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Nope. She is lawful neutral. Though I will check out the link if work ever gives me a moment to breathe.

I think New Jersey is spending a lot of time on character development and this is a great thing. Kirsey or Melayne...it doesn't matter. This is an exercise that lets his style evolve. He is starting with what he knows...writing about his own direct experience and fear of heights.

Melayne isn't as easy for him. He isn't a mother or a woman, so it isn't easy to place himself in her shoes.  Ergo 7 of 9 mentality. She may change in future edits. Or she may stay the same. But the characters will evolve.

Keep it up, New Jersey. I have my Pom poms out and I'm cheering.

I used to have windows.

I disagree with him all the time. Mainly on my reviews of his own work, where he informs me why my advice is wrong. The interesting part is when he changes my mind and makes me agree about his choices. It doesn't happen a lot, but I learn a lot when it does. Then I throw a shoe at my keyboard.

I go through a lot of keyboards this way.

Here is my best answer to your question. The lyrical sing-song nature of sentences like you used reminds me of a dialect. Ex, Middle English. However it is only in random occurrences, so I never get used to the meter. You target certain areas with this dialect/irregular speech pattern. But I don't fall into the pattern without effort.

So your text reads (to me) like Shakespeare done in a rap format. You have a staccato pace to your writing that reads like a drum beat.

I also recognize that this is intentional. As your friend and reviewer, I'm trying to learn from this...trying to figure out what you want to accomplish. So I can help you reach your goals. However, I often fall short. You and I write on very different planes of existence.

That said, I agree with K's assessment 100%. Don't tell him I said that. He is going to gloat. I hate that.

Chapter posted. I had to get the text out of my head before I went back to work. It is coming to crunch time there. We've lost another of my coworkers and are now a skeleton crew. I either work massive overtime or watch another person flake away.

I may be the 'last man standing' in two months. The thought just makes me cry. I'm going to have to train a complete department. If I stay, that is. I'm getting a raise, but I'm not sure I'm up to this.

That may be a good thing for the writing. When I get stressed, I really like to bury myself in unreality.

I'm back.

Note to all...when your credit info is expired, the website defaults to the old card info and won't let you pay. I had to revert to Basic, choose a single group (Premium so I wouldn't lose the points I paid) and then upgrade to Premium and rejoin the Medieval group.

Mischief managed.

The good thing is that I wrote another chapter! Will post soon.

Can I steal the name, then? It would work for Slash or Tazar.

I still like it better for renaming Caneth. Carth is very male sounding. It reads the same as Jack.

I like Carth. Fewer letters in addition to being very male-sounding

Occasions for Norwood residents:

M's birthday.
Solstice
Religious holiday
Patron saint day (renamed because Lizzie1 had a father who kicked the Catholic Church out of England.) that way, you can make it a holiday for anything you want.