From time to time I find I've missed a review in a flurry. A reminded would be enough for me.
What happens if I'm getting ready to paste a chapter in when a review comes in? Does the paste fail? Does the chapter refuse to update because of one--or several--reviews that come in just at that moment? What if I'm running on a laptop with a limited battery runtime?
Before we go that far, what about a count of unreplied reviews on the main page?
Reviewed Matt Abelak's Krudges, Chapter 8.
I've got two reviews ro finish before yours, Amy. But look for them late today
Oh, I need all the help I can get. But especially Amy's. And I really, really, really want to read the rest of the story she's working on. And maybe see the publication of =Jump Me Higher=.
Thanks guys. I'd say I was sorry for beating tux guys up on reviews, but that's probably why you like me.
Aww, she's twigged to our secret!
Tuesday...
Phew. Deep breath.
Early or late?
Just reviewed Jube's short, Pincess in a Portrait.
Everyone here is pulling for you!
Optional comma before 'everywhere'.
Thid is clearly dialogue, either present or past. You must allow for the speaker's voice.
And (oops) I meant to say to move the comma before the 'and', so that it signals that the conjunction ties in higher in the parse tree.
I kneel for the wet-noodle lashes.
I say none of the above. Use only the first comma. The parse is clear at every other point. Only at point of the first comma does the reader have to know to start a new branch high up in the parse tree.
Nice. I still think thr title should come nearer the edges.
No apologies needed, but the update is most welcome. I've had other things on my hands, too.
For a night effect, reduce the saturation and tint the color slightly towards blue.
And the participle phalanx advanced perforce upon its helpless prey ...
Just reviewed CJ's Raven's Curse, Ch's 64 and 68.
I owe reviews up the wazoo. (Actually, up about 2+1/2 wazoon.) Please don''t be offended by the order I do them in.
The font is fine. It just needs to be a bit bigger.
Is the foreground character good guy or bad?
With the characters that dark, you may need to amp up their lighter parts a bit so the eye can resolve them well.
You might try the browser's BACK button. Depending on the browser and the progrsmming of the web page, your changes.might still be there, waiting to be entered.
But yes, it's a nasty corner case in design.
Enlarge the title upward. If necesary, fold the series part into two lines. Lighten the good guy and make the color more natur. Light dome, dark beneath doesn't show the characters off very well.
Is the space a library? The Warehouse? Help us see that better.
The double appositive is the problem. Reordering weakens the appositive sequnce, which ends in the original with the stronger item.
You've got a double/nested appositvive/parenthetical. I'd go with #2, but my justification is my global-grammar-tree system. I cringe at the stylebook rules that could do this in a reasonable way. (And they probably cringe over me.)
Norm d'Plume wrote:Are you planning to post your latest revision of NS, Janet?
Not at the moment, Dirk. Plan is to do the revision, let it rest while I start with book #2. I'll post that one again for reviews.
And you have peace from my pestering you about participles.
I hope to catch up on reviews later today. (Before 02:00 tomorrow!)
