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And yes, I'm carrying grains of sand in the hope that others will build a sandpile of evidence to convince Sol and his team that something is called for.
Commonwealth English isn't so uniform, either. If you're going to compare the speech of rural Georgia with, say, Brooklyn or the old Bowery, you might as well compare the speech of York with that of Cornwall.
Spellcheckers ought to have Commonwealth flag.
I've asked that either reviews, works/chapters, or subscribers be given something like a forum space. Here's a situation that shows why: I've been reviewing a story by Randall Krzak. Our discusion in reviews has been carried out by adding additional reviews. Normally I suggest that an author open a forum for his work in a group he and I share. But Randall and I share only the Premium group--that is, the Everything/Everybody group. This doesn't seem to be the best place to open a discussion centered on one author or one work.
Why not join one R. Krzak's groups? Well, I began to review his story not out of shared topic interest but because he has an interesting story and he seems to be working on skills that I'm still working on, so I hope to help and learn at the same time. This seems a sound basis for reviewing, and for having a forum.
So Anver is something like a Founder, but he still has the use of his staff and does not need to learn how to tap the Nexus? That might be an advantage if an adversary can impair, poison, booby-trap, or otherwise sabatoge the local nexus.
Somewhere I have a link to a campaign animation that might or might not still be there. It depicts public officials trying to explain, among other things, cost overruns on Boston's Big Dig. As each explanation becomes content-free, the speaker's voice becomes muffled. Owing to a strange condition that makes them walk funny, in circles, each of the speakers' heads has been inserted deeply into its owner's aft nether opening.
Bzzzzt.
Oh Dirk? A curse that involves ankles and ears...just imagine those two bits touching and you'll get the joke.
This doesn't have anything to do with that schoolyard legend, Benjamin Dover, does it?
If I don't pick up steam, I'll be at The Sorcerer's Progress when I'm 110. Not that I'd mind getting there, but I'd like to finish before then.
With B5, that possibility doesn't occur until it becomes a necessity, somewhere between seasons three and four.
What we have here are stories that are woven together, with overtones of dark magic and supernatural involvement. They come to a common climax, via multiple streams of rising action.
The need to break =Acts= into two books will leave the storylines a little out of balance unless all three storylines join in it. In which case, it might make sense in the final version to open the =Mantle= with the less dominant storylines (ie, not Anvers) and then tie them together quickly.
He lost that memory. However, if I can find a free moment, I'll write about one of the things he intuited from the clues.
Hmmm. Not the hidden Shadowbook page? Man, Zyrt is really gonna raise Kha's consciousness! Kha is starving to understand and Zyrtec keeps feeding him magic nightmare mushrooms.
Y'know, when you finish with this, I'm gonna lose my best reviewer 
I actually asked more than four. But if you're trying for B5, it's hard not to guess you're trying for the end of an era, and maybe the end of all on which that era stands.
And presumably we'll learn why Kha gripped the Black Staff. Does he even know what happened? Or did he lose that memory in the Earthwound? Interesting that it hasn't been discussed; one might almost wonder if it's under the Veil.
To whom did it belong, anyway? Faulter?
Could the same lash-up that Anver used to clear Kha be used to overwhelm even a mage like Faulter?
... but Faith Manages.
So ... we're going to see the close of the Age of Diminishment? And maybe of Magery as well, as the Guildhouse is called home along with Behira and Saundon?
And the route to this lies throgh the catacombs? That suggests that there's more down there than the destruction of a Horror.
Once you catch a couple, you're open to more. But you want the reader to -almost- catch them. Where would Agatha Christie have gotten if her readers had caught most of her clues?
Shoot, durn thing threw away my reply. WiFi problem.
Continuity is my friend. I depend upon it, establishing the (AND NOW IT SUBMITTED BEFORE I FINISHED, -not- A WiFi PROBLEM) distinctions early and holding to them. I use the opening training session, and the extended training llater, in Book 1, to drive the distinctions home.
I need to do the same near the start of each Book. The chapters in question are not the start of the book.
This is why I started capitalizing the Elemental uses versus the tangible. I should look for more ways of reminding the reader.
Fair point. I don't have workable synonyms, and I have a lot of 4+2-principle assumptions mixed into how I envision the story.
Were you one of those who wondered why I capitalized certain words?
But there are things to work on in these chapters, including the effect of turning down the heat when the cooling is still at max.
And don't forget that I do hit lots of this in Book 1.
Okay, I had six hours to work on the chapter(s) bouncing around in my head and spent eleven of them, but Book 2 Chapter (provisional) 27 is up, right before (provisional) 28.
It's about Melayne. If you don't like her, you probably won't like the chapter.
I was thinking of Behira and Saundon, actually, and Conduits.
If you're hoping for a review from me, hold on. I've just done one for CJ-D and I'll be doing more in the days coming. But not all at once.
Amy, look up 'theopnuesty'. I tripped over it in the Pitman dictiionary while checking the outline for 'theory'.
True. She avoids the others. Pengrit she can't avoid.
In this universe, I don't think 'sex slave' would occur to Melayne. Maybe it should, maybe not. (Depends on the World. Not an issue in, say, Klonziea.) But 'drudge' isn't so bad, especially compared to being a felon######rogue sorcerer.
Melayne's a hero, not a palladin sans puer sans reproach. (Sorry for the spelling.) She's got to grow into the role, same as her daughter. They all make mistakes.
This is an ensemble story, and not everyone will come together at once. Much of the story involves people working with limited information.
Kirsey is a Force. We'll see his powers; we'll see his limits. And he's got to get to that library to investigate what he saw. In the Pike/Kirsey chapter as now outlined, he doesn't know what that vortex is. But that might not work with the timeline. Or it might. His first visit might not provide the answers. His second, in the scene I've got with Threkesrom, might do it.
In the meantime ...
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I'm still working on Melayne's visit to the Void of Fire. I'm having a hard time putting my vision in words and covering all the story logic. (Amy, Melayne has a grave reason to keep Pengrit well-sorceled until Melayne is gone. Melayne is carrying those Gems. Okay, Pengrit -shouldn't- be able to sorsee them after Melayne Barricades her, but Melayne is also at risk of becoming a fugitive, and she doesn't want to be seen.)
Once I get that much done, I've got to form it into steady narrative and then clean it up. I'm working backward from the chapter I last put up.
You'll be seeing world-names in the story as I revise it.
Say, you didn't review the chapter called =Books for Pengrit=, did you? What did you think of it?
In snooker the cushions don't spring out and whack the players.
