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I think I should switch tracks back to my "main" story. I'm a whopping 25 chapters ahead of TNBW in my revisions there.

It will take me about 80 chapters to bring this beast to heel, which will probably land at a monstrous footprint of 250k words. Word-count is irrelevant, however. I plan to drip this as a serial when going to Amazon, maybe 2 chapters per week? At that rate, I already have 15 weeks of posts. Once I hit 52 weeks, I should be safe to start posting.

I'd rather have the complete revisions done up so I don't have any deadline/guillotine swinging over my neck

which story are you working on these days? Seems like Connor edits?

I wish to present my original theorem that we all get kicked off, not just the one mod

I was kicked off too

If by this question you ask were they a specific race, then yes mine were the "Eldren". They were typically 4D beings, and kind of immortal galactic rulers, and somewhat hostile if not indifferent to the mains.

They could slip out of the 3D ("plane" if you will) and observe from outside. It was impossible to withhold secrets as they could necessarily see anything they choose to look at such as the inside of a safe. No walls could stop them should they choose to introduce themselves right into the heart of your fortress. They could also duplicate themselves, if you can picture a 3D person folding a 2D space so he intersects it twice, thus appearing in two different places to a 2D creature.

To counteract their power, I made gravity harmful to them and upped their energy requirements so they need hot stars and will gradually freeze in the deep orbits. This essentially keeps them off Earth-like worlds, giving my cast some breathing room

I dabbled  with 4D and 5D creatures in my main series but in the rewrite, planning to leave it out. Waaay too hard to explain when a character unties a perfect knot by an easy tug

Well, Dirk found enough bugs to keep me dancing 'til the end of the month, but that's part of the fun lol

Disregard any VQE posts you see cropping up. That's gonna be written at molasses-pace since I'm mainly running edits of the angels story

I noticed the snap transformation in Captain America. Don't recall if it's the recent or the one from the 80's.
I think you can get away with supernatural

Hmm well, one expects a Christ-like figure to have figured out the head of his foe or a foe's 2iC and be able to diffuse any situation. We're given the impression he could have easily dodged the cross by giving Pilate straight answers.

That said, it's your story, so sell the violence if you can

Re: the spectators winced and let out a collective, "Ooh"
I'm thinking that shouldn't be dialogue. Would make your life much easier.

Example: The crowed cried, "boo!"
Easier: The crowd booed.