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Curious how they arrived at this number

wait, what?

loop*

Isn't this an imposed variant on his research?

In one of mine I did l,w,h,anode (mirrored cathode).

Past four, things get exponentially complex and you'll have diminishing returns. I remember trying to hit 6-d and re-reading it later, things get incomprehensible.

Whichever you choose, may I suggest you merely note plot holes and move on rather then go back and try to fix them? That's my current method. VQF had about half a doren (but all the chapter notes were lost in the Great Crash). The one you might recall is where the team moves from Imager's island to the station and Roberta was there but was supposedly left behind. I merely noted at chapter end "continuity oops!" but ploughed forward.

Both this and 4D space are current terms (4th dimension nominally considered time and extra space is what I get when I clean my closet).

Consider "Pentaspace"  (example only -- don't use these ideas lol)

Example: The ship's P-Drive fired up, bringing the ship close to pentaspace translation.
(Reader: "Translation" sounds like this might be hyperspace-like)
(Writer: Similar only. Objects in p-space can be observed from outside)

Example: The ship turned, aiming its pentacannon. St-J had her ships race to keep it broadside. The beam couldn't be stopped by shields or anything in the physical dimension.
(Reader: Ah, so a beam can achieve a sort of hyperspace velocity? So, then they can send a low-power signal home for help?)
(Writer: No. High diffusion rate keeps it within x km)

If you had your own terms, you could fudge the rules around any plot hole. I think that's the problem you're running into. Trying to use hyperspace would lock you in as much as using "tardis" because in both cases it ties your hands to someone else's imagination. UNLESS you simply use hyperspace and redefine it as you need rather than use someone else's definition (A rough count in wikipedia easily finds over a dozen variations)

Dune uses pleeenty of handwavium on that and just gets on with the story. We're given to understand the ship does not travel through normal space and is in a web of cosmic worm holes that would be impossible to navigate without prescience. We don't get how the ship powers itself there and how it exists, or reads energy signatures etc.

Dune's engine therefore would not support a cosmic space battle. The only ship battles I can recall involve the ship entering the atmosphere and operating as a normal object (Except the No-ships, but even the Dune characters would call them magic)

Edit: Dune's power and beauty is part of the original writer's abstractness. When the son came along and explain how the Tleilaxu cloning tanks work, all the magic of the father's build ended in logical but crushing realism.

mattergy? Wouldn't that just be plasma?

I was curious if the appearance of the peppers was part of his descent into madness. It would probably work on the page

You have some self-inflicted wounds in this first scene, but I think easily solved next pass.

For example, Lucifer says '...but You'll never win'
And it really caught my attention because would Lucifer really add the capitalized reverence... or is it a translated reverence (assuming they're speaking some language that existed with romanized letters at inception (Sadly, even Aramaic won't do)). This creates a horrible linguistic rabbit hole.

I cannot tolerate imperfection within My perfect creation.
This launches yet another rabbit hole. If the creation is perfect, then so is Lucifer (being part of that creation?). Thus the perfection means Lucifer can also freely create? Also, would God revere himself?

[whether or not God would refer to Satan as Satan or as Lucifer]
Shaitan sounds distinctly human, and for God to use it is kinda mocking, which is not how he's presented in scripture

Lastly, the speech between them is distinctively modern. Some random examples:
Eg: Your church is so feeble => Your church is feeble
Eg: The church tolerates so much division => Division runs rampart within the ranks of Y/your church
Eg: I won't need to get complicated. They just need to be introduced =>  ???
I'd consider stripping contractions and pragmatics. Example: I won't get complicated => I need not engage in petty strife (Don't use this, it's a terrible suggestion but best way I could think off the top of my head to dance around the "won't")... the 'just' is also super modern. Maybe "They need but be introduced" or even remove entirely. So the most eye-catching terms: so, just, even, such.

Re contractions example: Hell isn't in my future => Hell lies not in my future
DISCLAIMER!!! All these suggestions are aimed at you wanting the reader to hit the ground running one page 1 paragraph 1 with God and Satan speaking. If this IS how they normally speak and will do so for the rest of the title, it's fine as-is

You ask why I didn't review for the points, I say I need a few more chapters to better grasp the wider context

Very detailed. I did a casual google of the Holy Land and came up with https://www.seetheholyland.net/ which is not even close

Hey JR. What you do this wintery month?

Star Craft used Confederacy but they boldly leaned right into the civil war aspect down to the character's accents. lol
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ftQoP47wTRo