My line of thinking is his illness will drown among the other illnesses that have been healed (minus the notable blindness). My writing temptation would be to go some completely different route such as de Rosa has insistent debt collectors and his miracle/intercession is the debt collectors are suddenly nice. Or maybe a beam of light shoots through them à la Temple of Doom
251 2021-01-25 02:40:00
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
252 2021-01-17 12:48:17
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Can you just bump it to a different church?
253 2021-01-14 19:08:41
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Coming in cold, no idea of the plot or the players (except recognizing the final one) it seemed kinda one-sided, but I'll buy it
254 2021-01-12 04:06:37
Re: Project R (23 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Hah so I finally figured out why everyone's weirded out at my male character named "Sara Mindus". I was a little puzzled by this confusion but was prepared to roll with it an choose a new name, until a reviewer clarified that Mindus looks like a last name. Sara's a prefix not unlike "ibn" lol
I had no idea people were reading it as "sarah" or similar. Holy tunnel vision!
255 2021-01-06 01:22:05
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Luckily I renamed Heaven to paradise so I can get away with caps. I just need a name for Hell
256 2021-01-03 15:24:58
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
The Church regularly purges certain offices (just to be unpredictable and to clean house). All the key positions are given to cardinals, who are usually old men with a very limited remaining lifespan.
Q: What happened to the purged guys? Assuming my plant was kicked out along with the others (I mean my one-in-100 good plant who hasn't given himself away) does he get transplanted into another office where I can apply his abilities?
If the A-C wants a near-perpetual lock on the key dioceses
Q: Does he need one? It sounds like as long as he can get two cardinals, he has control. Two cardinals gets him enough sway to keep fresh talent coming up the roster. Assuming he has the pope's ear much of the time through them. Should only be so long before he gains insight into the task force meant to find him. Yikes!
There's only so long he can stay in power before people realize he's not purely human due to the fact that he doesn't die of old age
Q: This is to assume he can't acquire fake ID and "rotate lifespans". Or are you saying there's a public figure he's riding on?
257 2021-01-03 04:37:35
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I was curious about the 370 years... but wasn't prepared to crawl down that rabbit-hole until I understood how the context works. Eg if there was a special date you were working backwards to.
I figure that's enough time to pretty much own every cardinal if you're an immortal. You do have a limitation that the plants become bold over time and make mistakes, but through 4 centuries, I bet you get that 1 in 100 who's too crafty to fall that way. After I got some of those guys, I'd grant them immortality - I'd only need about 3 in the whole organization.
My evil plan would be:
a) Keep making stupid minions whose sole job is to get caught so I can monitor how good the church is getting at finding me
b) I'd introduce translation errors in some of the popular bibles such as NIV. I'd sow confusion by painting the devil's number as 665 and 667... I'd make sure dead sea scroll show up and split the faithful over verbiage
c) I would NOT try to get my evil guy into the seat of the pope. I would work hard to break in a good pope who I hold on a leash (Think Wellington Yueh). This is the best guy cause he can pass any radars, right? Everyone trusts him. Once he's in place, he doesn't need to last long... 8 months should do. I'll find sneaky ways to break the succession so the next guy they choose is also tainted. Give me 370 years, I bet I could do it.
I think 1876 would have been good. Hit the cardinals I don't control with the plague right before a big vote... sneak my suk-doctor-pope in. Then off him and replace him with my real guy. Then use my real guy to find and destroy some of the idiots working for me who I don't like, thereby validating he can root out agents of the beast.
"90 years": That's only ten popes or so. Might be harder for my evil plan to get a guy in the key spot in this time. I'd have done it during WWI then use the 1918 H1N1 to ratify guy #2.
"25 Years": Virtually impossible
You can see the pattern in all these ideas. Sneak someone in, and tilt the scales. Then feed him to the machine and back off. Wait till everyone dies off and pull the trigger.
Question: How relevant is the time scale? What are the shortest and longest time you've looked at?
258 2021-01-03 02:50:32
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Edit: Not to suggest your sharp-eyed monk can't spot the discrepancy... but the wording is key
259 2021-01-03 02:43:18
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Note that your time period is generally considered the "birth" of modern statistical analysis. Though the Greeks as far back as Aristotle understood a "midrange" or a "mean", things like averages, medians, or modes would not be possible on large data sets (unless you had a decent abacus!).
A casual google suggests median pops into existence around 1599
http://jse.amstat.org/v11n1/bakker.html
and you can see how theoretical it is from Example 4:
...obtain the arithmetic mean or mid-range can be justified if certain assumptions are defensible, i.e., that the underlying distribution is at least approximately symmetrical ...
260 2020-12-31 11:13:40
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Hard to believe the show only ran 3 seasons. Feels like 10
261 2020-12-09 11:09:48
Re: Project R (23 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
@Rachel: I did some digging into the gender issue.
So scholars generally say angels are androgynous. I dug into why they say so, and it seems to boil down to the bible using a male pronoun, so no one's really too sure if gender really applies to them.
In other words, we don't believe there are female angels simply because the bible never mentions any. I find this assumption rather fascinating to be sure.
