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These aren't winged. They are particularly nasty reptiles whose mouths sometimes glow at night because of the phosphorescent algae they pick up from swamp ponds. The have bad breath, and worse flatulence.
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Okay, I've got a few little scenes filled in under B2 Ch 29. Only about 650 words. I've got about 4000 more to add to fill that gap in.
678 2016-02-11 07:08:37 (edited by njc 2016-02-11 07:31:53)
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Things to convert to story are piling up. Here's my latest note on Merran's (first?) side journey in B2: 
Extta credit if you spot my mental typos.
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Well, at least you aren't writing everything out by hand. However, trying to get me to learn shorthand in the process…
Don't know if that skill set is in the cards for today. Tomorrow may be another matter. You remind me of buddies in college who wrote notes to each other in runes. Except they weren't very efficient and the message was in progress by the time the other person entered the room.
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njc wrote:
Extta credit if you spot my mental typos.
The card you've used is pink? I picture you more as an off-white card kind of guy ...
Other than that, to me it reads like a pyramid wall only with less pictures. I don't read hieroglyphics either especially not in my spare time, so I'll have to wait for the TNBW post to let you know of any typos! 
Speaking of which, the 'holiday' is over and I need to catch up this weekend!
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Salmon. They come in mixed packages.
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Call it what ya like. Definitely pink.
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I've added a few more notes. The last one is about large families and tenant farming.
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AJ Reid wrote:
I don't read hieroglyphics either especially not in my spare time
Ooh! Hieroglyphics! New language. I wonder if it's possible to curse in hieroglyphics...
685 2016-02-12 07:25:03 (edited by njc 2016-02-12 07:32:03)
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According to David Kahn's =The Codebreakers=, the last individual able to read heiroglyphics as his native writing probably died around AD 300. Not so very long ago.
Oh, I've read that the rebus-structure of the writing indicates that the spoken language is very close to 'modern' Coptic. If Boko Harem, ISIS, and company succeed in murdering all the Copts, we will lose that living link to both the New and Old Kingdoms.
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njc wrote:
According to David Kahn's =The Codebreakers=...
I'm sorry. I know it's spelled different, but I just couldn't help myself...
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Wait until you read that chapter about my version of a dragon. I'll hear you scream out here on the Jersey Shore.
688 2016-02-12 10:27:32 (edited by njc 2016-02-12 10:39:12)
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Well, I've got about 4+3/4 pages at about 700 words a page in (nearly) final form (finally). This is Melayne and (mostly) Kirsey fixing the mountain. You'll see there's little chance of Kirsey being the Deus ex Machina. Let's see if I can type it up Friday night.
689 2016-02-15 13:30:04 (edited by njc 2016-02-15 13:30:16)
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I've taken most of the review comments on Breadcrumbs and Bacchanalia and integrated them. If anyone feels a need for a repub (for points) I'll do it, though I prefer not to (to keep the old comments visible).
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Angelt or Angalt. (Or Engalt.) Opinions?
I think either Angalt or Engalt would work!
691 2016-02-17 06:34:49 (edited by njc 2016-02-17 10:01:07)
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I should have added, at the end of your review, "Wait 'til you hear The Rest of the Story."
(Engalt, I think.)
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On the subject of names, I let Merran and her parents fall out of the naming system. I should fix it.
Any opinions on Carreth or Carth instead of Caneth. (I need to get the 'r' in it, so that 'Merran' is derived from both her parent's names.)
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I like Carth. Fewer letters in addition to being very male-sounding
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But a little coarser, maybe? Hmmm mmmm mmmm.
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It sounds tough. Reminds me of the word 'Karst', so the reference to rock is there. It stands out because the other names are more melodic.
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I agree with Amy. Carth sounds better. Carreth seems more like the name of a city.
-Elisheva
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That's just it. I don't want someone who sounds like a thug ("I'm gonna veto dat. Hey Vito!). I want him to sound like he -could- be a little urbane.
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Working on Merran and Jamen getting those two waifs, and trying to get Shogran for interrogation. (Merran plans to use everything she learned fighting Erevain.) Not gonna go right, but I have to get the events laid out in detail. Then I have to rewrite it FOR detail, making sure all the pieces are in place, and make a polishing pass, before typing it up and editing it again in the process. 36 to 48 hours, mebbe.
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Can I steal the name, then? It would work for Slash or Tazar.
I still like it better for renaming Caneth. Carth is very male sounding. It reads the same as Jack.
