This is usually the point at which Vern also enters the thread. Feel free to completely detail this thread at this point. I got what I needed.
1,401 2019-10-13 19:26:46
Re: Wrong points showing in chapter view (17 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
1,402 2019-10-13 14:02:02
Re: Wrong points showing in chapter view (17 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Placing single quotes around & worked. It even works with MS-Word smart quotes. Thanks, njc.
Ray, & didn't work, but thanks for the suggestion.
Dirk
1,403 2019-10-13 04:05:38
Re: Wrong points showing in chapter view (17 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Or an error message that there's an unsupported & in the chapter.
1,404 2019-10-13 03:29:36
Re: Wrong points showing in chapter view (17 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Sol, the algorithm that calculates points is choking on the & character. It only calculate points up to the first & in the chapter. That's a pretty important character for some books. I refer to an actual submachine gun manufacturer named Heckler & Koch. Any chance that character can be supported by the site?
Thanks
Dirk
1,405 2019-10-13 02:30:34
Re: Wrong points showing in chapter view (17 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Definitely a site bug. I tried publishing a v4 with the same content as v3, and it still won't go higher than 0.07 points. I then tripled the content of v4, and it still pays only 0.07.
1,406 2019-10-13 01:48:19
Re: Wrong points showing in chapter view (17 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
When I shorten the chapter to one paragraph, it goes down to 0.02 points, but when I put the whole chapter back in and save, it maxes out at 0.07.
1,407 2019-10-13 01:41:38
Topic: Wrong points showing in chapter view (17 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
The site seems to be misbehaving with my prologue points. In the chapter view, it shows only 0.07 points, which is incorrect. The chapter is about three pages in MS-Word, which is normally at least 0.5 points. Previous versions of the prologue (v1 and v2), which were shorter than the current v3, show the correct number of points. Only v3 is affected.
Is anyone else seeing this?
Thanks
Dirk
1,408 2019-10-11 02:41:51
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Amen! Hopefully no more major rewrites of chapter two. I'm so sick of that chapter.
1,409 2019-10-11 00:56:33
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
LOL. If I live long enough, I may try for that. The pace doesn't suit my current WIP, though. I'm still tweaking it, trying to get a better flow of that paragraph and the end of the chapter. Almost there.
1,410 2019-10-10 20:33:58
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Damn! That is a fantastic description. My writing style is crap in comparison.
1,411 2019-10-10 20:23:43
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Thanks. I'll give it a read.
1,412 2019-10-10 16:38:36
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Site hiccup. Here's the changed version. I changed the last two sentences.
Vitale always admired the frescos and statues that adorned the church. Indeed, it had a long and storied history. Saint Lawrence, for whom the church was named, was martyred by Roman Emperor Valerian in 258 AD and entombed under what was now the altar. Other saints and popes were buried there as well. The first church over the site was built in the sixth century, and a second in the thirteenth century. The two were later combined, before being bombed in World War II. It was then lovingly restored by men inspired by God.
Thoughts?
1,413 2019-10-10 16:25:28
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Here's the current version:
Vitale always admired the frescos and statues that adorned the church. Indeed, it had a long and storied history. Saint Lawrence, for whom the church was named, was martyred by Roman Emperor Valerian in 258 AD and entombed under what was now the altar. Other saints and popes were buried there as well. The first church over the site was built in the sixth century, and a second in the thirteenth century. The two were later combined. Vitale smiled. Those who built them were clearly inspired by God.
I have to admit I felt that 'Vitale smiled. Those who built them were clearly inspired by God.' reads like it was tacked on, but the lead in seems correct.
1,414 2019-10-10 16:13:15
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I remember now why I moved from Vitale to the Church back to Vitale. I always get dinged by some of my reviewers for stopping the story for description, so I started tying it more closely to the character. Not sure if I'm doing it right. I'll go back to doing it as you suggest, njc, and see how many people pounce on me.
Thanks.
Dirk
1,415 2019-10-10 15:31:50
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Ok, thanks
1,416 2019-10-10 01:35:26
Re: Best Enterprise Captain (Television) (22 replies, posted in Science Fiction, Steampunk, and Space Opera)
You left out Christopher Pike. Boo.
Nice catch.
1,417 2019-10-09 16:12:24
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Who are you?
Mother Theresa.
I think that nails it.
1,418 2019-10-09 13:07:27
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
The revised version is up. I didn't bother republishing as it's not that different, except for the ending. I can die in peace now. Bury me next to the cardinal.
