous creature gives an air of deep truth to the story.

There's not enough fabric to call them panties.  They're the Chevy Suburban of the G-string.

Connections clutter the writer's home page.  Allowing the user to shut this off would help, though connections are still based on the writer rather than on the work.  And, as Randall notes, this creates a closed discussion rather than an open one.

You don't get alerts on subsequent updates, and if you did, other reviewers would not see the alert.  Reviews differ from forums in this way.

And yes, I'm carrying grains of sand in the hope that others will build a sandpile of evidence to convince Sol and his team that something is called for.

I've asked that either reviews, works/chapters, or subscribers be given something like a forum space.  Here's a situation that shows why: I've been reviewing a story by Randall Krzak.  Our discusion in reviews has been carried out by adding additional reviews.  Normally I suggest that an author open a forum for his work in a group he and I share.  But Randall and I share only the Premium group--that is, the Everything/Everybody group.  This doesn't seem to be the best place to open a discussion centered on one author or one work.

Why not join one R. Krzak's groups?  Well, I began to review his story not out of shared topic interest but because he has an interesting story and he seems to be working on skills that I'm still working on, so I hope to help and learn at the same time.  This seems a sound basis for reviewing, and for having a forum.

Somewhere I have a link to a campaign animation that might or might not still be there.  It depicts public officials trying to explain, among other things, cost overruns on Boston's Big Dig.  As each explanation becomes content-free, the speaker's voice becomes muffled.  Owing to a strange condition that makes them walk funny, in circles, each of the speakers' heads has been inserted deeply into its owner's aft nether opening.