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I love getting reviews, but I hate somebody trying to rewrite every word I've written.  Been there, don't like it. Don't get me wrong - a suggestion here and there is great and appreciated.  But to highlight every single paragraph is ridiculous unless I have asked them to do it in advance.

Last time it happened to me, I returned the review with this:  "I appreciate all the time you spent rewriting my chapter so it sounds like your voice instead of mine.  I am sure it was time-consuming but totally not necessary.  Due to the fact that both you and I are here, on this site called The Next Big Writer, probably shows that neither of us has a best-selling novel on the shelves of Barnes & Noble.  I would like that to happen one day, but until such time, I will continue to write in my voice and expect you will do the same.  My one suggestion to you would be that if my voice perturbs you that much, I think you would be better off to find something else to read.  Thanks for stopping by."

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Chicken and dumplings

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What in the dickens?

I totally agree with Corra about this being an uncomfortable loophole.  Short of pulling the heckler through the screen and boxing his/her ears in the form of vigilante justice, it appears to be something Sol will have to address. 

I just realized through this thread I could go into the posts of the ones I have blocked and leave all manner of retaliatory remarks on their work, but they can't reciprocate.  I can even change some of the comments I've made on previous exchanged reviews.  hmmm...  I wouldn't, however, do that... well, maybe...nah!  Not worth the effort since we're all adults here, but maybe just one sharp jab... nah!  Not my style, but ...  thanks, Dill.  You don't know how long I've wanted to ... 

JK
MJ

Dill Carver wrote:

I don't mind people blocking me, it just seems a little skew-whiff if I can't return the favour and block them from accessing my junk in an even-handed manner.

Make your 'stuff' inactive until Sol can eliminate the problem or let you know how to block whatever's causing you grief.  That way no one csn have access until the problem is resolved, then you can go back and make them visible.  Just a suggestion.

Cheers,
MJ

Dill Carver wrote:

So, if a member blocks me, it would appear that I can no longer bring up their profile in order to block them in return.  If they have blocked me first, can I not block them likewise

Dill, I just checked on a particular person I have blocked, and I can still go to their profile and their posts and I can do an inline or a regular review on their stuff.  They just can't on mine, apparently, so I think it doesn't work both ways.  I am not sure how you go about blocking them if you can't see that person's profile.  Maybe a question for Sol.

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Sexiest

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Baptist

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Karen van Kriedt wrote:

Something I've noticed -- something I've been guilty of -- telling someone they've done a "Good job!", or patting them on the back with "Good work!", especially after you've torn their work to shreds, is patronizing. I for one won't be using either phrase again.

I know where you're coming from, but just because I point out things that are repeated throughout the story doesn't mean the writer didn't do a good job with everything else.  I reviewed one the other day where quotation marks were not used throughout, and I marked them all.  In addition, spelling errors in a few places, and a few more things, but I loved the story.  The writer did a good job with holding my interest and it flowed well, in addition to having great characters. 

I don't feel it's patronizing when you're offering constructive criticism and the storyline itself was good.  Just think how much better their next one will be since you've offered your help.   

MJ

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Pat Leo wrote:

Hi Norm, thanks for posting this: "I just edit over the existing online version of the chapter and carry on" I didn't realize you could do this.  I will try it.
Pat

The good thing about making the changes as early as possible is you don't keep getting the same errors pointed out by the ones who come in later.  With me, I post a chapter, make changes suggested by our great reviewers on here, but then go ahead and post the next chapter when it's ready.  You will find your rhythm and what works best for you.

Glad to have you on board, Pat.  Welcome again.  Good luck with your story.

MJ

Congrats!  How awesome!  Your cover is very nice, and I will check out those folks. 

Wishing you the best of luck with it. 

MJ

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Dill Carver wrote:

he 'has a face, lovingly fashioned by God, from a potato.'

OMG!  Love the subtle humor in that!  Good one, Dill!

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Matt, we're waiting for something from you, but so far I haven't seen anything come through with your name on it.  Go ahead and take the plunge!

MJ

j p lundstrom wrote:

I vote for a horror story, too! To be completed by Halloween, the winner to be announced on October 31.

I like that idea, J P.  Maybe relax the genre a little to include ghost story and/or horror since Halloween is approaching.  I think if we make the genre reach out further, we may have more entries.  I look forward to reading some great stories.

John Hamler wrote:

(Lord knows our President would do well to stick to the teleprompter, right?)

Or learn he doesn't have to turn his whole body when he looks to the one on the other side.

I like your idea, too, John!  'Fourscore and seven years ago our fathers brought forth ...'

