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Yeah, I saw that, but the occasional use of jargon doesn't bother me when you can get the jest of it from the context even if you don't know the exact meaning. A smattering - you could go either way, explain or not - adds a degree of authenticity imo. Now loads of it would be another matter. Take care. Vern

Hi, GP, just a few thoughts. I noticed you've done some editing on chapter 11 – very well done overall I might add. The opening transition is short and works well to get Genesis back with Travis in adult mode. Just a couple suggestions to consider for very slight modification:

Para as written: {After all these years, I still have my Sturton yearbooks. Boxed up during college and law school, they gather dust in my apartment, on the top ledge of my bookshelf. I grab a chair to stand on, and toss them onto my couch, one by one. As they land, powdery clouds puff above them. And with each thud, Abbott’s email rolls through my mind: Please help me. I love you.}

"After all these years" deftly brings us back to the adult situation. To further tie it to G's desire to forget the past, you might add, “Despite my dogged attempts to bury the past, after all these years my Sturton yearbooks are still stashed on the top ledge of my bookshelf.” Or such. This will also highlight her ambivalence in wanting to forget (the bad) yet not totally ready to forget completely. Despite the bad memories, there were good times and a good friend that always lurk within those dusty pages and dust bunnies of her mind.

The remainder of the para could further her anxiety with minor changes: “Fighting the dizzying memories, I clamber onto a footstool and toss the undeniable proof of those years to the couch. With each thud and puff of accumulated dust, Abbott’s email rolls through my mind: Please help. I love you.” Or such.

Other than a few minor nits not worth mentioning here, the rest of the chapter flows smoothly and holds interest while building another relationship. Very good. Take care. Vern

That pic of Lady Gaga is certainly a wonderland, winter or not, lol. Take care. Vern

I read ch 11 last night and will get to a review sometime in next couple days. I do have an idea on the transition thing - big surprise there, lol - which is a very simple fix. Take care. Vern

Haven't read it so this is the best I can do:

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=a_SymEulNt8

Take care. Vern

For all practical purposes, your work is considered copyrighted in the US when you first put it to paper and paying a fee affords you no greater protection. I don't think this site has ever gone beyond that for anything not actually published. Take care. Vern

Remind me not to ever visit those other sites, lol. I'm certainly glad this site doesn't automatically subscribe me to every thread I post in; much rather subscribe myself if it warrants notification. It would be a real pain to have to unsubscribe to everything to get rid of all the needless email. Take care. Vern

Only my two cents worth at a discount, but other than keeping the books on their own thread - that's a good idea - you guys started out as two people talking about anything that came to mind whether music, reviews, toilet seats, or whatever and that was your draw and strength. Of course this is a new show and things are a bit different on this new site, but sometimes new and improved just ain't better. Just my opinion and I ain't voting cause this ain't a democracy, it's y'alls baby. Take care. Vern

I didn't realize the site logo in the upper left corner was the "home" button at first, but now that we have been educated, I don't see any need/reason for TWO buttons for the same thing, especially if it reqires more than a minor change to programming - like thirty seconds, lol. Take care. Vern

As a rule of thumb, agents want a one to two page synopsis; generally one page is preferred unless it can't cover a long complicated novel. However, quite a few agents only want a query initially; their individual quidelines can be found on their web sites. It is best to check those quidelines before submitting to save time and unneeded effort as well as increase your chances to be considered. As we, they may have their idiosyncracies as far as what they are looking for.

You can sometimes find a blog of a member of the agency which gives guidelines for the type query and synopsis they are looking for.
Still, In the end, if your query and/or synopsis is well written and appropriate subject matter for that agency, the exact length will not be the determining factor for acceptance. Good luck. Take care. Vern

I agree that would be a useful option. Until it happens - and you probably already know this with your experience in various forums, but some may not - you can click on the last post as shown and it will take you to the that post rather than to the first where you would have to scroll through everything (sometimes severall pages) to get to where you want to be. Of course from that point you merely scroll backwards to produce the last to first results. It's a bandaid, but it works. Take care. Vern

The actual pictures are included with the text and the BBCode from the site was used to install them. That's all I know. You could join the group long enough to see for yourself if you wish since I'm not into all this technical stuff - I know the site BBCode was used because I asked about the pics a few days ago. I'm sure GP or John would be glad to tell you how they did it. Take care. Vern