Ragarding leftover Magic: use a LOTR solution: no new mages, magic fades over years, immortals become mortal. Poor Anver--all that study.
876 2017-02-24 10:36:05
Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread (1,905 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
877 2017-02-22 15:54:32
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
... and a glue solution wasn't quite strong enough. I have two other things to try.
I'm working on a set of scenes to show what Melayne is up to. I'll put them up as a chapter even though they will have to interlard the other story threads. Right now I'm working on a brief appearance by Pengrit.
878 2017-02-19 13:52:15
Re: Please post here regarding a completed review (671 replies, posted in Alpha to Omega - Review Group)
Reviewed Matthew Abelack's A to O Krudges, Ch. 1.
879 2017-02-19 12:30:55
Re: Please post here regarding a completed review (671 replies, posted in Alpha to Omega - Review Group)
Reviewed Randy's A Cartel's Revenge, Ch's 5 & 6.
880 2017-02-19 08:27:26
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Prod as you like. I've got several irons in the fire and several pots to keep stirring. And I owe some reviews, which I'm catching up on, and I just saw the next few steps for Melayne ... which I'm writing up as a chapter of scenes that will have to be spread among other chapters.
And I've had some plot problems settle out, so I've been spending time with that. I think the path I'm sending Merran on after I get her settled on the other side of the Rockpile will carry her to the end of B2 and a cliffhanger. The sort that her mother would not like ... and might shatter a world to fix, if she weren't out of practice.
And I'm making notes on index cards at a terrifying rate.
There's also a useful little circuit that I blew out accidentally and have to fix. Or rather, to replace, with a more robust version. That's sprouted a couple of runners that I have to keep going, and I had a wrong turning on a heat sink problem. That reminds me--I have to order some nylon spacers. And I need to buy some steel #10-32 flatheads, preferably Phillips. I've got some battery holders coming in next week, replacements for others I ordered that didn't quite meet their diagrams (raised lettering on surfaces I need flat for gluing).
So I'm waddling and stumbling as fast as I can.
But Merran would be glad to know you care
881 2017-02-18 12:35:13
Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread (1,905 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Happy Ever After, distinct from HFN.
882 2017-02-18 06:40:28
Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread (1,905 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
But it's not a flaw; it's an obstacle.
Look at the flaws you've listed for Anver. How could Jaylene fall into that sort of flaw, either by deficiency or excess? Does her devotion to Tazar almost get someone killed? Require apologies to the Great Houses? Cause her to miss something important developing at the Temple?
BTW, Anver putting his studies ahead of stolen wealth might not be a flaw .
883 2017-02-15 17:02:56
Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread (1,905 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
"Perfection is achieved not when there is nothing left to add but when there is nothing left to take away."
884 2017-02-15 15:06:52
Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread (1,905 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Ramifications from Sulder's death may include anger and doubt, exposing character issues and creating doubt.
885 2017-02-15 13:18:02
Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread (1,905 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
K, you got there first! But Is Anver's distaste for his responsibilities an obstacle or a flaw? I think it's a flaw. Or maybe a quirk that helps us empathize with him.
He's goaded into the duel with Alina, maybe for his feelings rather than just cause. This is why I think letting Anver know about how Alina killed his friend before he commits to the duel is a mistake. It's too much outer reason and not enough Anver
886 2017-02-15 13:13:22
Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread (1,905 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
At the risk of breaking Amy's story, you could give Jaylene some form of physical and/or mental suffering (preferably both) as she decays, with only her declining will to fulfill Behira's purpose for her.
That's not a flaw. That's an obstacle. A flaw leads to misunderstanding, misinterpretation, or wrong decision.
The Greeks showed us that the best flaws are strengths in the wrong place and time or out of proportion.
Jaylene is a Cold War leader. Now open war looms.
Her handling of Tazar's imprisonment involves all the right choices. Maybe she should make a mistake, corrected by someone else? Maybe her mistake drives her final desperation in the prison?
887 2017-02-15 11:03:44
Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread (1,905 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Anver has flaws. He doesn't want Kha's job. He doesn't want more power. He's stuck with a staff with a mind of it's own. And he's vulnerable to Katerine.
888 2017-02-15 06:58:44
Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread (1,905 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
You're not wrong, but I think there's more to it than that. Unfortuneately, I need sleep right now. Two Q's to start: what are Anver's flaws? How has resurrecton changed Jaylene?
