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Just scratching my head here, but why would you want to save an inline review with no comments? It does tell you how many comments you've left and that you need 5 for the points. Okay, you left the summary comment in a regular review, so still wondering why the inline should be saved? I may be a little slow, but I don't get it. Damn, now my head's bleeding, lol. Take care. Vern

Strictly from personal preference, I would say if they only show up once there is really no need to name them if they have a sufficient title to identify them. If they have a recurring role then they probably should have a name, the shorter the better, which would then remain consistent throughout. For me, too many names, especially when bunched, clutter the story so much as to confuse or at least slow down the reader. Not generally a good idea. Just my opinion of course for what it's worth. Take care. Vern

Big Brother knows all, lol. Take care. Vern

Hello, John, good luck with the tour (and congrats also). Googled Go Fetch and after sifting through some doggie sites found what appeared to be an official web site but couldn't get any of the music to play. You might post a link on here. Anyway, perhaps finishing the tour will spur you on to finish Antagony -- couldn't resist that before GP got to it first, lol. Take care. Vern

It makes no difference if it is "involuntary" or not, the person is still doing the action so you can say it however suits your style of casting words. Your word choice is really all that matters. Does it fit the rest of your descriptive style or would it be jarring to say it one way or the other. Anyone making a comment about it is merely expressing their opinion of how it sounds to their ear, not any type of rule or how anyone else might perceive it. You could just as easily say, "His eyes snapped open like venetian blinds" if it suited you and I'm pretty sure someone would tell you they/you couldn't do that, but you see, I just did so it is possible to do it your way. Take care. Vern

There may not be a good reason, but there is always an excuse to be found. Take care. Vern

I wouldn't consider it "head-hopping" in either case. You don't have to be in someone's head to see they are having trouble with words. You would have to be in their head to know what particular words they were searching for, but that's a different scenario. Anyway, that's my totally non-professional opinion. Take with a large block of salt. Take care. Vern

I seriously doubt any book will cover all or even most of the elements listed -- probably too much territory for too little demand. Take care. Vern

It seems to me that whether you are Catholic, non, or atheist, etc., in reading the passages, you would understand that a prayer is being given and that certain rituals coinciding with such prayer are being practiced and there would be no need to explicitly explain every detail let alone repeat those details. You could simply start the prayer and end at some point … and go on to your next scene. All the minute detail is akin to describing someone about to drive off by saying, "they open the passenger door, get in, put the key in the ignition and start the engine, look both ways down the street, back up slightly to get around the  black Chevy with a busted tail light which is parked in front of them, then put the car in drive, and turn the steering wheel slightly to the left and after looking both ways again, slowly steer onto West 63rd St heading northeast, blah, blah, blah" Virtually no one is going to care about that minute detail imho. I expect even Catholics don't go through life reciting every detail or expecting to read every detail as though it were a religious service. But you are the author and can write it any way you wish. Take care. Vern

I'm probably the last person to listen to on this, but I'll say it anyway, since you're telling us it's a remembered quote from Macbeth, you might use italics or quotes but probably don't need both, or could even stretch and use neither if phrased just right. How's that for clearing it up, lol. Just be consistent with how you use italics and quotes throughout. Take care. Vern

Oh, so he's a Trump derivative. Now I know I'll never watch it, lol. Take care. Vern