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176 2024-04-28 14:45:52
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,492 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
177 2024-04-25 08:41:13
Re: etc (68 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Ever hear of a 24 page prologue?
There's a rare good prologue in 2001's Dawn of Man (https://screenrant.com/2001-space-odyss … nal-scene/).
I could go on long rants on this topic but I can sum it down to: I buy a lot of non-Big-5-work from the market and have learned to peek past the prologue before making a buying decision.
178 2024-04-24 23:18:56
Re: etc (68 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
hah, yes, I always auto-skip prologues. I'm one of the eeevil people (muahahahaha)
179 2024-04-24 04:07:14
Re: etc (68 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I wish I remembered where I heard this, but to paraphrase: introduce characters like their names are a new word. I’m 80% sure my source (I’ll update this if I find the video I got this from) worked with little kids learning to read once. She said that, as kids read, they would hold up a finger for each word they came across they didn’t know. If they got to five, they would stop and ask for help. This was to make sure kids were reasonably challenged by the stories but not overwhelmed.
She then goes on to say this same principle can be applied to character intros. Readers don’t know who these people are, so their names are “new” and lack meaning. Introducing one or two or even three on one page can be fine, but if you’re front loading all of the names/intros on one or two pages readers may feel more overwhelmed. Try to keep track of who’s introduced when and how frequently these introductions happen.
180 2024-04-18 00:27:46
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,492 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
If I read correctly, you don't need a unique soul. You only need Campagna's DNA added to the existing batch. Why not kidnap her and make a few more Connors.
UNLESS the backup Connors won't have souls in which case abortion is okay because pregnancies don't create souls?
181 2024-04-17 11:39:41
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,492 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Sorry, I might have missed it but:
the mother's DNA as the source of why Connor is much more powerful, the geneticist could be the one who verifies that her DNA augments the DNA that Satan bred into the kids he used
Why stop at only one Connor? Why not make backups?
182 2024-04-15 00:21:54
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,492 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Neutral thoughts here. I feel it's a lot to pack into 3 books, but will have to wait to see the execution
183 2024-04-13 04:35:10
Re: Bugs & Maintenance Requests (153 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Emails are actually quite hard. So many services are on the look-out for mass Emails with slightly similar bodies, you can land your server on RBLs within minutes. Same with SMS these days. My own phone company (Rogers) is on one which makes me laugh. Every time they try to text me their latest offer, my phone tosses it into junk without asking.
This will not be easy to solve, I fear
184 2024-04-11 23:41:40
Re: Bugs & Maintenance Requests (153 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Sadly, I haven't found a way to circumvent that client-side on Chrome
185 2024-04-11 08:35:56
Re: Bugs & Maintenance Requests (153 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
I typically get kicked out after about 15-20 minutes.
Mayhap you're on chrome? The secure=false would do that
186 2024-04-09 01:03:57
Re: Bugs & Maintenance Requests (153 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
I see the cookie issue has been scrubbed off the face of the planet by the Big Crash so in summary, three points
1) Some cookies have a rapid expiry. For example, I logged in today and 4 out of 8 cookies are set to expire a bit after midnight (~five hrs)
2) Five cookies have invalid domains (leading "dot"). Some are "secure"=false, which I believe causes Chrome to auto-discard (but not Firefox, oddly)
3) Some cookies have invalid expiry dates into 2026. This should not exceed 400 days or the browser is allowed to ignore it (https://discourse.mozilla.org/t/cookie- … pan/105916)
187 2024-04-06 10:42:41
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,492 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Teens are horny because teens used to marry for most of human history.
Clarification: It wasn't God who created the capacity for premarital sex. In 1653, mankind made it possible
188 2024-04-06 10:38:33
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,492 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Connor is still mad at Satan at the beginning of book two, and he looks for ways to piss him off. So, he starts talking about marrying one of the Goth twin girls he's sleeping with, But since he slept with both of them, who does he marry? :-)
I have my main with twins if I ever get around to posting. Though the girls don't remain twins for long because he got a lot of enemies. Sorry spoilers (but the story does nothing to hide this).