889 2017-02-15 03:25:20
Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread (1,905 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
That would really work Kha's last nerve, considering that I have him not casting magic, starving, and carrying Sil on a litter as he moves toward the trade road. All with a horse following at a distance, within easy reach or a whistle away.
Hmph. Might just consider that one since I love cause Kha stress. Some characters just deserve it :-)
Kha might not DESERVE Horse's loyalty (which is very rare among horses) and he may not know what to do with it ... but it comes at a critical moment. If Horse dies, Kha should feel it in spite of himself, if only for helping him save Sil--or, if she will survive death, his own life in which he may enjoy Sil. (This may provide some of the changes in Kha that spook Anver. Kat might understand better.) And Sil might have something to tell Kha about gratitude to Horse. It might even echo what Airen--and even Marion--tell Kha.
What would Airen be like mimicking her mother? How would she react afterwords?
890 2017-02-15 03:14:52
Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread (1,905 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Progressing from one crisis/goal to another is not a problem. How you do it is.
If you're going to kill Sulder, we should see the contrast between the good and gentle man who sacrifices for Tazar and the wickedness of his murder. We the reader should feel it almost as badly as Jaylene does; we might wonder what it means to Alda from the clues given, and Tazar's gratitude might make his purpose terrifying. Instead of a constellation of two, you get a constellation of three. We should feel her fear at leaving the Order above unguarded while we she goes for the Order below.
Rearrange Zylpf and the dangers so there is already danger pursuing them.
Let them find, at a critical moment, that the danger is not what they feared.
Decide what is essential with the Taken and telescope the rest.
And someone can give me similar advice. I'll argue with it and go in a different direction, but it will help nevertheless.
891 2017-02-14 14:54:34
Re: Odd delays (17 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
If you use it, explain it.
892 2017-02-14 14:01:48
Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread (1,905 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Kill Sulder AFTER Tazar is rescued. He can be weakened by curing Slash. (And don't give up om The Horrors.) Trim stuff like the early Sharing.
893 2017-02-14 02:25:53
Re: Odd delays (17 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Yes, you can reply to comments in X-line (but not highlight new comments).
Those delays seem to be a function of network connection quality. I suspect that the protocol stack on Windoze can't handle glitches in the POST operation well, but I haven't looked inside the machinery. I don't know if there's anything in the web page programming that can help it. Some internet commerce pages seem trouble-free; some 3rd-party blog engines (discus, esp.) seem to behave the same way.
Imagine that the Edsel was subcontracted to Yugo and built with Pinto and Vega parts, along with some of the glue they used in the Boston tunnel ceiling (the one that collapsed). Its quality would exceed that of almost all software written today.
And when you're trying to make web programming work reliably, you depend on the reliability of the Edselyugopintovega underneath, glue and all. Makes you wish for baling wire and chewing gum. And duct tape.
894 2017-02-13 08:37:20
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
The tangle mentioned above has opened the door to so many plot choices that I need to spend serious time on it. Meanwhile, I know what Mama is going to do next. After a day or three she'll get lucky and completely misinterpret what she learns.
Oh, instead of fooling around with the current limiter, I'm replacing the output transistor with a gutsier one. I have to figure out where to fit its heat sink. And I'm considering adding a fixed current source for the current mirror that provides the drive to the output transistor.
I thought I'd ordered the current-sharing resistors for the current bootstrap transistors. Apparently not. Well, on reflection I want bigger ones anywsy, for about a 65 mV drop at full current.
895 2017-02-10 06:06:13
Re: The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B. (1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Imagine that the Edsel was subcontracted to Yugo and built with Pinto and Vega parts, along with some of the glue they used in the Boston tunnel ceiling (the one that collapsed). Its quality would exceed that of almost all software written today.
896 2017-02-09 13:34:08
Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread (1,905 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Going into a master mage's school was like going into a fortress. But Fortress Alina was especially ... creepy. Tawdry in its opulance, a monument to the ego of Mistress Alina, the life force at the center.
Not the words to use, but maybe the pictures to paint, with a bit of cangiante.
897 2017-02-09 13:24:59
Re: The Kurdish Connection - Two Great Reviews! (17 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Congratulations again!
898 2017-02-09 12:35:19
Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread (1,905 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Anent the reviews
Yunker obliviscar numquam. (Never forget Yunker.)