Karen van Kriedt wrote:

I also want to add that a 5,000 word story would take me a long time (I'm a perfectionist) so it would have to become my main writing focus which it won't be. I'm gearing up to working on my first full-length short story, and I already know what I want to write about. It's not horror. But that's ok, I'll enjoy reading what you all post. And there will be other contests.
What would be a challenge for me is to post an un-edited first draft.

You can edit it anytime between the time you post it and the deadline for the contest to end.  It does nothing to what you've posted because the judges don't start until all of them are in.

As for length, we could say it has to be something like 'no less than 3000 words, no more than 5000 words.'  Some folks like long stories; others may not want to make it their primary writing project.

I personally don't write horror stories, and the majority of them I don't like to read.  But I think we have some great writers on here who would excel in it.  I don't mind reading some for the contest, and believe it would be a hoot!!

So we have a 5000-word creepy Christmas horror story with Elroy as the MC and a battle to the finish with SK.  What fun!!

There are so many great ideas out there.  The one we just finished with the laundromat photo was the most fun one I've ever participated in.  I loved all the cool stories that came from that one!  Poetry would be out for me, but there are some great writers on here (including YOU, Mike Jackson) who could do justice to that category.   I have a suggestion (since Christmas will be here in 122 days from today).  How about a Christmas tale, any genre??  We could name the M.C. Elroy (or whatever) and have everyone write a story around that name.  We would then see just how naughty or nice little Elroy can be. 

Just a thought!!  Anybody else????

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I'm still here, Sherry!  Think I am 2 chapters behind on yours, but when I review a novel, I love to have at least a couple of chapters together to read and review.  It gives me a better insight instead of a chapter today and another one 5 days later.  I always let the ones I review get a few chapters ahead, then take a night and catch up with them, then repeat.  You are definitely on my review list, and I am enjoying your novel very much.  Don't you dare go anywhere!  I would be sad not to finish your hard work!  big_smile

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Dill Carver wrote:

The truth is we humans are a nasty self-destructing virus that will bring down this planet. We kill our environment the way cancer kills healthy cells and to the same end. In the meantime we sanctimoniously delude ourselves with our own superiority

Disgusting, stupid, treacherous people; the Clinton's/Trump's/Merkel's/Corbyn's/Putin's/Jong-un, et al... The best of the human race? In charge, running the show and leading us forward?

Cancer.

Scary, huh?  When I look at the delusional leader of this country, it scares me to think he is the one in control of my fate.  What sad times we live in.  It's not because I did or did not vote for him.  It's because I am way too smart to drink this fool's kool-aid, and I will not be led over the cliff with him and his kind.  He is an out-of-control lying maniac, and our country is in serious danger of extinction.   I am always more than willing to work with the one in office, regardless of what my vote said, but this one stretches my ability to do so.  He has wreaked more havoc in his 200 days in office than any other president in the history of our country did in his entire tenure.  The song 'Where Have All the Flowers Gone' by Peter, Paul, and Mary is an accurate depiction of the times we're living in today, which is a vicious circle of self-destruction:  in that song, all the flowers disappear because young girls picked them; all young girls disappear because they took husbands; all husbands became soldiers, then went to graveyards, and all the graveyards were then covered with the flowers picked by the young girls. The compelling question in that song is 'when will they ever learn?'  It applies today.

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Dill Carver wrote:

People are such filthy, disgusting and disrespectful creatures. I honestly feel that the human species doesn't deserve this world. We are a mistake.

My sentiments exactly, Dill.  Humans are the most destructive force on this earth.  We're leeches.  We rob the earth of all that is good, and then wonder why we have climate change when we cut down all the forests, pollute all the rivers, kill all the wildlife, and stuff our faces into oblivion.  That's why I like animals more than I like people 99% of the time.  What we could learn from animals if we just sat back and watched.  They are ten times smarter than we are when it comes to survival.  I could not go to those countries for that very reason.  I would have to hurt somebody.  Seriously.  I am a member of the international league of donkey rescuers, and we see it. Most of the pictures I can't look at.  I just want to beat the daylights out of some of those bastards.  They don't deserve air to breathe. 

Animals are not made to be entertainment for ignorant human beings. Grrrr...

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allenl wrote:

OK - here I go again. In the small town (very small) a few miles south of where I grew up, there was a man whose left arm had been injured and they put a steel rod in it which included a bend at the elbow. He had a mule he used for plowing his garden - I know, sounds like I'm about to spin a yarn - but, occasionally, as mules will do, it would decide to stop working. No amount of cajoling or yelling would change its mind. When it reached that point, the man would hit the mule across the forehead with his steel rod enforced left elbow, and the mule would resume pulling the plow.

