I think just changing the tense would work.
Simple Past will put it into the rest of the story.
If you want a long flash back it is better to put it in Simple Past and use italics to show that it is a flash back.
A lot of "had"s can drag the reading out so it is best to avoid using a whole lot of Past Perfect in fiction.
176 2014-12-03 20:08:09
Re: Northern Skies - Janet! (520 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
177 2014-11-26 20:03:18
Re: Let us know what you're working on (10 replies, posted in Romance Inc.)
Yeah. I need to finish Drech. I've been on his story for far too long! Haha!
178 2014-11-26 18:31:50
Re: Love or lust? (24 replies, posted in Romance Inc.)
Janet Taylor-Perry wrote:
Great chapter, Rebecca! I bet it's in book 6. But she's gone again. Damn it! Drech should have kissed her. Yes, love.
Thanks!
It is for the start of Book 5. I want book 5 to focus on Drech and Enhinti's relationship and also Enhinti's growing maturity. (Drech has had to do so much growing up over the first three books, so it is only fair I make Enhinti grow up in the last three.)
179 2014-11-26 18:23:00
Re: Love or lust? (24 replies, posted in Romance Inc.)
janet reid wrote:
Rebecca, it's definitely love! Three years, a thousand miles and nearly drowned. No doubt! I'm anxiously waiting for Drech and Enhinti to be together, but it looks like I'll have to be REALLY patient!
Thanks!
Drech is exagerating he only trekked 550 miles. But he did nearly drown...
180 2014-11-25 16:53:14
Re: Love or lust? (24 replies, posted in Romance Inc.)
Due to the visibility of the forum, I have deleted this scene
181 2014-11-25 15:36:58
Re: Love or lust? (24 replies, posted in Romance Inc.)
Janet Taylor-Perry wrote:
Did that scene come off as somewhere between a love scene and an erotic scene?
I've seen erotica with this flavor, but in general I would say it wasn't "erotic". Neither was it a "romantic love scene" so I guess you hit the spot in between the two. I guess it really depends on the rest of the novel and how you build their relationship. It is mostly physical? Then it would be erotica. Is it mostly emotional? Then it would be romance.
182 2014-11-24 22:44:36
Re: In-Line Review versus Regular Review (19 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
I'm with you, Janet!
Having to click on every highlight to see the comments is tedious.
If they appeared on the side it would be a lot easier and faster to see what needed fixing.
183 2014-11-24 21:47:53
Re: In-Line Review versus Regular Review (19 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Yikes! That is terrible!
But I guess I'm not that surprised. I have gotten a lot of very rude reviews and responses to reviews over the couple of years I have been on this site. Some incredibly arrogant and condescending!
My suggestions:
Don't review this persons writing anymore. If they can't find any use in a review you spent so much time on then they are not worth your time and effort.
And:
Don't take it personally. Some people never learned to be kind and play nice. That is on them, not you.
There are plenty of nice, helpful people of this site who would appreciate a detailed review. 
184 2014-11-24 03:40:55
Re: Let us know what you're working on (10 replies, posted in Romance Inc.)
I'm working on a novel about a girl who lives in the Bell Becker Culture in Ancient Britain. I'm thinking of calling it "The Soothsayer"
185 2014-11-22 05:45:34
Re: Northern Skies - Janet! (520 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Sorry, Philisha. No coyotes. 
There are foxes which look nothing like coyotes but have some similar behavioral traits. Fortunately for Catherine all the wolves have been killed off for tribute by this time. (Sucks for the poor wolves, but good for people who are hurt out in the middle of nowhere...)
186 2014-11-21 17:04:51
Re: Love or lust? (24 replies, posted in Romance Inc.)
I think it has to do a lot with other elements of the story you do show.
Think of it like a movie that has to be rated.
If your story has minimal violence then putting in explicit sex scenes would be fine, but if your story is filled with violence it is best to keep the sex implied or at least to a minimum.
Of course, certain generas have expectations to fulfill. Like Thriller. I have a hard time reading Thrillers, because they tend to be laden with explicit sex, language, violence, and gore, with little to no place to breath. But a Thriller is going for a much "higher" rating then most Romances.
Young Adult is a terrible name for the genera because it sounds like it is for adults who are young. When in actually it is for teens. Harry Potter and Twilight are both Young Adult.
187 2014-11-20 17:47:20
Re: Site Bugs (217 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
I'm getting a few inline reviews that have nothing on them. I got one from KHippolite and one from Janet Taylor-Perry. I don't know if they were accidentally submitted or if they were real reviews and the review part got deleted.
188 2014-11-19 20:04:54
Re: The Sorcerer's Progress (1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
NJC
Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa! I'm so excited! Can't wait 'til you post!
189 2014-11-19 20:03:11
Re: Northern Skies - Janet! (520 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Janet
DO NOT KILL CATHERINE'S MARE!
Okay, I'm breathing now...
You can have Catherine get a nasty graze that requiters stitches. Matthew would still insist that she be take to his house. The blood loss and pain would make her unable to ride (or really do anything) for a while, and even after a few days, she would not be able to use the are at all. It would probably continue to hurt every time she moved it or tried to use it for a few weeks. But the arm will eventually heal and be fine (although with a nasty scar that Matthew can kiss better every night...).
A good rider can slow a horse to a stop, even if one arm is bleeding. No reason to have Catherine fall off a racing horse and risk breaking her neck. And a heroine who always falls over and never gets hurt is just a lame stereotype.
190 2014-11-15 21:57:33
Re: Homepage on old site (4 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Can you tell me how to find "New Content" too? I have look and looked. There doesn't seem to be a proper home page anymore.
191 2014-11-15 21:51:35
Re: Site Bugs (217 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Did we lose all of the old forums?
