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Working on Merran's next chapter.  I spend hours catching up with stuff, another hour or so on how I'm going to do this or that bit that I haven't done before, then I spend a couple more hours getting names that feel right, and I have an hour or two before I'm falling over for want of sleep.

But soon.  Not quite Real Soon Now, but Soon.

On the sound of names and other words:

Call upon the wheels, master, call upon the wheels,
Weary grow the holidays when you miss the meals,
Through the Gate of Treason, through the gate within,
Cometh fear and greed of fame, cometh deadly sin;
If a man grow faint, master, take him ere he kneels,
Take him, break him, rend him, end him, roll him, crush him  with the wheels.

Behemoth is my serving man!
Before the conquered hosts of Pan
Riding tamed Leviathan,
Loud I sing for well I can

RESURGAM and IO PAEAN,
IO, IO, IO, PAEAN!!

Read these aloud and let the shape of the words shape your voice.

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Then try Jane Haddam's completed Demarkian series, esp. =Precious Blood=, =Act of Darkness=, and =Cheating at Solitaire=.

You might find =The Lost Gallows= more to your taste than anything in Christie; it includes a car chase in which one driver is dead.

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No, John Dickson Carr, who also wrote as Carter Dickson.  His best?  Open to taste, of course, but I'd suggest =The Sleeping Sphinx= (Gideon Fell), =The Lost Gallows= (Henri Bencolin), and =She Died a Lady= (Sir Henry Merrivale).

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True also of most of Christie and Carr.  Not so for Ellery Queen, since Queen comes in with his policeman father.
Starting the story before the murder lets the reader see the conflicts and tensions from which the murder arises, and even wonder who the victim will be.  It gives context which can make the death more dramatic, or carry its ripples through to the reader.
I think the question to ask is "Is the opening a story that engages the reader?"

My favorites wouldn't fit the bill.  Offhand, EQ's =Cat of Many Tails= and maybe =The Player on the Other Side=.  Jane Haddam's =Precious Blood= might fit, and actually is a favorite.   Hmm, need to think a bit more.

The point is the motto.

And yes, that author gave fair warning in the first strip.

"The trick is to commit crimes so confusing that the police are embarrassed to report them."  Aubrey, in a long-ago Something Positive cartoon.

That cartoon aimed originally for a certain kind of moral gross-out, beginning with the first page.  It wove in and out of more serious stuff.  (something positive.net, and I warned you.  That assuredly means you, K.)

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I don't know.  I prefer to ask whether the others on the forum will consider it a useful contribution.  This varies with audience of the forum, small clubby group versus everybody.

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Topic drift?

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Topic drift?

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Book 2 of The Sorcerers Progress, Earth by Fire: https://www.thenextbigwriter.com/conten … /version/0 .  Looks like it's published everywhere it needs to be

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It's a chapter from Being a Complete and Unembellished Account of the Instructive Journeys and Improving Adventures of the Sober and Sagacious Count Hulhauzen Lundersot, and of His Life and Times, presented as a Seeming.

It could also be a u-shaped arc rather than a geometric straight line.

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Well, see for yourself.

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Thppfft.

Anyway I have a chapter up.  It's not in the main storyline, but it's a diversion of sorts and it introduces a character.  And a legend of sorts: Count Hulhauzen Lundersot.  But don't expect too much of him.

The three-book series by Correia and Ringo in Correia's Monster Hunter universe (Grunge, Sinners, Saints) end with the protagonist's death, described by another character.  It was set up in the very first book, and does not read as a tragedy.  Impact, yes, but grief without sorrow.

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Over at MGC, the fourth installment in a series on horses for writers: https://madgeniusclub.com/2018/09/05/a- … more-23600

Haven't read the story, but the synopsis mixes a high-stakes bet with a great deal of personal faith in each other, and perhaps a great, determined commitment to each other

Wa'tcher beef?

First and last, though it's all worth hearing.

Dirk,
May be relevant: https://youtu.be/BymDPZ7TyNM . Start around minute 26 and give it at least 5 minutes.

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BLAM!

It seems to pick random words instead of using the input I gave it.

He definitely prefers a good read to a live performance.

BriefCatch providesfive quantitative measures of writing quality.  To collapse these measures, this post uses the average (mean) as the focal variable.

BriefCatch’s scores run from zero to 100 for the five measures, which are Flow, Plain English, Punchiness, Reading Happiness and Sentence Length.

From http://www.scotusblog.com/2018/07/empir … cus-blues/ .

I don't have this software, and I suspect it's expensive.  But the five criteria are interesting, especially if they are in order of importance. For example, The Shield of Achilles is remarkably readable, especially given its sophistication.  It is also noteworthy for its many long sentences, which flow so well their length goes unnoticed.