Later, he asks the gay kid he's trying to seduce if the kid is a virgin.
This could go south with the reader as easily as it could be a home run. My suggestion here is write where it leads but during revisions try to view it from all angles.
Connor then explains that if We had intended teenagers to abstain from all sex acts, we wouldn't have made you so horny.
Teens are horny because teens used to marry for most of human history. Back-checking on google, in 1610 the age of consent was 12. The act of 1653 moved it up to 14 (Women) 16 (Men)
189 2024-04-06 10:28:21
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,492 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Don't put it in Eden if you don't want them to touch it
Is still an issue of free will. If you don't want them to touch it, move it five miles south (so someone else can touch it)?
Nay, why create it at all? If you don't have the tree, and there is no decision, everyone is happy, right? No one can disobey in the absence of options.
Yet, Lucifer didn't face such a choice, yet sin still occurred.
190 2024-04-06 02:18:17
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,492 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
(Disclaimer: My mom is also not a theologian, but I already know what she would say. If I actually presented this, it would be a 5000 word essay amounting to the same). I'll paraphrase her below for simplicity.
Regarding teenagers masturbating, since they supposedly have no need for ejaculating before marriage, why would God give them the ability beforehand? It serves no useful purpose.
Mom: OT says if you are married you stay married. If you're not married and you have sex, you are now effectively married (reference, Judges 14:7; Samson's first gf). Interpretation: So if two tweens have sex and ejaculation occurs, they must now marry (after the deed) or be stoned.
Murdering someone = killing someone, although for unacceptable reasons.
Mom: Murder = lake of fire
(*Me: It seems like there are exceptions such as murder by state, eg: stoning)
And killing someone is sometimes necessary (e.g., in defence of yourself or others).
Mom: You were attacked, you respond in kind. If they didn't murder you, you cannot murder back.
(*Me: But Abraham murdered the bandits who kidnapped his wife. Mom: Well that was okay because God said so)
191 2024-04-05 17:28:08
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,492 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Also not a theologian but...
In a similar vein, the Catholic Church says teens will go to Hell if they masturbate. Why would God give teens the ability to masturbate, only to turn around and expect kids not to do so?
My mom (Jew) would say God also gives us the ability to murder with the expectation not to do so.
eg: Both are sins, but you have free will to engage if you really want to sin.
===insert devil's advocate part ===
Me (Converted): The specific passage in the bible is where the guy wastes his seed by spilling it at the side of the bed.
9 And Onan knew that the seed should not be his; and it came to pass, when he went in unto his brother's wife, that he spilled it on the ground...
10 And the thing which he did displeased the Lord: wherefore he slew him also.
The scene suggests God doesn't want seed wasted. So we get the rules that you can't masturbate and you can't use contraception.
Why was the Lord displeased? Was it really because of the spilled seed? Or was it because Onan was sleeping with someone else's wife?
192 2024-03-28 04:16:03
Re: The Archangel Syndrome (309 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
since that much energy from the fired weapon could easily wipe out the destroyers without breaking a sweat, I need a way for most of that energy to not make it to the targets;
Why? Just blow up / eradicate a few of the good-guy ships and save the weakest and last shot for St James.
193 2024-03-27 08:36:16
Re: The Archangel Syndrome (309 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I don't recommend *overly* worrying about physics.
After all, if you can "see" a laser being fired, it's probably not a laser but rather something much slower.
It's probably also wasting energy into the visible spectrum in some direction other than it's going (eg has a moving point of emission (effusion?) or other)
If your ship's computers can "see" an attack before it strikes, the attack was already slower than light or there's handwavium.
If you can see a turret "warming up" (before shooting a light blast) you might ask how so much infrared energy escaped and how such radiation eclipsed higher energy signatures.
am I not still stuck with the inverse square law?