1,419 2019-10-09 12:22:40
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
This one is growing on me. I like the sarcasm coming from a supervillain.
Vitale frowned and struggled to stand. “Who are you?”
The being looked around as a tourist might, then faced Vitale. “Luke Skywalker.” The ground shook, the cross atop the altar crashed to the floor, and the windows exploded inward.
1,420 2019-10-09 03:08:51
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I looked up top 100 movie villains that I could use as the one-liner, but the only truly recognizable embodiments of evil are Darth Sidious and Darth Vader. I'll check out real-life killers tomorrow. And fictional/real-life heroes as a possible sarcastic response.
1,421 2019-10-09 01:46:16
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
The interesting thing, though, about fighting with that one line gave me a very different approach to the ending. I'll work on it tomorrow. I still don't have what I would call a satisfying one liner. It's my battle for a good trilogy title all over again. I need to find something in contemporary films and shows to use. E.g. Who are you? Darth Sidious.
1,422 2019-10-08 23:29:59
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
How about this?
Vitale frowned and struggled to stand. “Who are you?”
“Here's a clue.” The ground shook, the cross atop the altar crashed to the floor, and the windows exploded inward. The temperature plummeted and the lights dimmed. Fog swirled around the being and his eyes glowed fiery red.
1,423 2019-10-08 23:23:08
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I now have two out of four reviewers telling me that "allow me to introduce myself", spoken by the dark being just before the shit hits the fan, is crap.
1,424 2019-10-08 22:43:46
Re: Savior of the Damned (the Connor series) by Dirk B. (1,461 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Kdot, what do you think? Is this enough of an intro to Vitale before I kill him?
Cardinal Aristotele Vitale shuffled down the center aisle of his titular church, Basilica Papale di San Lorenzo fuori le Mura, in Rome. If Vitale hadn’t known better, he’d have sworn the aisle grew longer with each passing year. At eighty-six, he wondered how many more years he would be able to walk to the high altar. Given what the Lord had endured on the cross, it would take more than a body riddled with arthritis to stop him from his frequent visits to pray here.
Vitale always admired the massive stone pillars that ran the length of the church on the far side of the pews to his left and right. Indeed, the entire church had a long and storied history. Saint Lawrence, for whom the church was named, was martyred by Roman Emperor Valerian in 258 AD and entombed under what was now the altar. Other saints and popes were buried there as well. The first church over the site was built in the 6th century, and a second built in front of it in the 13th century. The two were later combined. The church was bombed during World War II but subsequently restored.
Besides Vitale, the church was empty. Father Coppola, the parish pastor, had already left for the night, locking the doors. Vitale had used his own key to enter, then locked himself in. Except for the occasional tourist pulling on the door and the faint sound of traffic from the Via Tiburtina, all was quiet.
Vitale genuflected toward the cross atop the domed altar, then sat in the front pew. Sadly, gone were the days when he could kneel on the tiled floor. He straightened his scarlet robes. As always, they were freshly laundered. He owned several sets, allowing him to always wear clean clothes when entering his church. The laundering costs were a minor extravagance that Vitale thought the Lord would approve of. Besides, Vitale donated the unused portion of his yearly pay to the poor.
He began to pray. Soon, pounding footsteps approached him from behind. He sighed, thinking Coppola had returned. “Did you forget something, Father?”
A sonorous male voice said, “Good evening, Your Eminence.”
The cardinal turned.
A dark being stood a few feet away. Light barely penetrated to his face or clothes, as if he was shrouded in deep shadows where none existed.
Vitale frowned and struggled to stand. “Who are you?”
“Allow me to introduce myself.” The ground shook, the cross atop the altar crashed to the floor, and the windows exploded inward. The temperature plummeted and the lights dimmed. Fog swirled around the being and his eyes glowed fiery red.
Vitale staggered back, realizing he was staring in the face of death.
Needs a better ending sentence.
1,425 2019-10-08 19:13:18
Re: Reviews (7 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Ray, you seem to be publishing one book for each chapter. There's no need for that. Each book can have as many chapters as you like. There's an Edit button (near the Inline button) when you look at your own posted chapters. From within the Edit wizard, you can add chapters to an existing work, make a chapter active or inactive (i.e., show or hide it), etc.
Be warned, there's also an edit LINK further down the page of each posted chapter that is used solely to edit chapters, not the book.