Hmm well, one expects a Christ-like figure to have figured out the head of his foe or a foe's 2iC and be able to diffuse any situation. We're given the impression he could have easily dodged the cross by giving Pilate straight answers.
That said, it's your story, so sell the violence if you can
Argh. "Thank you, captain" or "Thank you, Captain"
I wouldn't say "Thank you, Bus Driver" but https://www.grammarly.com/blog/punctuat … ob-titles/ says this also capitals as it is replacement for a name.
Okay, shoot me now x.x
Re: the spectators winced and let out a collective, "Ooh"
I'm thinking that shouldn't be dialogue. Would make your life much easier.
Example: The crowed cried, "boo!"
Easier: The crowd booed.
Reduced refresh rate for Spiders from every 12hrs to every 24.
I'd like to see at least four export options: Word, WordPerfect, HTML, OpenOffice.
A "Full thread in HTML" may drop first since that's the lowest amount of dev work
Imagine uploading not just your story but also reader-comments and random inspiring images you found along the way. Link to discussion threads... ideally everything about your story can arrive in one place
Backup site now supports uploading files into personal folders.
The hammer is a nice touch
Neither of these really digs into the moment of someone banging your door, looking to murder you.
Specifically, I need to know where a computer-literate user gets stuck. From there, I must decide if it's a UI issue or a needs-tutorial issue. Not much hope for a novice, for sure... but I'm not sure how many people in that strata are seeking automated backup
I've configured the site to refresh every 12 hrs, but it should give immediate feedback / results
Ahoy Dirk
Can you try making a copy of your thread on the backup site?
It's currently too many steps, but I need outside opinions before I devise my next tier of simplifications.
you have to work every day to feed and clothe yourself
Minor q: What's the penalty for killing your neighbour and taking his food and clothes?
Any penalty from eating thy neighbour and/or taking his wife?
Apparently Russell Crowe had a role on Gilligan's Island. Wowza... I wonder who else was on there
Joulestones is overly accurate. They'd realistically be called (inaccurately) Wattstones
if you pick x-stone, I recommend dropping "hyperbattery" entirely since the term makes me wonder what a non-hyperbattery is like and if it can be substituted, as Musk likely will have to unless his hyperbattery factory can get the numbers out
Cheerio & Welcome aboard
"Don't eat this fruit because it contains bad-ju-ju knowledge" becomes an omission if God also plans ahead of time to kick them out of the Garden of Eden for eating it.
Here, I sense God doesn't know at the time of statement that he plans to give them the boot... but for arguments sake, lets assume his omniscience has told him they will eat it. Leaving out the "...also kicked out" part may unfairly pressure them to not make a fair choice. And omission is not technically a deception.
Not lying, but an omission of fact
Now you probably see why I'd rather not add a loop to this story as well.
> Removes the alternate timeline headache
No, the other loop. The one where the end times already occurred. Satan's back at it again because he's been released.
+Add the Eucharist as "in progress"
You can still adjust the 2nd round of end-times to suit your story's needs with a new challenge, the original inerrant bible has been preserved since those events played out as prophesized.
The loop concept would seem to be compatible with the Eucharist and an inerrant bible, unless I misread
The other alternative I also considered right from the beginning was to sidestep multiple timelines (2 in this case) and have God give the prophets a vision of the future that is identical to our future.
A third alternative is that the end-times we have in our prophecies already occurred and Satan has been freed from his confinement, (and that our "universe" was reset to see if he could lead mankind back down the rabbit hole a second time.
And cast him into the bottomless pit, and shut him up, and set a seal upon him, that he should deceive the nations no more, till the thousand years should be fulfilled: and after that he must be loosed a little season.
Upon being released, desperate to not go back into purgatory, Satan could make the wager. Since all the prophecies already came to pass, they could happen slightly differently on this iteration
there might be parts that God fogs Satan's mind...
Except if God fogs someone's mind such that they end up in the lake of fire, is the punishment still fair?
However, the surest way to bring society to a halt, even if only briefly, is some event that takes down the bureaucracy's electronic systems, such as a massive solar flare
In VQF I went with a block-chain engine for identification, so even should Earth randomly fall into the sun and be incinerated, the rest of the solar system will continue to function without it.
The "ID" is a "bioprint" which is never fully defined in the series, but one story mentions that it has your DNA as a header/prefix and you can always message "down" to your next of kin even if they change their "phone number" using the DNA prefix (Obv this doesn't work across adoptions).
So if you're 45-light-minutes from Earth, you can instantly spend money from your bank account where you have access to lock your part of the block-chain rather than have to wait for a message to your bank to make the two-way trip (90 minutes is a long wait to buy a coffee)
The main problem with these, I think, is that Joseph and Apollo don't meet at all in novellas 1 and 3, only in novella 2 and briefly at the end of novella 4. Naturally, they regularly interact via Galaxinet
Do they need to meet often? In my main series it's not until book 4 (not even novella 4) that my sword-wielding-girl-who-lops-off-heads even comes out of the woodwork. J3nna shows up in the book after that, so she's an even longer wait. Good things age well with anticipation