Well, yes, until you need magic to break it. Will you adhere to known rules or will you side-step when required?
194 2024-03-26 02:56:47
Re: The Archangel Syndrome (309 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
If you decide to keep milkers, consider dropping creamers
195 2024-03-26 02:55:52
Re: The Archangel Syndrome (309 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Two other names currently percolating in my head are "juicer" and "milker". And if I really want to go nuts, I could call it a cow
These names really stick out to me, in a Starship Troopers way.
And I'm thinking back to Frank Herbert. How does one get "The Spice Must Flow" to sound cool? There is honestly nothing cool about "Make my Mustard Run" or "Let the Ketchup Drip". Yet somehow "The Spice Must Flow" works.
I think that's what's hitting me: Mustard, juice, ketchup, milk. Perhaps it needs to be more generic.
(Brainstorm Mode Enabled!)
Ok a neutrino-energy converter works on clusters of neutrinos so the energy pools internally until there's enough to make a controlled release. So "Drippers" informally for the engine and "percolate" for the process. "Dammit man, an energy converter isn't a coffee machine, we don't have all day to watch it percolate"
(Brainstorm Mode Off!)
That makes me think of coffee too much. Must continue to fire neurons at the problem
196 2024-03-22 05:59:08
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,492 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Edit: What I mean is, as a reader, I've been led to believe Rey Skywalker is acting under her own goals and direction. To learn she does not exist (eg is someone else) is sheer "Fight Club" levels of twist. Add to that, she's also in love with Palpatine but didn't know it. Oh and Palpatine is the local cashier.
It'll be some work to help the reader past this. I bid you luck on that front ![]()
197 2024-03-22 05:53:14
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,492 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Since Connor never had a soul of his own, he technically doesn't exist.
Indeed. I see by the long write-up that you understand the implications of the arrangement.
Along the lines of Rey Skywalker turning to the camera and says "Actually, I've been Anakin all along" this is going to be a big leap for your reader to manage. You'll need to do a long of prep-work to help them bridge it.
198 2024-03-21 05:48:43
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,492 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Connor and Adam, both of whom share a soul and are finally cognisant of each other, take turns being in control
I'm worried you might be (plotting) yourself into a future dead-end.
Can you quantify "share a soul"?
I mean, if someone clocks me over the head and I spend 20 years thinking I'm a new person with my own history etc then an (undefined incident) reminds me of both my original life and the new one, is that a "shared soul"?
If I learned I shared a soul with a cat from biblical times, and my friends built a machine to turn me back into the original soul, can I logically say "No, I don't want to be a cat"
a) If I can deny my previous state, do I now count as a new soul?
b) If my "cat-ness" jumps out and says, "nah man, be a cat again", did anything in my pseudo-life have meaning (aside from a 18-year-long feline dream)?
199 2024-03-20 02:34:08
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,492 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I happened to notice that this thread has been viewed over 145,000 times. I was a bit freaked by the number until I looked at the whole forum. My old Galaxy Tales thread has been viewed 280K times. Sorcerer's Progress, 360K. And Amy still holds the record at 465K for her Acts+ thread! Yay, Amy.
Yeh, ran some stats on it, and Amy thread, in the past five days, has picked up around a hundred views a day.
E. Free's thread served as my basis, pulling an average of 75 hits per night.
So probably just bot traffic looking for something titillating or AIs learning how to emulate us.
I'm pretty certain an AI considers a forum a treasure trove of non-copyrighted learning.
200 2024-03-18 15:11:21
Re: The Archangel Syndrome (309 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I couldn't find anything online about what part of the spectrum is fired by star destroyers.
I went on a random google check and came back rather dizzy with how much work Star Wars has done to try to make its magic realish. And failed because every fact they try to apply breaks something else.
Also, anyone care to suggest a part of the EM spectrum
This one is actually easy. They should use the part of the spectrum the human eye can see. Because who wants a movie of star ships just sitting there and not appear to be doing anything, then one randomly blows up.