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(1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

Nova sounds masculine. Naya is feminine.

Thank you, sir.

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Oddly enough, I just sent away paperwork to combine my IRA accounts. I've also been trying for six months to get the Social Security Administration to stop deducting money from my benefits for Medicare Part B. Only a government bureaucracy could be so inept. Once they get that done (I may just give up), I'm going to have them wire the money into my Canadian bank account, allowing me to close my Chase checking account. Right now, I'm forced to leave $15K in the account to avoid a $25 monthly fee. The wire transfer only costs $15 per month, so a big FU to Chase.

Can someone please tell me why there is a comma in the following sentence: T i a thought they might have more landing areas closer to the centre, but couldn’t make any out. I lifted that sentence from Kdot, so I assume it's correct, but I can't find any online rules about this one.

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Dirk

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(15 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

Sorting data. I'd tear my hair out, but as you saw, I don't have any.

2,106

(14 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)

So the following is correct: I might not order dessert, depending on the size of the entre.

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Dirk

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(1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

This week's episode of Gilligan's Island had everyone sneezing and itching when they came near Gilligan. Pathetically poor fake sneezes by some of the actors. The funny part was the Skipper. His sneezes were so severe he repeatedly blew out candles, blew open the hut's door, and knocked over a palm tree. At one point, he tried to hold it in and his cap went flying straight up from his head. When it seemed like he was about to let loose a titanic sneeze, everyone ran for the jungle, followed by ... nothing.

I'm pretty sure they used up all the matches (for relighting the candle) in one of the first shows, but what the heck. Perhaps the Professor made some. At one point they went through all of the women's makeup and perfume trying to find out what was causing the allergy. I never knew women needed that much perfume for a three hour tour. And let's not forget the Howells. She brought out a large diamond collection to see if it was the cause. She also had four different types of furs (mink, sable, etc.) with her. In Hawaii? In 90 degree heat?

Did you ever notice there was no discussion of building a latrine on that show? They must have been pooping all over the island. At least they had plenty of palm fronds for toilet paper.

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(14 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)

Can someone please help me with the following sentence:

Teresa thought they might have more landing areas closer to the centre, but couldn’t make any out.

Unless I'm mistaken, the second clause is dependent. So why the comma?

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Dirk

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(14 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)

In 2007, it's under word options/proofing/auto-correct/replace as you type.

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My version of Microsoft Word (2007) replaces three periods with an ellipsis symbol. It looks almost the same, but it's one character. I can't recall if I configured the software to do that, but I'm sure they have the same feature in newer versions of Word.

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Thanks for responding, everyone. I'm going to try two scenes per chapter (one per story thread), which gives me the flexibility to further split those scenes as the need arises. The planning is just as much work as if they were chapters, but it allows me greater flexibility. It also forces me to make the end of each scene compelling enough to keep the reader going. The only minor nuisance is that I'll have to post each major scene as its own TNBW chapter to keep the length of the posted material short enough for most reviewers. Seabrass did the same thing with his Maiden story.

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Dirk

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I'm wondering how others decide how many scenes to include in a given chapter. In my first book, I interleaved two related stories, each with a main character (Joseph and Apollo) and alternated back and forth between them on a chapter by chapter basis. For the most part that worked and kept the chapter lengths short enough that someone could review each in one sitting. The main problem with that was one of timing. For example, I had a major battle at the end of act 1 that spanned three chapters (Joseph, Apollo, then Joseph again). There was a lot going on, and it would have been better to have a lot of small scenes back and forth than my chapter-by-chapter telling made possible.

I'm starting to run into the same problem with my new story. There are two main story threads, but it's too early to tell if alternating back and forth at a chapter level is going to cause problems. There may even be other occasional side threads, although I haven't planned far enough out to be sure.

How do other people deal with this? In beginning to think I should include one scene from each of the two stories per chapter. That leaves me the freedom to flip back and forth more often between the two stories at a scene by scene level, rather than at the chapter level. It also allows me to include a third or fourth thread in some chapters, as needed.

Thoughts?

Thanks
Dirk

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(9 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)

Handy info. Thanks.

