A star wars staple (even in the books) is a desert world, which is pretty much impossible in a star-faring society.
Kim Stanley Robinson's Mars colonization series even nods to this because they take ice comets and do low orbit runs for like 20 years to build the planet's water reserves. It costs pennies to deflect a comet if you have broken the fossil fuel barrier. So ya, I can see Herbert's point-- at least he had a purpose for the desert world
Hi Dirk
What you have here is something my editor would throw red ink at, it's telling backstory through dialogue.
Hamlet, Prince of Denmark, entered the graveyard. He was upset at his step father, Claudius, for marrying his mother Gertrude. His friend Horatio agreed.
Crowd: Don't do this. We don't need all this backstory. Show us the heart of the character and the action.
Writer: What defines action?
Crowd: What the characters say or do
Writer: Oh! That's easy!
Hamlet: "I am Hamlet, Prince of Denmark"
Horatio: "How do you feel about your mother, Gertrude, marrying Claudius?"
Hamlet: "So soon after my father's death, yea the cakes were not yet cooled. Forsooth, I was upset at Claudius."
Now, aside from the fact that Shakespeare pretty much did exactly this, it's getting a little frowned on because it doesn't produce natural two-way dialogue. It tends to sound like people stating facts for an invisible 3rd person.
Doesn't help you here, but chipping it in because I see Linda has detected that and straightened it back into narrative like my editor would.
Also note that the danger of the moment is in the past at which point Luke's actions may cause the narrator danger. This method removes any chance of such suspense by punting the danger into the past (admittedly another trick the Great Bard got away with).
New post forthcoming?
Palpatine being back is actually consistent with the books, believe it or not. In Episode 3 they mention some Jedi/Sith can cheat death and he reasons that caving himself cloned is a decent backup plan for the unexpected ( But cloning Darth Vader is not ). Ironically, the books did the clone wars worse than the movies which kind of treaded lightly
I actually haven't seen 9. Gave up on the franchise. Rogue One had a pleasant ending, but that's been the only one I liked in the past 21 years. Time to cut my losses lol
My target audience is Catholic thriller readers
Q: Does Clairedeplume satisfy both conditions? (Catholic and thriller-reader)
Also, do you have a band within that spectrum? For example age strata or maturity within the available content?
For example, Project L is targeting "Vampire/Werewolf fans" but within that wide discipline, I'm chasing the market of Twilight fans who love/loved it but have grown tired of the genre. My target market is between ages 35-55 (Hence why I put the story in the 90s). I assume 75% female readership, so I conform to their needs (for example, I've read that my market is fed up with OW/cheating stories within the genre)
Ok, so for yours...
Q: are you writing to the catholic who will watch a violent Rambo movie and thinks Dan Brown is mild?
Q: if there is an ecstatic review in some blog or column, how old is that blogger? (This question is probably more important than it first seems)
That reminds me, you have a post above from 10-29 with my name and character name together. Would you be willing to nix it?
I'm not super worried about the Google-monster, but ever vigilant
Ok as to your question, I had asked before if your target market was reading Dan Brown, and you indicated you were going for a more moderate crowd, but I still don't have a solid idea who your reader is. I recogniize I've been desensitized to violence because I just read about a young boy being stabbed and didn't bat an eye. Granted this problem, I understand how escalating violence could be an issue.
More food for thought: Project L is not a good fit for this site because we don't have tons of Twilight fans here. That's perfectly fine; I filter comments with this in mind. You may be stuck in this situation too. This will take some work to overcome... you'll need to build a platform where your market is. You'll need one anyway, when it's time to release. Honestly, the time to start building is now.
Not really screwed. If you browse my catalogue, you'll discover I only put my name on about half my covers. Part of a plan to stay at the sidelines
o dear
Works.
Another option is Connor heals everyone with the same action. I think this has weak new testament precedent though
--er don't care is not the right word... "accept its flaws"?
No worries... it's deep enough into the series that only die hard fans will be reading it. I've noticed this with modern Star Wars fans. They just don't care about the continuum.
Can you leave some errors in there so we can get points?
Holy giant chapter, Batman
Hey Dirk. This will boil your mind, I bet.
I've been getting riddled with caps issues on "Earth". eg: "Bye everyone, I'm headed to Earth."
but "I would travel to the four corners of the earth" apparently the rule is lowercase.
Kdot and K. can't be called formerly.
There should be an emu in this thread.
I don't recall this, but it's been a while since I last read it. So much going on in that book 
They survived here. Making money now, thanks to Covid
Weird example since stranger isn't a job
A minor addition, "teacher" can be made to pass the uniqueness rest.
Imagine your 5-yr-old running in the door:
>Mom! Dad! We caught a bug today and Teacher let us keep it
(Later same book, talking to a friend)
Dad: Our son's teacher gave him a bug.
Here, Dad cannot use capital because uniqueness lost
Another example, the Lone Ranger & Tonto walk up to two villains.
Villian: Hey lawman (Addressing Lone ranger as one lawman among many)
vs
Villain: Hey Lawman (Using a common term that everyone in the scene understands who it is)
In this above case, I'll take either as long as it's consistent that no other good guy is also Lawman
Teacher, teacher, can you teach me?
Can you tell me all I need to know?
However I would expect the caps if teacher was shortened.
>Hey, Teach! How you doing
Revenge of the Sith (opening night) was my last excursion to the theatres
I have a high incident rate of female names ending in -a but I don't fight it. Most readers don't spot that
Heh ShutterStock (where I buy some cover properties) is sneaky. I bought the 5-image pack. Turns out it has an auto-renew and automatically bought me 5 more images back in March
I logged in while working on another cover and found these extra downloads about to expire. It would have kept rebilling me until I caught it on my statement. Although I check my statement monthly, my "usual billers" such as Google, Amazon etc dont get much scrutiny. I mostly check for large bills and unexpected/unrecognized transactions. They could have snuck another 2-3 through before I found it
