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Making it into a dream is far more subtle.

Opinion is the HG part scales things against the bad guys too much. A few selective deletions might keeps things more balanced.

I'm just going to delete the lines so you can see what I see:

I must have written it, but not being able to remember it (same day, 12 hours later), I wonder if I intended to reply to another site and had the wrong window up (viable as I swap windows a lot). Or if I had hit send on a draft, thinking I'd refined it.

Firefox history agrees I was not on tnbw at this time, so both me and my browser do not remember this. Well, I was at work at the time, but let's pretend I had time to check in here. I'll assume this for now.

This is odd. Does anyone see the same attribution I am

You could have the spirits look like the arrancar from Bleach. Would give them moxie

Here's me wasting twelve words when a simpler turn of phrase would do: She frowned, suddenly a little scared. Or better: She felt nervous.

I sometimes shorten my overlong setups, but I never swap to: Her brow furrowed. She frowned would be my pick.

I generally avoid involuntary movements unless it brings out some important characteristic.

So we have Laurie in a suddenly crashing air plane...

True, her eyebrows shoot up. I mean she's as surprised as I am.
True, her fingers curl around the arm rests. Mine would too

Reality of her POV is staring at the ground rushing toward her. Oxygen masks dropping. Dull screams from the adjoining cabin or a steward losing his footing.

It's a question of where the camera is pointed. Are we looking out from the POV seeing where they look vs turned to stare down the POV and how they react

Zombies move quite quickly in World War Z.
https://gamerant.com/fast-zombie-trope- … ays-later/

Apparently the deadline is the 28th but registration opens on the 17th (eg tomorrow). This is good because I have 3 mandatory chapters to pen and 2 optional. I can churn through 3 chapters comfortably by Thursday. I could rush them all on Sunday but they'll read rushed, so I better pace myself.

WordPerfect acutally has 4 dashes (counting hypen)

A-
A–
A‒
A—

The review site where I'm getting my spellcheck done. They have a (seemingly) semi-annual full book review thing where 2-3 users will do an end-to-end.

I posted my dark-angel book and they came back with buckets of useful stuff. They said MC cries too much (Three times in 100k words). I had thought three was okay, but for strangers to catch this independently really is problematic.

I figure I'll pen the last bit of VQF in the next 9-10 days then out it up both over there and here. It'll be a good indication if all that padding has turned it into a yawner. My gut feeling is no, it's fine but ya never know.

Apparently the older model worked well enough, so I see no issue going back to it

What are your posting plans for this vs Connor?

I've been kinda following in the background but haven't reviewed as yet. Curious which one is higher on your radar for completion.