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Some ideas are just too toxic ... .

Per your review--YOU have the blouse wet.  The brief reaction says that Jaylene has earned more respect with the guards--and with the prisoners.

Further thought on 'Distrusting Alda ...'

Without retracting my new mantra ('Don't Fear the Copula') I'm thinking this could be turned positive: If she trusted Behira, she had to trust Alda.  It does change what goes unstated, but it might better expose the vulnerable part of Jaylene's faith.

I really hope you do the bit with Jaylene's hand going to the scar, and her murmuring thanks.  That act showed a kind of courage in Tazar, call it courage of the heart--courage and greatness.  I'm not qualified to call it a masterstroke, but it belongs on the dais with them.  Having Jaylene acknowledge it will help the reader understand why she treasures this friend so--and what the Wolves were about.

Of course, you might be saving that for a later chapter.

"I lifted that" -- "The dead don't puke" ---

I wonder if The Other Side of Alda is coming out.  You know, Brekin/Charm has two sides.  Melody/Adalaya were two sides.  Alda has two sides.

Right here I can image Alda back in the "I don't know, ma'am.  Out of mojo," mode.  Instead of bragging how she lifted Tazar, she is sharing her wonder.  Instead of asserting 'The dead don't puke', she offers it ... not quite a question.

Just a quasirandom thought.

Cellphones won't keep you Christmas tree fresh.

I'm rather proud of that extra mosfet in the flash driver.  Even with the bright flash, once I get low-leakage caps in there the -average- current draw will be under 10 milliamps.  Four C cells should be able to keep the flasher up over 900 hours.  Maybe even past 1200.

And I've got a half-decent third-order low pass filter integrated with the voltage transient protection.  Not theoretically elegant, but quite effective.

The change in the network topology is the wye-delta (or tee-pi) transform.  Contrary to the article, I'm going from wye to delta to save a circuit node.  I should have done it long before (and a practiced circuit designer would have) but I can do it now, and then drop one of the resistors and save some current (like a practiced circuit designer would have).  The power rail edge of the circuit board will get even hairier, but I'll have room for the zener.  Before I order any, I want to fake a zener with a bjt and two resistors.  I'll have to jury-rig the connection off the circuit board, and temporarily  change a resistor, but with a little bit of luck I'll have both low and high transition hysteresis back.

And then I can order a dozen low-current 2.1V zeners, and go back to work on the pilot/pigeon flasher.

Amy, your Ch11 is next.

Not really.  Titles do get re-used, though I wouldn't suggest The Nine Tailors or Gone With the Wind unless for a short story where they were particularly apt--or humorous, as for example, The Nine Taylors.

Well, making the changes in the output 'instrument' circuits brings it to a point where I understand its behavior just about completely.  Now, the low-level hysteresis circuit isn't being activated.  If I move that mosfet to the battery rail, it will activate properly, but I'll have to clamp the output, which will require an extra node and a low-level zener diodes.  The diodes I would need are several days away by mail order.  I can make the topology more efficient to save a node, but the zener I don't have.

I can fake one temporarily with a bjt and resistors.  That will have to be jury-rigged because it takes another node--unless I can be godawful clever somehow.

You left a few typos.  There are a couple of places where I'd like to prod you again.

I have to thank you for teaching me my own rules.  When it comes to repeating words, I don't believe in avoiding it at all costs, but there are circumstances when I like to do it, and circumstances where I don't, as you have just taught me.

In the scene where Threckesrom pours for three people with increasing difficulty I am please to use 'pour' three times,  for three repititions of the same action.  But if Kirsey had poured out his soul two paragraphs later, I would have looked for a different word because the action is different.

YMMV.

Problem in part is in the indicator circuits I'm using to watch what's happening.  I'm still thinking BJT current-operated, and I didn't move the voltage reference to the battery rail.  I'll take care of that after more sleep and a trip to Home Depot ... and maybe some work on Erevain.