Sherry, you reviewed my last posting and I am sorry I haven't returned the favor yet. I will try to get to your novel this weekend.
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Marilyn Johnson wrote:

Where is everyone?  It's way too quiet in here.  What did you do today?

I will start it.  I had the vet scheduled to come today to give yearly vaccines to all the horses and donkeys and the mini-mule.  Our appointment was scheduled for 10 AM Eastern time, but she called and had an emergency and said she would be late.  She arrived around 11:30 AM, outside temperature at that time was already 93 degrees and rising.  What should normally have taken less than an hour took two hours due to one feisty 32" tall miniature donkey named Hunky (he has a sister named Dory, so everything's Hunky Dory!).  Just how tough can a donkey that small be?  You don't want to find out!

Hunky hates needles and today was no exception.  He decided he was having no part of any sticking today.  Because he knew what was headed his way as soon as the vet arrived (yes, donkeys are very smart), he decided it would be in his best interests to head in the opposite direction.  Out the gate he went, through the small pasture into the big pasture (30 acres).  He's wearing a halter and trailing a rope because we thought we had captured him. 

How fast can a mini-donk run?  I got on the Gator and took off after him because it was way too hot for me to run.  I could not catch up with him.  He ran in circles and ended up back in the small pasture, with me locking the gate behind him.  Finally, we cornered him and ran him into a stall and locked it shut.  We thought.  We let him cool down, then went in to give the shots.  He was not having that and broke down the stall door, and because I was too stupid to let go of his rope, he pulled me across the pasture on my stomach, through the mud, and across the rocks.  I finally let go.  After two more times of sliding butt-first across the rocks like a rag doll, I'd had enough.  I tied him to a rail, but he refused to let anyone get close to him with a needle, even though he was tied.  My vet finally had to sedate him with a dart.  Two darts later, he finally let her finish what she came to do. 

Did I tell you I sweat in this heat?  I don't perspire like some women.  I sweat.  There was not a dry stitch of clothing on me by the time we finished with Hunky. The temperature in the sun was 105 degrees.  I took my bruised, battered, and sweaty self inside and took a shower.  I was exhausted.  And now, of course, Hunky hates me.  For just today, the feeling is mutual.  I will go back to loving him tomorrow after the bruises have a chance to turn purple.

That's my story and I'm sticking to it.  What's yours?  What did you do today?

There's a book here...that was the cutest story. You raised my mini donk awareness. I had no idea a donkey was smart enough to know a vet on sight and run the other way. If you haven't written one already, think about a book about your adventures living with 40 animals.

Now, compared to you, my day was boring...

dags smile

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John Hamler wrote:

Dagnee, oh, Dagnee. She's a killer queen. Nothing less than instrumental in my origin story and yet... We seem to have fallen outta favor with one another lately. As lovers often do.
And, lest we forget Dagnee's mortal enemy...
Well, I won't mention her by name but it started with Sharon.

John,
I learn so much from this site! Like right here in this forum I learned I had a mortal enemy and a lover!
Don't remember Sharon, and as for falling out with you...no, I just felt I had nothing more to add to the latest draft of your current WIP; then life happened and I left the site for a while.

You helped me a lot with no tag dialogue and I owe you a huge debt of gratitude for that. As I said before, this site and writers like you helped me write something I was proud to put my name on.

Cheers, dags smile

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Marilyn Johnson wrote:
dagnee wrote:

Alan...no that was Crazysharon. My first novel was a murder mystery about a murdered Fish and Wildlife commissioner who took bribes to let fishermen slaughter seals the commissioner was supposed to be protecting.

dags:)


I think poor Sideman is gonna be sorry he opened up this can of worms today!  Gotta love him!!  smile

LOL Marilyn...It was nice of him to mistake me for someone with a lot more talent! I'm just thinking it's those late nights of booze, cigarettes and writing... wink
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Mariana Reuter wrote:

One day, John Hamler, The Dear John Hamler, reviewed my first chapter, rewrote the first para, and was kinda harsh.

Good for you, Mariana for selling 800 copies! I am impressed!

I think we all have our John Hamler reviewing story. The first sentence of his first review of the first chapter of Ronan Island was: I won't buy your book.

