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I need to get you to name new characters for me. Yours are cool. I have a character named Maximilian Hunter. I like the first name, as it's important to my short story, but Hunter is crap.

Aussie has masterminded an attack on the Royal Family, resulting in 12 dead Royal Guard officers.
She's about to plan an attack on a parade of teenage cadets. In v2, it was a slaughter. Not sure how to write it for a PG audience.

My next chapter, Apollo Gets Spanked, is up. This is mostly new unless you were around for my aborted v1.

Quick, go read!
Dirk

P.S. Counting my short story, I'm actually 2-3 posts ahead of some of you. How cool is that? Amy gets a pass because she's on chemo. As for the rest, I owe some reviews, so write something!

No worries. I'm not allowed to cross the border anymore. The details are hidden in my autobiography, Into the Mind of God. :-)

I'm still on Office 2007 (runs on Windows 10!), so I just turned the feature off, as it's more annoying than helpful. There are some things software doesn't excel at yet. Try translating from English to another language using Google Translate, then translate back, and you'll see what I mean. Too many subtleties to language. Scholars still argue to this day about the translation of individual words in the Bible and how they affect the meaning of verses.

Bzzt!

I don't understand why third-person would be harder. My characters reflect all the time in third-person. It can go on for paragraphs. Occasionally, I switch to first-person/italics to emphasize certain thoughts.

How about Captain Maya?

I don't think it adds to the milieu because the next mention of Mayans is hundreds of pages away.

I have a question about Captain Spirit-of-Wind in the prologue. I mention that he's Mayan in the chapter as a quick way to explain his name, but he plays no pivotal role in the chapter (he just carries out the admiral's orders then blows himself up). The Mayans appear late in the second act and may have a larger role in v3 than they did in v2, but there's no interesting link I can create between the captain and the Mayans, unless I dedicate more page-space to him, which I can't do because the prologue is already too long.

Question: Is there any point in having him be Mayan with a fancy name if it plays no lasting role in the story? I might just as well call him Smith.

Thanks
Dirk

Thank you, gents.

Back when I was working a particularly complicated technology project, I used to walk up and down Manhattan after work. Every time I had a good idea, I would find at a payphone and leave myself a message. The 21st  century equivalent is a simple voice recorder. They're very small and lightweight and easily fit into a pocket.