I have three whole hours…wait…two and half hours to write without ANY children being present. Husband is also elsewhere, going to a convention with his buddies to drink, draw, and have some quality no-baby time.
Best get cracking.
I commit to writing 300 words.
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It is. The shot is called Rhogam in the US. It is an autoimmune thing. You know how your blood type is called something like A or B positive or negative? The + or - antigen is something that causes transfusion reactions (which is why you have to know your 'blood type'. So an A+ carrier can get a transfusion of A- blood without a big deal, (because they carry the antigen and the (-) blood doesn't. The reverse is not true. A(-) bloodtypes have to get negative blood.
This is why O negative blood is the universal donor. There are no A, B, or (+) antibodies in it.
Soooooo. If a negative mother has a child by a Rh(+) male, she can successfully carry the first pregnancy. Then the baby/mother's blood gets mixed during birth. Then the Rh (-) mother gets antibodies to the foreign blood and recognizes any further Rh (+) pregnancies as foreign. This makes the mother miscarry the baby.
SIL= sister in law? Otherwise, you are writing something about my character that I don't know about :-)
Correction. Chapter 4. Book 1.
Review done. Good job.
OK, graphic alert. Anybody who doesn't want to read the dirty details can skip this.
Sustain is the key word. He could probably wake up with an erection, but can't sustain it long enough to ejaculate. Therefore, his attentions with C were rushed. He had to penetrate with little notice. She wasn't prepped or properly…lubricated. Therefore, sex was painful. Especially since she wasn't experienced.
Then he stops, knowing that the deed isn't done. However, he blames her for his inability to finish. Or (even worse) pretends that he is done to avoid embarrassment. At that point, she has been penetrated and thinks that there is a chance for a baby. I would guess that he wouldn't have the heart to tell her otherwise. Initially, C would be happy that she pleased him.
After multiple failures, she starts noticing that he isn't interested in her. Based on the lack of erections. I would imagine that a virile man with multiple children would be humiliated by this lack and C's presence would be a constant reminder of his deficiency.
NJC, sorry about the Kell (+) antigen. Here is a link. It explains it better than I can.
ED is about not getting it up.
Parasympathetic pathways, 'P' ut it up
Sympathetic pathways, 'S' hoot it out.
DIfferent nerve endings are affected. ED can have so many different reasons. Something as simple as a monster prostate gland (which naturally gets bigger as a male ages) can interfere with fertility. It isn't just about the sperm. It can be about the plumbing, the nerves being affected by cancer or chronic disease (like diabetes), the function of the sperm, or the amount of sperm, the shape of the sperm and whether they are good swimmers, etc.
I think that the natural inclination of that time period was to blame the woman. Look at Henry the Eighth. He was the issue. Likely from either syphilis or being Kell (+) in his blood, he fathered only four children despite having multiple wives and mistresses. Yet it was Anne Boleyn who paid the price for not bearing a male heir. (Catherine Howard didn't count. I believe she got caught with her skirts up and went to the chopping block for fooling around with someone other than a king.)
How old was H during the conception of his youngest child? How many years between that and his marriage to C?
The official term is, 'busting a nut'.
Interesting fact of the day: Ruptured testicles often need to be removed surgically. If they are left in place, the guy becomes sterile. The sperm is recognized as a foreign substance by the body because it isn't complete DNA, so the body forms antibodies to the sperm and woooosh. No more babies.
Will repost for points if you want
Janet, the other thing I use in my book is candle marks. There are candles in my world that people burn marked with even points throughout the day The candle burns past that point and I consider it to be an hour. So three candle marks would be three hours.
OK, your corrections have been added to the Jaylene analysis at the end of the last chapter. I added better lighting, description of the teeth, the mar backstory, and bundled (fainted-snicker) Tazar on a stretcher. I kept the last line as a hook.
Janet, I like the idea of Alda using the tail as a joke, but the timing wasn't right. I can't put jokes there without messing with the tension.
Anybody have any thoughts about my improvised stretcher? I'm terribly proud of that one…
Personally, I replaced my time measurement with 'moments' instead of seconds. There isn't really a minute measurement in my world, so I paced time by how many footsteps that people took until they reached a place.
Since there is a Christian presence in your world, have the local church tower call the hour for mass. That way, the faithful count time by when the service starts and end working in the fields when the bells chime at sunset for evening prayer. The bells would act as a reliable clock for people to time their lives and meals.
Another thing is the placement of the sun. High noon, afternoon, sunrise, sunset, dusk, evening. Time used to be easy to keep track of back then. Ex: The cooks would fire the ovens and bake the day's bread. People wake at sunrise or when they smell the cooking. Stomachs rank the passing of time, indicating when the character needs to be fed.
"I'll meet you at the stables after the evening bells ring"
"Be ready to mount up and ride at dusk"
"I'll be ready to meet after the morning bread is done."
Does this help?
