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"Love in Exile"
"Out of Exile"
"Exile's End."
"Exile in Time."

The first three are already published in Kindle ($2.99 each).  Critiques would be moot, but if you want to review them and say something nice, that would be great.

Debbie:  You can sort of figure out what's going on without books 1-3.  There are scenes that play out differently in this book than in the earlier ones, so for full impact, the first 3 books should be read first, but part of what I look for in reviews is how well you can enter the series from here.  Like all other series, I try to balance people meeting the characters for the first time and the background references.  (Like say in a Faye Kellerman story) Fortunately for the reader, if not for the characters, their pasts are unraveling before their eyes, and that should put the reader on a par with the characters. lol

There were good old times where the forums not only worked, they created a lively internet community--as lively, in its own way, as FB (although not with the population).  That changed when the website moved to the new style--with better technology, ways to publicize your publications, etc.  But now, the people in the forums are more serious.  They applaud each other's successes, hold each other's hands during the moments of doubt and pain, and generally, have good advice and commentary.  So less participation, higher quality.  And a lot less flaming.

Dirk, you've convinced me to start a thread in the Fantasy group.  That almost happened when Kdot posted about my story.  I used to post a lot in "Close Friends," but that group has gone silent.  Rhia.

Great article, Marilyn.

Welcome to the site!  It's fairly cheap and worth it for what you get.  As to a market for depressing memoirs?  Almost all popular memoirs are really depressing, so I'd guess fairly good.

CJ:
You mentioned that there seemed to be an inconsistency in the book--that the young Heather didn't need the super-collider to get forward in time. In Chapter Nineteen, Heather is explaining the non-locality of mirrors.  Diane is pondering how to lug the older Heather around in the LHC without attracting attention.  Heather suggests it's easy to put someone in a mirror and demonstrates that.  And then, you can go from one mirror to another.  I add a little bit so as to make it clearer why they don't need the super-collider.  Thought you'd appreciate my follow-up.

Also, I changed one of Rhiannon's titles and added one.  She's the Guardian of Alfheim and Ambassador to Midgard.  I was using 'Midgard' synonymously with the world of mortals before, but decided to refine it to the world of humans.  So Alfheim would be another name for New Fairy, except it would include the goblins and their underground world, and any human territory (New Fairy, New Prydain, Terra) would be Midgard.  And if you can think of any more titles to add, that would be great.  I want the list ridiculously long. Thanks in advance.

Well put.

Yowza!  (I never like to follow the crowd, so no 'Wow!')  Congratulations.  Just remember us little people when you get on the New York Times bestseller list.

The first comma, after epithet, isn't necessary.  It reads fine as 'the epithet Bastardus Minusculus,' and you are right, when the adjective phrase, in this case 'Bastardus Minusculus, is essential to the noun, you don't have a comma; in fact, it's a solecism to have the comma. But the second comma is necessary, as if you take out the repositional phrse, the sentence makes sense.  '...the epithet Bastardus Minusculus became an honorific.  The prepositional phrse, then, is not essential, but adds information.

Congratulations to the winners!

I'm not sure which scene you're thinking of.  In the scene where Barbara sends Heather back in time, it's Heather whose directing, to be sure, but their "genius" is shared.  Heather needs to know if the surface of the matrix is like a reflection, so it can act like a mirror that she can transfer in.  To be sure, Barbara's ability to do that was surprising, a bit out of character, really, as Diane later points out.  I thought of that, but as it helps develop the friendship between the two women, and a big theme of these books, is friendship in the most extraordinary circumstances, I'm not sure what to do about that, except to keep with the idea that it was largely blind luck on Barbara's part.  Jeb only understands the basics of space-time principles, Hadron colliders, and particle physics.  His main concern is that it did work, not how it worked.  Like Kyle in The Terminator, he could say, "I'm not a tech."

When Diane arrives, followed by Grizelda, she takes over being the genius, with Grizelda being more the sheriff's deputy kvetching about the others being in on an escape attempt.  So, no problem in a new genius there.  Heather doesn't understand the complexities of the science, only that temporal dislocation is possible through magic that she (and everyone else) is forbidden to practice--not that the forbidden stops here. Barbara's genius status was only in the plot device to have her operate the LHC and the hypydimentional event matrix.  She becomes more the security officer and the friend as the story progresses.

I think as the novel progresses, and Heather, Rhiannon, and Diane, not to mention Heveydd and Modrin, get their own scenes, some of the flavors of the different characters will stand out.  Jeb's too, although I'm not sure about the side of his character he is showing. 

I'll reflect on different speech patterns, but here I might end up in good company--James Patterson wrote a multiple 1st person story where every different character spoke in the same way.