Then he proceeded to tear everything I wrote apart, rewriting some of it, and making fun of everything, including the names of my characters. My reply, if I remember right, was that I hadn't asked him to buy my book, I had confidence in what I had written and wouldn't be changing anything and that I LOVED the names of my characters.

To my surprise he reviewed the second chapter and then the third and finally the whole book. The last review he actually wrote that he hated to see the end of the story, he'd become emotionally involved....lol...

Like you, in the beginning I had a hard time, but I found out who to avoid and who to trust. This site is the best online for getting your stuff read and reviewed quickly and as for editing, you can not find any editing anywhere for free as good as the editing by reviewers on this site.



dags smile

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Sideman wrote:
dagnee wrote:
Sideman wrote:

Hi j p,

I joined in July of 2008. At that time, to the best of my memory, the following folks were the most prominent members:

Flowing Pencil (Patti)
Marilyn Johnson (fairly new but very active)
Nathan B. Childs
Max Kenneau
Susan Stec
Dill Carver
Dagnee
Payge Turner
Sonny
Anne Hobart
Mike 2439
CatWrites 22
Sherman Law
TirzahLaughs
RLVS
Brosna
Arreyanne
Jeni Decker
Jack the Knife
Tina DC Hayes
Kat Nove
Mishmont

Those the ones who come to mind. I can remember getting quite a few reviews from them on most things I posted. Also, they have had a lot to do with me becoming a much better author. Have a great rest of the weekend!
Alan

Allen, I am touched you remembered me. I think about Cash's mother all the time. She was a hoot!
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Dagnee,

I most remember your Civil War story centered around, to the best of my memory, the Quantrill Raiders     - including Jesse & Frank James, situated in northwest Missouri and northeast Kansas.

Cash's mother is still kicking ass and running amuck all over the  place! Actually, books 1 & 2 have been published and are available on Amazon under my pen name of Tai Baker. Book #1 is titled "The Half-Pint Houdini" and book #2 is titled "Who Stole The Dead Guy?" Book three is in progress and will be published early next year. It will be titled "Three Weddings And A Taco". Thank you for remembering! Blessings ...

Alan

Alan...no that was Crazysharon. My first novel was a murder mystery about a murdered Fish and Wildlife commissioner who took bribes to let fishermen slaughter seals the commissioner was supposed to be protecting. I wish I'd written Quantrill's Raiders, it was well written and won Strongest Start.

I'm glad you published Cash's adventures! Good for you!

dags:)

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Sideman wrote:

Hi j p,

I joined in July of 2008. At that time, to the best of my memory, the following folks were the most prominent members:

Flowing Pencil (Patti)
Marilyn Johnson (fairly new but very active)
Nathan B. Childs
Max Kenneau
Susan Stec
Dill Carver
Dagnee
Payge Turner
Sonny
Anne Hobart
Mike 2439
CatWrites 22
Sherman Law
TirzahLaughs
RLVS
Brosna
Arreyanne
Jeni Decker
Jack the Knife
Tina DC Hayes
Kat Nove
Mishmont

Those the ones who come to mind. I can remember getting quite a few reviews from them on most things I posted. Also, they have had a lot to do with me becoming a much better author. Have a great rest of the weekend!
Alan

Allen, I am touched you remembered me. I think about Cash's mother all the time. She was a hoot!
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A lot of good writers were run off the last site because reviewers took out their personal issues on them. They formed writing groups independent of TNBW because it was so toxic. I had reviews given to my writing that had NOTHING to do with my work and everything to do with reviewers personal opinion of ME. Is there really in any virtue in tearing apart someone's work, being sarcastic, snarky and disrespectful just because you C-A-N? The last I looked none of us is working for the New York Times as literary critics. We're a motley crew of writers whose main objective should be to get people's best work out of them. I just don't see how discouraging people with nasty reviews, however correct, is going to do that. I also see no virtue in encouraging others to rip up your writing, because by asking reviewers to do that you are inviting them to be as dishonest in their assessment of your work as any undeserved flattery.

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Allenl--
I would advise you to read a few crime novels. In the ones I read, the first introduction of the murder's crime is very graphic, very detailed so that the reader has a reference for the horror the murder can inflict on his victims. As the novel progresses the descriptions of his/her crimes lose the detail and are described in a general way.