I think the female would be larger, pissed, and in a hunting mood. If this was a lone male, then maybe there isn't another one of them laying in wait. That was the thought at the time, at least.
Like the idea of having a horn or ridge plate on their nose. That could be nice distinguishing feature.
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Oh, they can't look under the tail because I threw half the body into the abyss below the waterfall.
Question one: I have 17 whole days off where I don't have to leave the house, bathe, or get out of bed.
Janet, I like the idea of a 'strength' moment being treated like a power moment. Will clarify that Mar mate for life, hunt by scent, the priests and Tazar have either tracked through the blood or are wearing the blood of the mate, and Mar have been known to stalk prey for days.
The creature is a reactor. It hunts anything that smells of Behira. It can also use a magic similar to the rings in Tazar's prison. It can subtly control priests. Contact with Mar are typically disastrous. Yet Tazar knew something was wrong.
I'll correct the story to throw a bone. Great point.
will answer that 'spell' for Tazar in the next chapter. I have most of it figured out. Three more shifts and then I have 17 nights off on a row. Time for some me time. After that, it's back to the coal mines.
Hit by a bus? :-)
Zyrtec worshiping Saundon...hmm. Didn't think about that one, but the 'all knowing' Chronomancer might be drawn to that. I'll consider it.
Re: If Behira's power couldn''t raise Jaylene, does that mean that Alda is someone else's conduit? Not Behira's big sister, surely? (You are asking the right questions, but I'm not going to give up that side of the mystery until you get it right. If that happens, I'll let you know. Promise.)
What do you mean about spelling Tazar? Didn't understand the reference.
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OK, I figured out what was missing from the last posted chapter of Dictates. 300 new words added. Found my hook :-)
Thank you. I think your dragons are pretty cool too. I'm kinda jealous, in fact. You're dragons don't nag me for a Wii U and throw a temper tantrum in the store because we aren't walking out with the gaming system:-)
It would be quicker if you typed while writing instead of chicken scratch on paper. I know it takes a leap of faith, but it makes a big difference in time spent scribing instead of writing. I used to think that time was useful for a second revision, but I've learned better. Just write the next story on the computer. I double dog triple dare you.
I put a really short story about Collin onto the site called, "Translation". It's only 300 words. I've been having a hard time coming up with 1000 word teaching moments, but little things keep popping up. Figured that they are material too and could be inserted between the longer material. What do you guys think of it?
The quote is Galadriel's as she bemoans the loss of knowledge about the One Ring and how it gets loosed onto the world a second time. At least in the movies. I'm sure of it. It starts out the story as she goes into the ring saga.
I never read any of those books and I was part of the 'illuminated' that he refers to back in the 70's and 80's.
The point about Bach's audience (at least to me) is that Bach's genius wasn't understood in the beginning. People just liked the music. Then there was a brief Renaissance where listeners understood the complexity that played during a performance. Then people integrated the information so the techniques were part of the standard curriculum and considered common knowledge. Few people who listen to Bach do it with your understanding of math or music. That job is for the scholars and the performers.
Tolkein via Galadriel: The world is changed. I feel it in the water. I feel it in the earth. I smell it in the air. Much that once was is lost, for none now live who remember it.
Interesting points, but I found it full of ramble and hard to follow. I got the general point, though. The youth of todays average fantasy lover has no grasp on the classics. They don't understand the history that brought them to this place, so they regurgitate 'ground breaking' and watered-down versions of the stories that set the stage for what exists today.
This author is clearly a classic gamer with a rigid idea of what should and shouldn't exist, unimpressed by the swill that the youth in America are patronizing. He's noticed a trend (which I believe he has a point) that the classic version of elf kind has morphed over the years and relates it to the Christian version of Elves (who don't walk around all nobly and steal babies from cribs.)
I heard of most of these classic books because of my friends, but wasn't interested in reading them despite the fact that I was a complete bookworm. The material wasn't what I normally follow. I couldn't chase their preferences without giving up my own. (The exception was the Chronicles of Thomas Covenant, but I started that series because the guy I had a crush on liked it)
As to his belief that all fantasy and science fiction is going to hell, I have a quote to apply. I list it because it was said better than I ever could…
Peter the Hermit AD 1274
"The world is passing through troublous times. The young people of today think of nothing but themselves. They have no reverence for parents or old age. They are impatient of all restraint. They talk as if they knew everything, and what passes for wisdom with us is foolishness with them"
He doesn't have a passport.
Amy's rules of moving based on painful experiences:
1) rent the truck (no really. One of my friends forgot)
2) rent the biggest truck (one hour commutes between loads kills the help)
3) feed me and feed me well (I hate pizza and beer on a hot day without food in the belly can be disastrous)
4) invite twice the people you need since only half will show up.
5) after 10 pm, I protect nothing. Your heirloom China is packing fluff.
6) I'm not there to pack you. I'm there to move you. You get one or the other. Not both.
7) only keep the friends who help you move. (This is the most important)
Just so that I know you saw it.