Of, so since I have created my own gender problem, I have been careful throughout both Project L and Project R to never cal them "men" and "women" which would be human terns created long after angels existed. For the record, I'm unconcerned with achieving biblical accuracy, but I wonder if scholars have penned themselves into a logical quagmire where if a female angel one day showed up, they may have to ask her to cease to exist.
262 2020-12-07 23:44:10
Re: Too many exclamation marks? (7 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
As a healthy recipient of the too many exclamation marks, I wish to note that my characters tend to run into/out-of burning buildings, explosions, and crashing vehicles more than most.Certainly your current story factors in, and definitely Galaxy Tales.
There's only so sedately you can yell Fire! or Watch out for that car!
263 2020-11-22 02:08:35
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
A star wars staple (even in the books) is a desert world, which is pretty much impossible in a star-faring society.
Kim Stanley Robinson's Mars colonization series even nods to this because they take ice comets and do low orbit runs for like 20 years to build the planet's water reserves. It costs pennies to deflect a comet if you have broken the fossil fuel barrier. So ya, I can see Herbert's point-- at least he had a purpose for the desert world
264 2020-11-15 19:08:42
Re: How to handle lots of dialogue within dialogue? (16 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Hi Dirk
What you have here is something my editor would throw red ink at, it's telling backstory through dialogue.
Hamlet, Prince of Denmark, entered the graveyard. He was upset at his step father, Claudius, for marrying his mother Gertrude. His friend Horatio agreed.
Crowd: Don't do this. We don't need all this backstory. Show us the heart of the character and the action.
Writer: What defines action?
Crowd: What the characters say or do
Writer: Oh! That's easy!
Hamlet: "I am Hamlet, Prince of Denmark"
Horatio: "How do you feel about your mother, Gertrude, marrying Claudius?"
Hamlet: "So soon after my father's death, yea the cakes were not yet cooled. Forsooth, I was upset at Claudius."
Now, aside from the fact that Shakespeare pretty much did exactly this, it's getting a little frowned on because it doesn't produce natural two-way dialogue. It tends to sound like people stating facts for an invisible 3rd person.
Doesn't help you here, but chipping it in because I see Linda has detected that and straightened it back into narrative like my editor would.
Also note that the danger of the moment is in the past at which point Luke's actions may cause the narrator danger. This method removes any chance of such suspense by punting the danger into the past (admittedly another trick the Great Bard got away with).
265 2020-11-09 03:44:51
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
New post forthcoming?
266 2020-11-08 19:20:57
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Palpatine being back is actually consistent with the books, believe it or not. In Episode 3 they mention some Jedi/Sith can cheat death and he reasons that caving himself cloned is a decent backup plan for the unexpected ( But cloning Darth Vader is not ). Ironically, the books did the clone wars worse than the movies which kind of treaded lightly
267 2020-11-08 14:07:01
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I actually haven't seen 9. Gave up on the franchise. Rogue One had a pleasant ending, but that's been the only one I liked in the past 21 years. Time to cut my losses lol
268 2020-10-31 14:50:51
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
My target audience is Catholic thriller readers
Q: Does Clairedeplume satisfy both conditions? (Catholic and thriller-reader)
Also, do you have a band within that spectrum? For example age strata or maturity within the available content?
For example, Project L is targeting "Vampire/Werewolf fans" but within that wide discipline, I'm chasing the market of Twilight fans who love/loved it but have grown tired of the genre. My target market is between ages 35-55 (Hence why I put the story in the 90s). I assume 75% female readership, so I conform to their needs (for example, I've read that my market is fed up with OW/cheating stories within the genre)
Ok, so for yours...
Q: are you writing to the catholic who will watch a violent Rambo movie and thinks Dan Brown is mild?
Q: if there is an ecstatic review in some blog or column, how old is that blogger? (This question is probably more important than it first seems)
269 2020-10-31 13:09:47
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
That reminds me, you have a post above from 10-29 with my name and character name together. Would you be willing to nix it?
I'm not super worried about the Google-monster, but ever vigilant
Ok as to your question, I had asked before if your target market was reading Dan Brown, and you indicated you were going for a more moderate crowd, but I still don't have a solid idea who your reader is. I recogniize I've been desensitized to violence because I just read about a young boy being stabbed and didn't bat an eye. Granted this problem, I understand how escalating violence could be an issue.
More food for thought: Project L is not a good fit for this site because we don't have tons of Twilight fans here. That's perfectly fine; I filter comments with this in mind. You may be stuck in this situation too. This will take some work to overcome... you'll need to build a platform where your market is. You'll need one anyway, when it's time to release. Honestly, the time to start building is now.
270 2020-10-29 22:16:57
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Not really screwed. If you browse my catalogue, you'll discover I only put my name on about half my covers. Part of a plan to stay at the sidelines
271 2020-10-29 01:44:16
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
o dear
272 2020-10-28 17:20:50
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Works.
Another option is Connor heals everyone with the same action. I think this has weak new testament precedent though
273 2020-10-26 09:06:38
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
--er don't care is not the right word... "accept its flaws"?
274 2020-10-26 09:06:00
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
No worries... it's deep enough into the series that only die hard fans will be reading it. I've noticed this with modern Star Wars fans. They just don't care about the continuum.
275 2020-10-26 03:41:21
Re: Mother of Grub (17 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Can you leave some errors in there so we can get points?