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(1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

A maser might, especially if it were tuned to the resonance frequency of water, the way a microwave oven is.  The wavelength is about 10 cm, so focussing will require a largish aperture.

The eyeballs would pop first, I expect.  And if the heating isn't fast enough, the soft openings would probably vent the pressure before the pop.

Knowing that you're going to do this, you can set this up ahead.  Hit us with the description of Petra, in repeated pieces, in the previous two chapters.  Likewise the other woman.  You give us a strong picture of the living corpse, but not the bodies involved in a major character and plot event.  Then when you tell us that Petra's hand fumbles over the other woman's breasts, that her arms run into them on the side, we won't be surprised.

Okay, you shouldn't be quite so hamfisted (and male?) but Petra is going to be finding her way around this new body's obstacles for a while,

If you can make us fall in love with both old and new Petra, you can award yourself a double eagle.  (See the opening of =The Woman in White=.)

At least Petra won't have to pick out a whole new wardrobe, since the priests all wear the same thing.

Eggs and ham, bread and jam, what a cram!

You need to feed all the mouths ... how many mouths are there?

Petra's got a new body and has noticed the differences.  What differences?

The description I ask for is relevant to the action.

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(1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

I'm slowly getting my electronics parts into some kind of order.  A casual observer will see piles of neatly labelled boxes ... but won't be able to see the shrinking of the piles and trays that are emptying into them.

I have the next section with Merran Maybe Almost Ready.  I also have a Maybe Clear Picture of a chapter that I hope won't be more than two beyond it.  I'll try to get something out in a day or two.  And it takes me a lot longer than those few evening hours, by the time the planning is done.

Anyhow, on to your new chapter!

Cheese, Bread, Peas, Please,
Lots of them, Lots of them,
Cheese, Bread, Peas, Please,
Lots of them Please.
(Sing to the =Tanz= from =The Camina Burana= of Carl Orff. https://youtu.be/cJtPK3aS4vQ at 16:04)

Incorrigible Punster.
Do not incorrige.

Cat scat coffee

OTOH, if Catherine does strike the deathblow, she'll have more to work over.

The reason I suggest Star Trek Beyond is because, even though they take it over the top and off the deep end, there's a lot of multiple-actor action stuff as the good guys rise.  And with two good guys and one bad, that's what you have.

I also suggest switching PoV and letting us know how Peter sees his situation.

If he's going to trip, it should be over some of the mill machinery or appurtenances--the same obstacles with which he has trapped Matthew--or else something that we've been told is there.

If you can work out the master plot and lay clues, you can choreograph the fight.  You can give us some hint that the mill is built on a hill, and part of the upper story reached out over the (missing) wheel.

Wow.  Randy, that's great.  That's Tony the Tiger grrEEAAAT!

Oh, and if Catherine is overextended on the stab, the dagger will probably tear the wound wider as she falls back, off balance, trying to escape Peter's well-telegraphed attempt at a deathblow.  The faster blood loss may be what causes Peter to lose his balance, strike his sword arm while trying to regain it, and finally lose his sword--which might strike Catherine guard-first, terrifying her but leaving her with no injury.

I hate to suggest this, but if you can find a theater still running Star Trek Beyond, you may want to watch it a couple of times to pick up the sequencing of the multiple-good-guy battles, right up to the last rescue.

Janet (AJ) Reid wrote:

It will be beyond super awesome if you could be there too!
Speaking of trips and driving, how is your health going lately?

The muscles that were in good shape (relative to their duties) are pretty much rehabbed.  I'm lucky that my hip swivel exercises were just the right thing.  The muscles that weren't up to their jobs before are still a bit worse.  I have to keep looking for something that will work them in just the right way.

For Amy: The muscles involved are the top (superiorl?) ends of the glutes, especially the maximae, and sometimes the broad bases (inferior?) of the erector spinae.  The upper parts of the erector spinae, the parts that spasm, are not apparently involved, for which I'm grateful.  (I've had back spasms just twice.  They were mild and they were way too much.)

I can carry nearly my normal load of bags, computer, notebooks, etc., and although I still move my cane between my sofa and the car, I can probably just leave it in the car now.

Of course, it would help to strengthen all the leg and hip muscles, but I have to be careful of my knees.  Of course, the more work the hip and thigh muscles do, the less the knee tendons have to do to adjust balance, and the less the stress on the knee cartilage.  My knee cartilage is torn up, with loose bodies in both knees.  I hope I never have a cop demanding I rise from the driver seat on just one leg.

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(1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

And your books take place at the same time, threads converging.  Mine are sequential.

max keanu wrote:

... ((Bernie Madoff)) did get what was coming to him; imprisonment and the suicide of a son.

Sorry Max, but I have to disagree.  Whatever you think Bernie Madoff deserved, how can you argue that his son deserved to be driven to suicide?

I sometimes favor draconian punishments, but I'm sensitive about saying that the people around the malefactors deserve to suffer with them, especially when it leads to suicide.

Catherine is not a fighter. She pulls the dagger out unintentionally when she is trying to escape Peter's stroke.  That is when the spurting begins, and the BP drop starts.  Peter staggers and Matthew can grab his swinging leg.  Peter tries to throw his sword at Catherine but it goes off to the side, tumbling.

Is that what they mean by a gas jet?

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(1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

You have got your plot lines worked out and your characters fully drawn.  This new plot horror will be good for leading a good guy into serious mistakes (I'm thinking maybe Glaselle) and opening some interesting, foreshadowing questions (How do we tell history about this?  Maybe we shouldn't?)

But the culmination of the thread needs to wait until Hell comes for things, handbasket in hand.  I can't leave too much time to brood on this one, because folly-made disaster must follow fast and faster.

Checked.  I80 is supposed tp be a shorter drive.

Not close to me, but doable with motel rest nights.    No way to swing through Mesa on such a short smile trip.

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(1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

No, but but I have to work out the big plot and character elements.  Book 7 only begins the second main part.  I've got a lo to fill in.

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(1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

Did a couple of reviews.  I'll be tied up most of the day, but I thought of a plot element for later in the story.  I should begin laying the ground for it in B3 or B4, and the event probably should come in B7.  I need to find an hour or so to start writing up more serious notes.  Let's see how the day goes.

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(14 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)

Wow.  Great!