Of course I will point you to my favorite crime/mystery writer: John Sandford and his Prey or Virgil series. You can also read Michael Connelly's  Harry Bosch series, too.

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Mariana Reuter wrote:
Marilyn Johnson wrote:

"Hey, idiot, don't hog the front page with all your shit nobody wants to read anyway.  You can only post one per day, and it's not too late to get your money back for the enrollment fee."

Wow! One learns something new every day. It's good I've just learnt this unwritten TNBW rule, in case someday I dare pour half of my story chapters on the site in one single shot. Does anybody has in writing all the TNBW unwritten rules? I'm terrified I might be scolded as Marilyn was each time I violate one of those. How about ending sentences with prepositions? Or splitting infinitives? Gosh! Just thinking about breaking one of those rules gives me the creeps.

Now, seriously: Marilyn, idiots like the one who issued the above comment don't deserve to be part of this site, not to say to call themselves writers. They should be ones asking to get their enrollment fees back.

If somebody floods the front page with their work, what the hell? It's not that the reviewers only search the front page. And it's not that the front page is static and your list of chapters will remain there for ages, jamming it. God! What kind of mental patients used to populate TNBW back then? One may post as many chapters as one wishes on a single day, and nobody should be complaining, even if the front page is temporarily overflowed. If anybody has an issue, the best they can do is to print out exactly those chapters they're complaining about, neatly roll up the paper sheets, fasten them with Scotch tape (for safety reasons), and f**k themselves!

Kiss,

Gacela

Gacela,
Back in those days the site was littered with bullies. They also hooked nasty, nasty, nasty reviews to your work knowing if you deleted them you deleted all of the reviews attached to that work, costing you points to republish as well as losing your standing in the site rankings. Also, there was nothing to stop them from trolling you because you couldn't block them.

Thank God Sol recognized we needed more control over our content and gave us the option not only to delete nasty reviews meant to bully but to block those who wrote them.

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lol @ the f bomb!

The last reviewer that gave me a nasty, really nasty review was a Helen Chambers. She wrote a two thousand word review of my entry into the fall contest: 'The Master Has To Have It,' treating it like it was a major work of fiction instead of a humorous, unrealistic short story. I only had to read the first paragraph to see her goal was not to help me improve my short story but to demonstrate her sarcastic style of writing. You can always tell when a reviewer's main purpose is not to help you but to prove their own writing ability. I deleted it without reading the rest and blocked her. However, when my entry won, which was a total surprise to me, I left her a little quickie, letting her know my silly little story won and boy, was I glad I didn't listen to her.

It all comes down to whether you have confidence in your work or not. If you do, reviewers like Helen Chambers will find their way to the ignore bin and you will listen to those reviewers, and there are too many on this site to name, who truly mean to help make your work better.
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ps...I mentioned the name of the reviewer so Gacela wouldn't think I was talking about her tongue

When I am reading a book and the author compares a sound to something I recognize, like a loud noise sounding like a sonic boom, or fire crackers or a car back firing, I get a better mental picture of the action. Just writing BOOM! reminds me of a comic--graphic novel....
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SolN wrote:

Yes, it's a small hack. No access to the dbase but the ability to pop a message on some pages. Very annoying. We're looking into it and will have it resolved.

Sol...Thank you for the swift resolution of this hack.
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Marilyn Johnson wrote:

It just started with me.  I've been on and off all day, but this started about 30 minutes ago for me.

Yay! Another validation! Thanks Marilyn...maybe someone one with more computer knowledge than me can explain it...
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Gamms wrote:

I've experienced the same thing using the site today.

I wonder what it is?????
Thank God it's not a virus on my browser...thanks, Gamms!
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Anyone else experiencing this? On my home page when I log on my page is dark and I get a white square with the word CYCO and an ok box. I click on the box and my home page lightens up and the square goes away but when I go to another page and come back it's there again.

Then I noticed this under new writers:

alert("Cyco")" src="https://www.thenextbigwriter.com/images/public/users.png">

I clicked it and it took me to Alert Cyco's page:  ">alert("Cyco")  was the name on the profile

Then, when I clicked on the group page to report this to the forum I got another white square that reads:
                                           Cyco
         [] Prevent this page from creating additional dialogs.
         [] ok

Is it just my browser? Or has someone invaded the site?

