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Cool ability: since Connor can use telekinesis, he ought to be able raise himself off the ground, though I intend to make it a limited ability, but if he can levitate, then he can use that ability (heightened temporarily by the wine from the Garden of Eden) to help him when he runs & jumps off the edge of Megiddo to jump over the attacking horde of demons and come at them from behind, while his cousins attack from the front. In other words, he uses telekinesis to help him stay in the air longer, while his boosted momentum from jumping from Megiddo takes him much farther than he otherwise could, over the hordes to land behind them.

The other option is to ignore telekinesis in this particular scene and make it the wine that allows him to sail over the hordes. An easier explanation.

I like it. The axe-murderer was a great character. I can't remember his exact demise, but it would be cool if there was some way to hint that maybe he lived and got clear of the ship, without actually confirming it. Of course, then people might expect him to show up later.

Let me know if you post his revised version.

Bill et al, I deleted the latest accounts reported above. I didn't realize I already had that ability. I thought I was just a moderator at the moment.

Power! Unlimited Power!

Please continue to report spam accounts here, and I'll deal with them. I removed Sol's name from the subject line and made this thread sticky at the top of the forum, so it should be easy to find.

Bill, what made you think watkinsayden81 is a spam account? Their profile is empty. Did they post something to one of the forums? Thanks

Dirk

I am so happy for you, MJ. What a relief that must be.
When I finish up here, I'll go do a Snoopy dance.

Dirk

Thank you for the update, Alan. It's sad that Di's health continues to worsen, although it's wonderful to know that you are finally receiving support for her care. I'm sure many of the folks here will keep both of you in our thoughts and prayers.

Replaced by AI.   After all, why not? Apparently AI can already write fiction. At some point, will AI-generated books rival human-written ones? Eventually, each person may have their own "instance" of an AI in the cloud, which they can then ask to generate a book for them matching whatever criteria they want. Why buy books if you can generate them on the fly?

From Reddit:
Q: How bad are '-ing' verbs?
A: They're so bad every published novel by popular authors is filled with them.

Awesome idea (if I do say so myself): rather than have Connor make up and show what he's seeing of Christ to the other members of the tour group, I'm going to change it so that the visions are real and Connor is merely showing what he truly sees. I can even switch scenes briefly to put Connor there, meaning a quick jump to the past. Connor will be in the historic scene, pretty much as he describes Christ addressing him across time, but the visions will not show Connor in the past, just that he is there and God is talking to him.

Hopefully, I can come up with things for Christ and Connor to say that have double meanings: to the others in the tour group, it'll reinforce they're growing belief of Connor as Christ (or at least won't give away that Connor is the Antichrist); only Connor knows that the words are intended for the Antichrist. Of course, God could give away Connor's real identity at any time, but He agreed up front not to do so.

I'll have to write up all these interactions up front to ensure it can actually be done in some way. It should be similar to the way Phanuel answers the questions of the group about why Antonio's noble deeds (eg saving Connor from the caracal at the baptism site) aren't really noble. Instead, Phanuel says Connor probably would not have been harmed by the caracal. He also says great deeds await you. Instead, I could put that in the message from Christ at each stop.

Welcome to the site, Betsie. I'd suggest joining the Writing Tips & Site Help group as well, where you can ask whatever questions you may have as you try to familiarize yourself with the site, and someone is sure to answer. If your request is urgent, or you want to maximize the number of eyes that see it, feel free to post directly to the Premium forum. That's one of its common uses, and is generally the fastest way to get help.

Since you're probably still in your trial phase, trying to see if the site is worthwhile, here are a few tips for you:

- Be sure to post your chapters to Premium in addition to any other groups that you think are appropriate for the written piece (you must be a member of a group to post your writing to it). The Premium group requires points to post in, but that ensures everyone on the site will see it on their home page. Also, it's where the most experienced writers usually look for posted new work to review. Those are the folks whose eyes you really want on your writing.

- The best way to get reviews is to give reviews. Go to your home page and dive in. The longer the piece, the more points it pays.

- Be sure to thank those who review your work in a timely manner, and reciprocate by reviewing their work in return, unless you really just can't stand their stories. It happens, but then let them know it's not something you normally read. However, trading reviews is how to build your network of reciprocating writers (and friends) and gather points to post your own work. Even if points weren't required, you would still need to reciprocate to get other writers to continue to review your work (they need feedback too). And reading their work, even if outside your favorite genres, generally makes you a better writer by having you study the writings of other authors, a number of whom on this site are already published and very experienced.

- The site forums tend to be fairly quiet, although I personally use the Fantasy/Magic & Sci-fi forum for brainstorming with other writers about my works in progress. You may notice that there aren't a lot of posts after 2019. That was the result of a major server crash (the backup disks went down with it), which required our site admin to restore the site all the way back to 2019. Everything (posted works and forum discussions) dated from late 2023 onward is new. Our admin says he put new procedures in place to avoid a repeat.

- Some of the site's veterans have been here over a decade, myself included. While it's a small site, the caliber of the reviewers ranges from quite good to excellent. If, after the trial period, you're still unsure of whether to set up shop here, I'd suggest trying the monthly plan until you're certain one way or another.

- The Quickee communication feature on this site is rather confusing (new members almost always send themselves Quickees at least once, rather than to the person they intended). Still, it's the only way to communicate with someone until you've sent them a connection request (and they've accepted), or they've sent you one. Most members use connection requests and the private messaging feature. Quickees are public, by the way, so anyone can see what's written there. You can delete Quickees sent to you.

That's all I can think of for now.

Welcome and please let us know if you have any questions.
Dirk

Create New Work is probably better than add, start, or new. When it's a smaller work (short story, poem, essay, article, etc.), you essentially create it and you're done. For a book, you create it and then can come back later to add more chapters (via the action buttons).

Oops. You were responding while I was updating above.
A few more that yours bring to mind are "The Road (or Path) to Heaven" or "The Highway (or Expressway) to New Jerusalem".
Shylock might be an odd duck since he converts to Christianity at the end of the play, where followers of the movement think they already are Christians.

I'm still leaning toward Mammonists for Christ. It's the perfect contradiction/assertion for the obliviously rich to make.