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Ugh: https://www.seriouseats.com/sriracha-to … ize-or-not

They're capitalizing "niche" when it's used in the general.

Just when I thought I had evicted all the capitals in general use, now my head's boiling

A further passage I can think of if the above isn't a chapter-closer:

A sound follow-up paragraph, however this concept will raise a lot of questions about if the boy is Connor leading her. You might best do such a scene with three girls (eg MacBeth) but even then the story would need to explain how witches figure into the scheme of things. You could maybe do a Hugin Munin pair then turn around and say each was a familiar spirit to the first humans .

Just brainstorming. Don't use any of this

If I didn't write it, I believe we've discovered a clue trail to the weird log-outs

Even in a private browsing tab, the site attributes that quote to me. But I'm staring at it wonder why I would quote Hitchcock. Starting to wonder if it's confused me with someone else

mm, but the thing about them is not "scary enough" but rate, how much damage can they inflict on your life. And this feels kinda Hitchcock now that I say it

I didn't get why the spirit would look like the owner... one assumes that spirit isn't the original manufacturer model and would look like the possessor

Very much so. "Laurie raised her eyebrows" would be my preferred approach because I'm almost always character-centric looking out.

I just word-searched it and found zero cases of eyebrows moving up (or down) without the POV character's intent. I have one jaw-drop in there. I put that one in deliberately to serve as a dialogue tag / to break up another characters speech flow.

This technique may not work for you, especially in a multi-POV story so YMMV. It can also get wordy. For example, I'll avoid saying "POV character was scared" or "POV character was surprised". Instead I waste time showing the event and hope the reader infers it. Reviewers may hit certain scenes with "how did POV react?" so I know I need to put more words there or trim it all out and have a simple "scared" or "startled"

grumpies makes me think of carebears

I should probably draw myself a map while all these locales are fresh in my head. I miraculously remembered the garden is on deck ten, but I'm reading the previous version and there's an accidental (seemingly) allusion to deck 15. Or had I meant to imply that the fight spilled down from deck ten five levels to arrive there. I can't remember why I did that.

Time to get this show on the road. er-- into space

I had a weirdly fortunate PC crash before saving my latest round of edits. Somehow the version went back from Aug-08 to Jul-31 (evening) so 48 hours of edits. So I got to stitch back the new version with a bit of text-compare on various versions

Oddly, I caught my em-dashes were different between the versions (I found this because the paragraph length would change and I ran my compares). I tend to write without a space–like this. Reviewers suggest adding one – to give a gap and reduce confusion with hyphen.

So I corrected them to add the gap, but as I add new content I tend to flip back to my default. Oops. Maybe I should wait until final draft before tacking punctuation.