Everyone struggles.
Neither side realizes what's at stake for the other side.
The conversations themselves would not push the lover to suicide, but they lay the path.  Something else, something of (apparently) pure chance gives that final push.  Or perhaps we see him draw a false conclusion--after the fact--from something that Romano said, perhaps inspired by something else.  If that something else has a back-link to the satanic cardinal, so much the better.
Does Romano want to believe the cardinal?  Will he be caught between what he'd like to believe and what he really believes?

Ellery Queen was a master of sliding from narrator's description to narrated story and back.

The case began on the outskirts of an upstate-New York city with the dreadful name of Eulalia, behind the flaking shutters of a fat and curlicued house with architectural dandruff, recalling for all the world some blowsy ex-Bloomer Girl from the Gay Nineties of its origin.

The owner, a formerly wealthy man named DiCampo, possessed a grandeur not shared by his property, although it was no less fallen into ruin. His falcon’s face, more Florentine than Victorian, was—like the house—ravaged by time and the inclemencies of fortune; but haughtily so, and indeed DiCampo wore his scurfy purple velvet house jacket like the prince he was entitled to call himself, but did not.
....
The Lincoln collector, an elderly man who looked like a migrant fruit picker, had plucked his fruits well: Harbidger was worth about $ 40,000,000, every dollar of which was at the beck of his mania for Lincolniana. Tungston, who was almost as rich, had the aging body of a poet and the eyes of a starving panther, armament that had served him well in the wars of Poeana.
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“I must say, Mr. DiCampo,”remarked Harbidger, “that your letter surprised me.”He paused to savor the wine his host had poured from an ancient and honorable bottle (DiCampo had filled it with California claret before their arrival). “May I ask what has finally induced you to offer the book and document for sale?”

If it weren't pitch-perfect, it would be born-to-the-purple prose.

I'll repeat my recommendation for =The Secrets of Story= by Matt Bird.

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This might be more 30's, but 'war paint' for makeup.

Congratulations, AGAIN!

Many congratulations, Randy.

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njc wrote:

I am seriously pissed with both Verizon and the gutless, witless utility regulators, and I hope that people rip the government officials off in their personal lives the way Verizon has ripped off the people they are supposed to represent.

In the words of Alma TCBoyken's (catrotatorsquarterly.com) Tycho Rhonorida: "If he weren't a schaef he wouldn't have been fleeced."

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I'm here ... and trying to clear some tasks to my multitasking limit.  Unfortunately the State of New Jersey has allowed Verizon to completely default on its obligation to keep the phones working in all circumstances, and copper-wired, centrally-powered service (POTS--Plain Old Telephone Service) is ending in favor of Fiber-to-the-Home, with power backup provided by D-cell batteries that are only expected to last for 24 hours.  ("Don't turn it on unless you are expecting a call."--Seriously!?  Then what good is it?)  Worse, I fear there may be active circuitry in the battery box, making it hard to cutover automatically and hard to replace.  I may need to go for a full UP$, with 400 Wh or more. $$$$$$$

I have to clear wall space, etc., while I'm trying to get other projects cleared.

I am seriously pissed with both Verizon and the gutless, witless utility regulators, and I hope that people rip the government officials off in their personal lives the way Verizon has ripped off the people they are supposed to represent.

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And the brothers Handlebar and Hersheybar.  This is so-bad-it's-good carried to the level of a literary atrocity.

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"Each level was obliquely protected by out-thrusting battlements corniced and groined at the odd enjambments.  Each odd enjambment was set perpendicular to every adjacent even one-way thoroughfare.  Needless to say, the inhabitants were always late for their appointments, if not totally lost."
      ---- =Bored of the Rings=
I'm struggling with some geometrical architectonics, trying to spare the Library of the Academy from the fate of Minas Trony.

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Each time I think I've got the next chapter half done, I find myself saying 'No, that's too damn long for the action around it.'  I'm also trying to assimilate lessons from the recent FBeasts movie, good (eliciting empathy, depicting depravity) and bad (over-use of technique, excess complexity).

Wow!  'Awesome' doesn't cover it.

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Congratulations!

TW also has one model for style.  It serves her well, for the kind of story she is writing.  It would not serve as well for Amy's story, or the stories of K's world, or for my story.

'stood' alone implies stasis.  'stood up' implies movement.

Here's what one successful writer has to say about chasing perfection: https://accordingtohoyt.com/2018/12/24/drumming/

You're learning that your work can get better--which means your judgement is getting better.  Remember what the Marines say: Pain is weakness leaving the body.

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Short and sweeter: Maybe the author wants to be judged by the words, without relying on a picture to crank the engine.

True.  They are trained pros, accustomed to trolling the populace, often with a story that contradicts the one they told last month.  I have no doubt a panic would ensue if they proclaimed the sun was going to set in the east.  And they would blame it on whichever Public Scapegoat they were targetting that week.

Corrobative detail intended to give artistic verisimilitude to an otherwise bald and unconvincing narrative?

JM Straczinski likes to say "When you become obsessed with the enemy, you become the enemy."

When you become obsessed with the troll, you become the troll.

Unless you and Charles are the same person, or you're paying him off like Lord Cholmdelmondeleigh in GKC's =A Painful Fall of a Great Reputation= (in =The Club of Queer Trades=).  (Apologies if I missed a syllable in the villain's name.)

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Confound.  I just put up a reply and it disappeared.

I'm on the smartphone, whose keyboard can charitably be called rebarbative.  I won't repeat all the logic I went through, but it looks like you need the 'ing', to give the 'to' an object that is or acts like a noun,  in this case a gerund.

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Did you do Count Lundersot?

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I've spent the last couple of day's work sessions hunting for the notes I was working on before I did the Count Lundersot chapter.  They include characters and backstory.  I've found most of them, and hope to get immersed and productive before Christmas.

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True, it's a second problem, but not secondARY; it exists alongside the first one.

The human visual system is a monochrome system with a low-res color system layered on top of it, and a language-recognition system alongside the color system. The best immediate recognition comes from differences in luminous intensity and shape.

(The analog NTSC color television system took advantage of the difference in our luminance and color acuity.  It had about 1/3 the bandwidth for the two hue signals as for the luminance signal.)