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Does anyone have any suggestions on how best to handle the fact that Joseph has both his dead grandmother in his head AND eventually his mother, too? Both women have strong personalities and both play key roles, one military and the other motherly/decisive, although I rarely need them both in the same chapter. I'm thinking of killing off the mother completely and giving her lines to grandma. If I do, I need to come up with a powerful reason for Joseph to resume his quest after abandoning it completely and trying to kill himself following his mother's death, which he caused. Currently, he resumes the quest with relish because he believes his mother has joined him in his head, telling him that the quest is the most important thing he'll ever do. Or do I keep both and simply use them only as needed? In that case, one or the other might not appear for at least three full chapters, since Apollo's story lies in between as well (e.g., grandma advises Joseph, Apollo gets a chapter, Joseph's mother advises him, Apollo gets another chapter, then finally back to grandma). Even when they do appear, these ghosts have very limited lines since God and Andrew are Joseph's main ghosts. I think it would weaken the roles of both women. I suppose I could have Joseph O.D. on antidepressants rather than sleeping pills. Antidepressants often make one drowsy. He would then be manic long enough to get to Earth.

Thoughts?

v4 note:

There will be three books total in this series. Book one v4 converts God into archangels as part of Archangel Syndrome. Apollo will get Germanus (his executed best friend) in his head so I can do humor without making the archangel silly like Apollo's God currently is. Germanus will be Apollo's version of Andrew. Colonel/General Lucilius will be killed off in the attack on the Imperial Palace by Lupus and Hadisius. Gaia then steps in as her replacement, hopefully making her a stronger character. There will be one news anchor droid/news organization used throughout the book, except for the one with Fox Blitzen & Bunny Divine. Acme products should have more failures/near failures.

Book two will be Joseph growing/managing his chaotic religion, which takes off among the Maya after he releases the prison video of his resurrection near the end of book one. Apollo will be trying to grow the Imperium at breakneck speed while also converting it to Christianity. Gaia, Caligula, and Leonardo (with Stronza) will have roles to play. The real cause behind Archangel Syndrome will be revealed as Dr. Francis from the future and the news droid from book one. The year will be 4021.

Book three will be set in 7329 AD. With the help of the news anchor droid and Professor Hinkley (the time traveler), Joseph and Apollo travel to the future, where they play key roles in the overthrow of the galactic government by Joseph's fanatical followers. They go "wild Fremen" when they realize who Joseph is. Joseph will lead his followers in a plot to overthrow the sprawling Imperium that Apollo helped create. Apollo will appear to oppose this. Secretly, the two cousins may be working together. Need to involve Dr. Francis. Try to include Leonardo (with Stronza), Gaia, and Caligula. Acme and Mama's Big Butt Shipping should still be around.

Heaven help me work out the causality problems caused by Dr. Francis. He personally should be immune to the causality problems, which is what allowed him to keep tweaking the future even as he changed it. Use technology for that.

Galaxy Tales never really worked as a title for this series. The new title will be Archangel Syndrome.

The song is in the public domain. I was asking if I could mention the name of the singer. According to numerous web sites, I can, but that won't stop someone from taking frivolous legal action if they don't want to be mentioned. I'll mention the song but not the singer.

Thank you, Malcolm. I tell other people to use Google, but I often forget to do so.

Too bad I deleted my Facebook account. Too many cat videos and half-naked Russian women wanting to be friends. Too much like the Kardashians. Somehow, I don't think they're my target audience for Christian-friendly books.

Just rewrite them all using was/were. ;-)

Chapter 33, The Imperium Cracks, is up. It's a cleaned up version of the same chapter from v2. Lots of minor edits.

Quick, go read!
Dirk

Rage of the Unholy Trinity

Another is Treachery of the Unholy Trinity.

I'm reading a book called the Final Days of Jesus by an archaeologist who claims that the much-venerated Via Dolorosa route that Jesus supposedly walked to his crucifixion is in the completely wrong place in the Old City (i.e., the original part of Jerusalem). Via Dolorosa begins just north of the Dome of the Rock (site of the historical Jewish Temple) in the NE part of the Old City and moves roughly SW to the Church of the Holy Sepulcher, in which is found the Rock of Golgotha (i.e., Calvary), which held Christ's cross. The church also houses the family tomb of Joseph of Arimathea, who, according to the Gospels, made his tomb available for Jesus's body. In this new book, the author points out that Pontius Pilate stayed at the palace of King Herod the Great when in Jerusalem. The palace ran along the western wall of the Old City and included barracks for Pilate's soldiers. The Gospels are clear that Jesus was taken to Pilate to be judged. Pilate wouldn't have traveled across Jerusalem to deal with a troublesome preacher. That means the route to Golgotha should start in the west and head east. I'm going to highlight this error in the novel. It's the least I can do for an archaeologist who only charges $1.99 for his Kindle book. He seems to have a strange affinity for ritual bathing pools in the first century, though. The details dragged on for an entire chapter. The only relevant part was that Jesus sent people into the pools to heal them.

Google 'version control Scrivener'.

Version control aside, I think Scrivener might be a pain if you start working with a professional editor. You'll have to export to Word, have the editor mark it up, then you accept or reject their edits, then you cut and paste accepted text (scenes, I think) back into Scrivener. Or just manually make all the corrections in Scrivener. It was the main reason I stayed with Word.

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