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(1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

njc wrote:

And the paperwork documenting the plane's construction was heavier than the plane.

Arthur Anderson was great at producing documents. Software, not so much. They were supposed to build telephony switch configuration software to deploy across NYNEX switches in New York. It was a distributed system with lots of parts that barely came together. They eventually fired Anderson's huge team and built a small one of independent consultants to rewrite the monster.

I initially got to develop a series of shell files to wrap around Anderson's cumbersome file management and build tools. I eventually automated the entire process forwards and backwards. If the business customer wanted some broken new feature yanked out of production, I had to be able to roll back both source and object files. We couldn't simply recompile old source files and expect the object file to be the same as what Anderson had abandoned in the build tree/production. Ah, the memories.

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What are you building?

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If it does work, then I can move on to the next part--about 700 parts on twelve copies of a circuit board.

Holy cow. When does the Enterprise leave spacedock?

The cover is too dark. Perhaps add a torch on one side that casts light over the interior. It didn't remind me of Jesus so much as it did the Mines of Moria.

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(1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

No progress. It's tax season. I have four tax returns to file, including many forms declaring all of my bank accounts, their maximum values throughout the year, etc. I also need to file a number of detailed expatriation forms. I'm paying a fortune this year for a cross-border accountant and a tax lawyer. The latter charges four hundred bucks an hour and has done iffy work so far. And my tax situation is easy, since I had no home or business to sell, no spouse or dependents, and I wisely closed my U.S.brokerage account immediately before moving to the land up over.

Boy the way that Miller played
Songs that made the hit parade
Guys like us we had it made
Those were the days...

I was chopping onions...

HEA?

No argument from me. Obstacle, not flaw. Technically, Billie is not a flaw of Joseph's either, just a scary-ass obstacle. However, Joseph's flaws lead to deaths and even to his possession by Billie.

A decaying/dying Jaylene would also add a sense of sadness to an otherwise successful journey (assuming they succeed, haven't read that far yet). A little like Lord of the Rings, where Frodo succeeds, but is so scarred, he leaves Middle Earth forever.

Kdot wrote:

This is why I think letting Anver know about how Alina killed his friend before he commits to the duel is a mistake.  It's too much outer reason and not enough Anver


... Egads! I'm in agreement with njc. Note if Amy will agree the universe could cease to exist

It's been too long since I read Acts. Why did Anver agree to the duel? He's not really the dueling type.

I didn't much care for K I m b e r l y until you killed her and everyone around her in a blast. The book felt too short to get to know her and your story world, so the ending was too abrupt and final. Kind of like the opposite of deux ex machina. Hence my delight when she showed up at J e n n a's hanging chopping heads. I thought you had resurrected her. Sometimes you just need the hero to kick ass and win.

I didn't really feel much tension throughout Anver's story, except for the feud with Alina and the events that followed it. I asked Amy many times in the first half when the real story would begin.

Anver had no standout flaws that I recall. Amy, are you taking notes? I did like him as a character, though. He was like Archie Andrews. Fifty+ years of sales and still going strong. Cha-ching. Yunker was his Jughead.

At the risk of breaking Amy's story, you could give Jaylene some form of physical and/or mental suffering (preferably both) as she decays, with only her declining will to fulfill Behira's purpose for her. Spoiler Alert: Jaylene dies at the end. :-)

I should take up writing.

Jaylene reminds me of Joseph. Neither has any interesting flaws. Maybe she's not completely healed when she's brought back to life. Then give her whatever flaws you want. Maybe her time back in this world is limited and she knows it. It would strike me as odd that the lead character's POV isn't included in the story. It would be an interesting read either way.

The West Wing was supposed to focus on the White House staff, with only limited appearances by Martin Sheen. I think it would have been a much weaker show without the brilliant, temperamental, disease-hiding Jed at its core. https://www.buzzfeed.com/robinedds/let- … .cjQxQN5P5

If I didn't have 2-3 books in mind for my story, I'd whack Joseph at the end of book one. In the first draft, he was the only MC and he was always meant to take that flying leap. Billie's evil ghost will hopefully make him more interesting this time around. Book two will expand to three POVs (including Caligula's). Don't ask me how yet. I just decided that as I wrote this. One less book to write before I drop dead. :-)

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I had that when the site first launched, but it was eventually resolved. However, I eventually switchd to the x-line tab to view the responses since it opens all of the comments at once.

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(1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

OIC. Thanks.

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Can someone please tell me if this is worded correctly (Amy, I think this is one of the cases you referred to.)

The Samurai brought his right hand up hard and fast to smack Apollo. He felt the urge to block with his left arm, which he did easily.

My question pertains to the use of the word "He" at the beginning of the second sentence. When you read it, do you think it refers to the Samurai or to Apollo? It's meant to refer to Apollo, but my brain defaults to the Samurai.

Thoughts?
Dirk

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Amy, I received a full review from you yesterday, includng closing comments. I still need to respond to it.

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You make a lot of assumptions about me, way more than I can be bothered to address. So I'll just continue with the game. The next words that come to mind are:

Bite me.

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Turns out TNBW can host the images directly. I gave up on it though. The table format doesn't look good. I was trying to include a timestamp on each post in the Royals forum.

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(1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

Thanks. Now to find a hosting site.

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(1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

Where did you host them from and how did you link them into your chapters?

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(1,634 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)

Et tu, Brute?

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(1,634 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)

I wish I was in Dixie...

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(1,634 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)

Where did we leave off with our game? Oh, yes, krem brewlay.
I suggest we resume with: teerameesoo.

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(1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

Is there a way to imbed Word tables (or images of the tables) within my chapters online? Tom Oldman mentioned that he hosts the images elsewhere and then links to them, but I think he was referring to images in thread posts. Have any of you done it? Embedding a table would be ideal, since that's probably what I'll use for the layout within the book. Images will do as a fallback. It's for a collection of fictional forum posts. I want them to look more structured than is otherwise possible with regular text formatting.

Thanks
Dirk