Perfect and progressive tenses. (More precisely, perfect or progressive aspects. The Wikipedia article is worth reading but it's written with the dusty odor of Professional Grammarian.)
"He goes." --Simple present, which is used in English to show repetitive or -as-a-rule action. It's also used for future action with a time qualifier. ("He retires in three years.")
"He is going." --Present progressive (or continuing present), which indicates specific action in the present.
"He went." --Simple past.
"He was going." -- Past progressive.
"He had gone." --Past perfect, also called pluperfect (the name used for the past perfect when studying Latin).
"He had been going." --Past perfect progressive.
The perfect and progressive aspects are also applied to the future: 'will go', 'will be going', 'will have gone', 'will have been going'.
Two notes:
English has a moderately complex system of verb tense, aspect, mood, etc. I've heard that modern Italian is much more complex, and read that the Greek of Plato and Aristotle has a verb system that makes Italian look primitive. (Molon labe is not Come and take them (a taunt) but Come in order that you may take them, also a taunt. And one of the words is an idiomatic irregular contracted form.)
If John McWhorter's heresy is to be believed (Our Magnificent Bastard Tongue) our use of auxlary verbs comes to us from the Gaelic languages, most particularly Welsh.
899 2017-02-08 20:32:52
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Why is is that when you are thinking, working productively on one things, four other ideas come to you? And why, when you are roadblocked on one thing, you're roadblocked on everything?
Sigh.
Amy, I'll do two reviews for you. I have to do a couple more for other people today, and that won't even catch me up.
Meanwhile, while I was working on a 'final' demo box for my flasher circuit--weeks ago, and I still have to cut the opening for the switch--I got the flywheel diode backwards. It actually managed to flash, but drew so much current it was probably responsible for blowing the output of my little battery-powered power supply. That has to be fixed, and I'd rather it be resistent to future damage of that sort.
It looks like the bootstrap transistor is blown to a short. If it's not the bootstrap, it's the main output. Either way, I'm redesigning that part, using multiple bootstrap transistors in parallel. That will allow it to carry more current with less current on the 'main' output. But ... paralleling bipolar junction transistors requires current sharing resistors. The low values I need are only available in surface-mount, about half the size of a grain of rice. Since all of that has to be mounted on the heat sink, I have an interesting physical design problem. I know what I want, but not yet how to get it.
The main output transistor will also get a heatsink. There's only one kind available for TO-92 package devices, and it's a flat teaspoon-sized blade, so I have to move things around on my little circuit board. (I'm starting with a new board.)
I want to put a low-pass filter on the voltage-regulating section so that brief current spikes don't let the output drop as the internal resistance of the batteries cuts in--but I want to be able to switch it out. It looks like it will take less board space with the parts soldered point-to-point on the switch.
The battery circuit switches were a beast last time. They'll probably be a beast this time.
And now ... as I was trying to work on the physical design of the heat sink-and-bootstrap unit ('power block') I got nagged by the thought that I could still overload my main output transistor. The solution is a current limited between the output and the current bootstrap. The current source for the output transistor goes through a resistor that develops a voltage as the output current rises. When it gets up around the working range for junction voltages, the current bypasses that sensing resistor, feeding the base terminals of the bootstrap transistors. Their output--up to 200 times the current they receive--is added to the output transistor's current.
So the current limiter has to go between the collector of the output transistor and the current bootstrap. It will drop probably about 1.4 volts, reducing the output voltage I can get with a given battery voltage. It will also have interesting effects as the output transistor goes into saturation with its collector drive cut off.
So I need to test and tweak the limiting circuit (3 to 9 hours) and figure out how to squeeze it on the circuit board. It needs just four nodes, but it involves two transistors tied to each other and the output transistor ... and that makes for a hard fit, especially since the output transistor has to sit in a way that will make the flat heatsink mounting work. (The heatsink for the power block is a finned chunk of extruded aluminum. I'd prefer a black finish, but this is what I got cheap.)
AND ... while I was working on that problem I suddenly got A Very Good Idea to increase the tangle Merran and Pausonallie will get themselves into. I'm struggling to get stuff revised and get to that part. And I can only remember one of the orders I need to place today ... sigh!
This after four days when I couldn't think long enough about one thing to make progress.
On to reviews!
900 2017-02-07 13:00:09
Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread (1,905 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
But was Sosol the original monster, killed to stop her, after which Faulter vowed to pursue necromancy to get her back?