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Whenever I get the feeling that a review of my work is more about the reviewer expressing an opinion that has nothing to do with my writing, and I don't feel it's useful, I delete it. If I get another one from the same reviewer, then I block them. We are not meant to be critics to tear apart someone's work but reviewers giving helpful advice to make each other's work better.
This is something I try to remember when I review: “All cruel people describe themselves as paragons of frankness.” Tennessee Williams
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Ann Everett wrote:

Y'all are too funny! In my local critique group, there is a husband/wife writing team and they publish at least two books a year. I tell them all of the time how envious I am they both write! My husband doesn't have a writer's bone in his body. I've often wondered how it would be to write with someone else. One of my favorite authors, Jennifer Cruise writes with Bob Mayer. She writes the "love" part, and he writes the action. I love their books!
However, I doubt I'd be much of a partner. I struggle to get one book a year written!

Ann,
You know you're my go-to writer friend when I need a sex scene. No one does it better!
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SolN wrote:

Hi all,

We're pleased to announce the winners of the Spring 2017 Flash Fiction Contest.

https://www.thenextbigwriter.com/contes … Contest-17

Congrats to all! Next contest coming soon. Poetry anyone?

Congratulations Seabrass, Gray and Marilyn!
Sol, I want to thank you so much for these contests. I don't know about anyone else, but these little competitions have made me a better writer!
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You all are brave. I hate rejection soooo bad I went right to self publishing. I went through a publisher, but when my contract ends with them, I'm going to publish on Amazon. Even though it wasn't through a big house, I was satisfied with the fact that I accomplished the goal of publishing a book. I also had the best time of my life writing it.
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B Douglas Slack wrote:

Yesterday, I sent a chat message on Facebook to the publisher. Their response today was that they happened to be working on submissions when mine popped up in the email Inbox. They read the synopsis and decided it didn't fit what they were looking for.

I thought that was darn decent of them to give me a personal response. When I get other novels ready, I'll definitely submit to them again. They could have remained faceless and aloof, but they didn't.

Bill

Wow, Bill, that's hard to believe. I read the blurbs of some of their 'polished' novels and there wasn't one that didn't sound like a logistical mess. And, I might add, I wouldn't have bought them. That's my opinion anyway. Good luck with your next try and don't forget J.K. Rowling spent six years and was rejected by 9 publishers before Harry Potter was published.
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Bill,
I went to the Fiery Seas site and after reading a ton of requirements I found this sentence:

Failure to follow these guidelines will result in unread submissions.

There were a lot of requirements, and it would be easy to over look one. Perhaps you should check your manuscript and see if you failed to follow one of their guidelines, because 9 minutes is just enough time to look something over for guideline omissions.

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Ryan,
I like Lost in Darkness.
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K L van Kriedt wrote:

While I learn a lot from reviewing, I feel "underpaid" in terms of points for the amount of time I devote to each piece. And I'm always short of points.
I like the idea of being able to personally reward someone (and be rewarded) for putting out the effort to give a thoughtful and thorough review. That person may be encouraged to give your work another go. Giving extra points would be a personalized way of showing appreciation.

What helped me collect points when I first joined TNBW was reading whole novels. If you don't mind me suggesting this, find a novel you like on here, there are lots to choose from, and read and review the whole thing.
It also helps to have a reviewing relationship with people, they review you, you review them.
Hope this helps. smile

jack the knife wrote:

Seabrass - You could maybe try posting shorter chapters. smile You'll get more reviewers, methinks.  I'm retired, so I have the time to read a long chapter - especially if it's well-written. But others might be intimidated by, or have an attention level that can't survive, a lengthy review. I know from experience that your reviews are both  thoughtful and eagle-eyed. I try to do the same with my reviews. It's just math. Do more reviews, get more points. I've got over 4000 points that never seem to go down. Each chapter I post costs me an average of 6-8 points, and every chapter I review gains me 1.2 - 3 (yours!) points. So you have to review more than you post. I like the system Sol has set up, though maybe the points for reviewing versus the points to post could be tweaked to make it a tad easier to post.

Wow Jack...I thought I was doing good with 2000! Tip of the reviewer hat to you. smile