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Ragarding leftover Magic: use a LOTR solution: no new mages, magic fades over years, immortals become mortal.  Poor Anver--all that study.

Reviewed Matthew Abelack's A to O Krudges, Ch. 1.

Prod as you like.  I've got several irons in the fire and several pots to keep stirring.  And I owe some reviews, which I'm catching up on, and I just saw the next few steps for Melayne ... which I'm writing up as a chapter of scenes that will have to be spread among other chapters.

And I've had some plot problems settle out, so I've been spending time with that.  I think the path I'm sending Merran on after I get her settled on the other side of the Rockpile will carry her to the end of B2 and a cliffhanger.  The sort that her mother would not like ... and might shatter a world to fix, if she weren't out of practice.

And I'm making notes on index cards at a terrifying rate.

There's also a useful little circuit that I blew out accidentally and have to fix.  Or rather, to replace, with a more robust version.  That's sprouted a couple of runners that I have to keep going, and I had a wrong turning on a heat sink problem.  That reminds me--I have to order some nylon spacers.  And I need to buy some steel #10-32 flatheads, preferably Phillips.  I've got some battery holders coming in next week, replacements for others I ordered that didn't quite meet their diagrams (raised lettering on surfaces I need flat for gluing).

So I'm waddling and stumbling as fast as I can. 

But Merran would be glad to know you care

But it's not a flaw; it's an obstacle.

Look at the flaws you've listed for Anver.  How could Jaylene fall into that sort of flaw, either by deficiency or excess?  Does her devotion to Tazar almost get someone killed?  Require apologies to the Great Houses?  Cause her to miss something important developing at the Temple?

BTW, Anver putting his studies ahead of stolen wealth might not be a flaw  .

Ramifications from Sulder's death may include anger and doubt, exposing character issues and creating doubt.

That's not a flaw.  That's an obstacle.   A flaw leads to misunderstanding, misinterpretation, or wrong decision.

The Greeks showed us that the best flaws are strengths in the wrong place and time or out of proportion.

Jaylene is a Cold War leader.   Now open war looms.

Her handling of Tazar's imprisonment involves all the right choices.  Maybe she should make a mistake, corrected by someone else?  Maybe her mistake drives her final desperation in the prison?

You're not wrong, but I think there's more to it than that.  Unfortuneately, I need sleep right now.  Two Q's to start: what are Anver's flaws? How has resurrecton changed Jaylene?

Progressing from one crisis/goal to another is not a problem.  How you do it is.

If you're going to kill Sulder, we should see the contrast between the good and gentle man who sacrifices for Tazar and the wickedness of his murder.  We the reader should feel it almost as badly as Jaylene does; we might wonder what it means to Alda from the clues given, and Tazar's gratitude might make his purpose terrifying.  Instead of a constellation of two, you get a constellation of three.  We should feel her fear at leaving the Order above unguarded while we she goes for the Order below.

Rearrange Zylpf and the dangers so there is already danger pursuing them.

Let them find, at a critical moment, that the danger is not what they feared.

Decide what is essential with the Taken and telescope the rest.

And someone can give me similar advice.  I'll argue with it and go in a different direction, but it will help nevertheless.

Kill Sulder AFTER Tazar is rescued.  He can be weakened by curing Slash.  (And don't give up om The Horrors.)  Trim stuff like the early Sharing.

The tangle mentioned above has opened the door to so many plot choices that I need to spend serious time on it.  Meanwhile, I know what Mama is going to do next.  After a day or three she'll get lucky and completely misinterpret what she learns.

Oh, instead of fooling around with the current limiter, I'm replacing the output transistor with a gutsier one.  I have to figure out where to fit its heat sink.  And I'm considering adding a fixed current source for the current mirror that provides the drive to the output transistor.

I thought I'd ordered the current-sharing resistors for the current bootstrap transistors.  Apparently not.  Well, on reflection I want bigger ones anywsy, for about a 65 mV drop at full current.

Going into a master mage's school was like going into a fortress.  But Fortress Alina was especially ... creepy.  Tawdry in its opulance, a monument to the ego of  Mistress Alina, the life force at the center.

Not the words to use, but maybe the pictures to paint, with a bit of cangiante.