As noted in a post in Premium, I keep running into a problem when referring to characters by one name only throughout my story. It's the repetition that reviewers highlight, and rightly so. Temple suggested I use more pronouns, relying on the reader to figure out who I'm referring to based on context. See the example below based on her approach. The other approach, which I used to use, is to refer to characters in more than one way. So, I would refer to Romano as Romano or priest to break up the monotony. JP Lundstrom thought that was fine, although Seabrass has tried to steer me clear of that approach. I've been trying to avoid the latter approach since I think it creates distance between the reader and Romano by referring to him as priest. For those reading this, how do you avoid the repetition?
Thanks
Dirk
Before:
Romano decided he’d take a wait-and-see approach. In a few days, Alessandro would probably have another seizure, and Romano would have his answer. In spite of himself, he felt a slight thrill at the possibility that Connor was right. If only Romano could still feel the Holy Spirit the way Connor did. It had been so long. Yet, even Mother Teresa suffered dark, spiritual emptiness, in her case for almost half a century. And, unlike her, Romano was no saint. The knot in his stomach returned, reminding him he had an anguished prayer to finish.
After:
Romano decided he’d take a wait-and-see approach. In a few days, Alessandro would probably have another seizure, and he would have his answer. In spite of himself, he felt a slight thrill at the possibility that Connor was right. If only he could still feel the Holy Spirit the way Connor did. It had been so long. Yet, even Mother Teresa suffered dark, spiritual emptiness, in her case for almost half a century. And, unlike her, Romano was no saint. The knot in his stomach returned, reminding him he had an anguished prayer to finish.