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My latest chapter, Shadow of the Antichrist, is up.  This is an all-new chapter. Joseph confides in Elder Amos (almost) everything that's been going on. I've extended Joseph's concern about unleashing a holy war to actually becoming the Antichrist. This is a slower chapter than I usually do, but I felt it was a necessary step for a devout Christian in these circumstances to seek help from his pastor. I kept it mercifully short by my standard. Let me know if you think it should be expanded further.

Quick, go read!

Thanks
Dirk

Question: can one notice one surroundings while lost in thought? I've got Joseph lost in thought, but am describing his surroundings...

It's not an area I want to explore right now. My purpose in choosing a Christian denomination for Joseph is primarily one of how to unfold the scene where he confides in Elder Amos everything that's going on inside him. Protestant is the most practical, otherwise I have to get into the Pope/Vatican, which would be a distraction for this book. I can explore the different faith groups if I write a sequel to this book.

I'm all caught up on Dictates of Faith. Waiting for more. Bzzt!

Also, I finally settled on Warheads Et Cetera, Inc., as the replacement for Acme. Plus a whole bunch of changes from your review, Amy.

Also started reading the Pendragon books by Rebecca Vaughn.

I'm now trying to figure out if Joseph is Catholic or Protestant. He's going to talk with Elder Amos about everything going on in his head, and I'm trying to decide if it should be a confession. If he's Catholic, then where is the Pope in my universe? Still on Imperial Earth? I'll probably make him Protestant to avoid the issue, which means I need to rename the maid droid, Rosary. Minor stuff.

Bill, it happened to me quite a while ago. I think Sol had to eventually fix it for me.

War & Stuff Corp.?

It's intended as a background character that shows up in news reports, blamed for murder and mayhem, but is not seen until the second-to-last chapter. Mostly there for fun, to keep the reader guessing what it'll do next.

I can't use Latin, Bill, since Latin implies the Imperium, whereas the tech company also sells to the Realm.

Possible names so far:
1. Monopoly, Inc.
2. Warheads and Toys Corporation (Wartoys Corp.)
3. The Company, Inc.

So far, I like 2 the best.

1 is good as it needs no explaining, but it may remind the reader of the board game everytime I refer to it.
I could use the short form for 2 (Wartoys Corp.) after first introducing the full name. The name Wartoys seems acceptable on its face as a potential defense contractor, but becomes a subtle gag as the book progresses and I add more and more stuff that they make.
3 is meh.

Thoughts?

Thanks K, Bill. The original idea was to explain Acme in a Galactipedia article about interstellar travel.  A. Hinkley (a riff on R. Hinkley, the Gilligan's Island professor) discovers the starlanes, builds the first stardrive, founds Acme, which eventually becomes a galaxy-spanning monopoly. Unfortunately, that Galactipedia article won't appear until late in Act I, so I would be using Acme (or some other name) unexplained for a dozen chapters. Acme has the advantage of being slightly silly (too much, from what you're telling) and somewhat self-explanatory.

The three options I can see are:
1. Get rid of Acme altogether.
2. Include a sentence early on explaining that Acme is a galactic tech monopoly, and expand on it before the end of Act I.
3. Rename it to something unique to my story (like Mama's Little Shipping) and, if needed, explain it briefly up front.

I'm leaning toward 3.

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K, I gather you weren't a fan of Acme, Inc. in the latest chapter. Is it because the chapter is relatively serious, or just a general dislike of Acme? So far, I've used it as the manufacturer of wisethings, droids, crispers, interstellar drones, and sound scramblers. It's meant to be a running gag the same way Mama's Little Shipping ships everything, including pizza and sewage. Speaking of nonsense in a serious chapter, there is the appearance of Aussie in chapter one. Like? Dislike?

Thanks.
Dirk