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An overload of names was my concern too. I have the option of giving them first names when they address each other. Still mulling that.

Just spent the better part of a day researching the Italian police (I need detectives and a CSI team). I spent almost two hours trying to find reliable information about Italy's two national police forces, the state police and the Carabinieri. They have a lot of overlapping duties right down to responding to civil crimes. They are the result of Italy's dysfunctional political system. The best comparison I can make to our police is that the state police are a civil force while the Carabinieri are a military force. The Carabinieri are somewhat like the National Guard. Since they both have command stations in Rome, I needed to know who's in charge when a bishop or cardinal turns up dead. Finally found an article that said the state police are ultimately in charge in large urban centers, but the Carabinieri may be the only police force available in rural areas, so they're in charge in those areas, rather like the RCMP. Both the state police and the Carabinieri are truly national police forces, unlike us where each major city has its own independent police force.

Pretty slim pickings online about Italian law enforcement and even less about their CSI functions. I may have to borrow a few North American concepts. I have yet to figure out how to kill off a large number of clergy in serial killings without making it redundant or overly gruesome. Worse, a serial killer ought to result in a major taskforce, with all kinds of different police functions cooperating.

I also can't figure out what the damn Italian equivalent is of a detective, since they don't seem to use that title. They follow Interpol-like command ranks.

I hope CSI is available on Netflix.

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Thank you, folks.

Sol, have there been any recent reports or fixes of bugs related to notification emails when a connection posts a new chapter? Don Chambers posted over a dozen chapters on the site in a story of his that I was reading, yet I received no emails. I thought he had left the site. I only realized today that he had written more when he announced that he had published it.

How do you protect/open the airway? Is there a medical doohickey that you push into their mouths for that?

EDIT: Found the manual resuscitator online. Since they know he's an epileptic, they'll keep one in his nightstand for emergencies. The nurse brings a syringe with valium, but he's already recovering by the time she arrives. He happens to recover just as Connor is saying a powerful prayer for him. Coincidence?

Thanks, Amy.

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I'm wondering if it's necessary to give my minor characters full names (first and last). I have a Father Gregorio Altera who is a main (POV) character, so he naturally gets a full name. However, he interacts with Father Calebrese and Sister Fontana, neither of whom will play a large role, nor will the story include them as POV characters. Should I give each minor character a full name the first time they appear? That has the potential to result in a lot of names, many of which will never be written or spoken about after the first time they appear.

Thoughts?

Thanks
Dirk

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Marilyn, I went to site and, when I tried to sign up, it said the site was free to use for 15 days, after which you either have to subscribe monthly or yearly. I couldn't find a free version.

Amy, I have a scene with a boy in an orphanage who is experiencing an epileptic seizure, including convulsions. His form of epilepsy is resistant to medication. Other than hold him down, is there anything else the people around him can do? Also, is there a medication that can be injected into him to reduce the severity of the convulsions (e.g., a tranquilizer)? What would they do for him if he was in a hospital? Once the seizure has passed, is it common to take him to a hospital for further observation?

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Dirk

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(14 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)

Congratulations, Don.

My outline for scene 1 of Saving Connor is done. I had originally planned on three scenes in the first chapter, but that makes it too long for reviewers. I'm debating just splitting all scenes into standalone chapters. That'll force me to come up with more chapter hooks, which is probably a good thing. There will be two interwoven threads running through the story, so it'll probably be similar to my Joseph/Apollo chapters, only I hope they'll be shorter.

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Dr. Jorge B. Francis is messing with the spacetime continuum again. Try an Acme keyboard and mouse; they're immune. You can get them shipped from New Bethlehem by Mama's Little Shipping for twenty-two terras.

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(1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

I'm rereading Dune and discovered that Frank Herbert all-but gives away that Maud'Dib triumphs. In one of the early epigraphs attributed to Princess Irulan, she comments how the Duke's light was dimmed behind his son's glory.

I've often thought that the story would have been better if the reader didn't know the details of the Harkonnen plot and Huey's betrayal before they occurred. All of that could have come out later.