I won't attest to the veracity of this story, but I have seen the mule, the man's arm, and him plowing the garden, so as far as I'm concerned, the rest must be true smile

It probably is true because so many people disrespect animals.  If someone took that steel rod and thrashed that fool across his head a few times, he would never do it again.  I firmly believe the punishment for animal abusers is to give them exactly what they dished out.  I have no sympathy for abusers.  Most of the people on death row were also animal abusers.

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j p lundstrom wrote:

If that's true, you must remember this:

Who put the bomp in the bomp bah bomp bah bomp
Who put the ram in the rama lama ding dong
Who put the bop in the bop shoo bop shoo bop
Who put the dip in the dip da dip da dip
Who was that man
I'd like to shake his hand
He made my baby fall in love with me.

Is that where you got the name for Bama Llama?

After a pleasant, sunny day, we had a wild rainstorm here last night--the kind that uproots trees and tears roofs off buildings. Although that's the accompanying wind, mostly. Kayaking in the Verde River should be pretty rough for a while. Anyway, that's what I did--spent the evening indoors with my dog.

JP, I do know that song. It's a catchy tune that you don't forget.  I like that kind!

Bama Llama was already named when I rescued him, and he knew his name.  I am a big believer in letting an animal keep his name because animals, like us, know who they are.  I do like Bama Llama for him, though!  It's quite fitting for a big llama who is way taller than me!

I don't like that kind of rainstorm!  Not the ones that tear up buildings and uproot trees.  Glad to know you're okay, my friend! 

MJ

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B Douglas Slack wrote:

Loved the donkey tales. My granddad kept donkeys on his farm for plow use. They were the most stubborn animals I'd ever come across.

Bill

Aw, Bill, donkeys are not stubborn.  They think things through very thoroughly before they decide to act.  A donkey's nature is to make sure everything is safe before they move, so they might be considered 'stubborn' from a human view point. From my view point as a donkey rescuer, they are the smartest of all the animals that live in a pasture. They never forget anything, and if you've ever been mean to one, they remember it forever.  Highly protective of their young, and they teach them manners from the time they are born.  A donkey momma is stern and no-nonsense.  She will knock her baby's legs out from under him if he does something that would get him in trouble later down the road. 

Sorry to hear about the loss of your lot next door.  I've been there, so I know the feeling.  Before we bought our farm, we lived in a nice subdivision, and we had a huge vacant lot next to us.  It was wooded and quiet, but sloped downhill to the left and had some deep gullies in it.  The birds and deer enjoyed mingling there.  It remained that way for more than 20 years.  Then one day I came home from work and saw equipment cleaning off the lot.  They hauled in top soil, leveled the lot and the gullies, and build a house on it.  The new owners had 5 small kids, and they were loud and obnoxious.  Time for us to move.  That's when we bought the farm, and from my house I cannot see any other houses.  I have neighbors, but don't know any of them.  We never see each other, and I don't even know their names, even though we've lived in the same vicinity now for more than 20 years.  I do love my solitude.

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allenl wrote:

I'll stop in a minute. In parts of the country where predators are a problem for livestock, ranchers will run a donkey in the pasture with the cattle or sheep. They are highly protective and will fight off a predator, especially a coyote. You can Google it.

I've been in donkey rescue for many years and have taken in my share that didn't protect their herds.  Donkeys need a donkey team mate.  They don't speak the same language as the cows or the goats.  There should be a minimum of two donkeys, and for protection from coyotes there should be a minimum of four.  As a rule, coyotes tend to avoid places where they smell a donkey, but that's not always true in the case of starving coyotes.  Since coyotes are pack animals, they split up and each one attacks from a different direction.  Donkeys don't always do the job the ranchers expect them to do, and that's when the donkeys get in big trouble.  I have two now that didn't protect their herds and were hit in the head with a 2x4 and left to die.  So your statement is correct in that ranchers do use them, but the flip side is that donkeys need protection, too, and will run from a coyote unless there is a pack of donkeys to help fend off the coyotes.  And a mini donkey should never be used as a pasture protector.  They are way too small, and some coyotes are the same height.   

I use those Night Guard solar predator flashing lights around my horses, goats, sheep, and chickens.  There are 2000 acres of private hunting land beside me and behind me, with no houses and no people except during hunting season.  That land is full of coyotes.  I hear them at night.  Between my predator lights and my donkeys, the rest of my animals have been safe so far. Knock on wood.  Plus, at night, I make sure all my equines are in a small pasture so they can't scatter out.  There's safety in numbers.