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Congrats, MJ, good news for the soul goes with the soup. Take care. Vern

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If you wish to promote your real name to your readers on this site which is totally different from submitting for  publication you can simply add it to your profile information and you can also sign your real name to any posts in these forums for further advertisement, good or bad -- to paraphrase the old saying, "Don't care what they say, just spell my name right." Take care. Vern

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You can always simply put a time reference such as the date at the beginning of each chapter kind of like a heading or you can have the narrator or a character make a reference to the time elapsed since the last episode described -- a week later Joe blow blew smoke signals or "You know, Joe, you blew smoke signals a month ago when we were in the firehouse" or "Since your skiing accident, you've been in a coma for three weeks" or such. A thousand ways to say things to reference time.

But it may not always be necessary to tell the reader the exact time lapse as the action unfolding will clue them in. Say your character was flying to Australia or somewhere halfway around the world, then you picked up their activities after they had arrived. That would indicate a certain amount of time had transpired assuming you don't want to follow everything they did on the flight. The storyline and characters will probably give you lots of opportunities and ways to reference the passage of time in various increments. See you next week. Take care. Vern

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I don't think it makes a hill of beans whether you give chapters names or not for a product ready for publishing -- perhaps different story on this site. I put chapter names in my novel on this site for additional description about the chapter topic, but do not have them in my master draft. I feel that on site perhaps a possible reviewer might get some inkling of whether to continue reviewing that next chapter but when/if a person buys the book they are probably not going to be influenced by chapter names. Just my opinion. Take care. Vern

PS: Type numbers? Who cares.

Ray, I don't really need reviews for my novel Root Hog or Die, but you're welcome to see if it perks your interest. The chapters are relatively long for this site so the points add up quickly. Just give me a broad overview if it holds your interest or any blaring mistakes if you wish. Some small things have been edited in the master copy but not on site so no need to get bogged down in the detail. And if dialect or colloquialisms are not your cup of tea, you might want to ignore this. If you do decide, please pay attention to any bold notes at the end or beginning of chapters since some things have been moved around and the notes will guide you to where you should go under certain circumstances. Easy points up for grabs should you desire as I continue my search for an agent/publisher. Take care. Vern

If you wish to maintain your basic concept that Romano is observing him "concentrate" then you might simply add "in apparent concentration" which would remain strictly within Romano's POV. Having said that, I would agree with Temple that you could probably "show" the concentration and/or whatever else he is doing by other means. Take care. Vern

HAPPY THANKSGIVING!. I'm thankful that PeePee Trump is going to get impeached even though Moscow Mitch's senate won't remove him from office. Nothing political here, just giving thanks. Take care. Vern

Hi, MJ, hope you get to feeling better soon. Good to know the horses are being cared for also. Eager to get you back in action on site. Take care. Vern