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I would suggest using the route which best works for what you want to relay at a particular time. In the telling of the story you will be guiding the reader to the next location regardless of where it is and in so doing the reader will understand the purpose of this location whether it is in the historical sequence or not.

Say you take a child to a place which was a part of your earlier life and explain what it meant to you during that time period and then you take him to another place you lived before the child was born and explain your time there; it will not matter to the child that the places you visit are not in the original order you are familiar with. The reader will understand that also within the context of the story presented. Make it easy on yourself in the writing. Simple is generally the correct solution. Good luck. Take care. Vern

I would boil it down to, "If you ain't looking for criticism (that means pro and con) then you probably shouldn't be asking for reviews by publishing on a reviewing oriented site. " And if you're overly sensitive, you might want to bathe in salt water for a while to toughen the skin -- and before I get pelted with rotten tomatoes, no, that doesn't give license to rude behavior. Just my take. Take care. Vern

Recip not necessary. I'm to the point I mostly review what I want without regard for the norm. Take care. Vern

An income level of $12,140 is considered poverty level in the U.S. in 2018 (25,100 for a family of four). An estimated 43 million people (100 million by some) live at or below the poverty level in America. It is highly likely that if 13 - 33 percent of Americans dropped dead form poverty you would have your concrete answer.
I might add that my family lived in so-called abject poverty until I entered an orphanage at almost nine and none of my family died from it. Absolutely the long term effects of poverty can kill, but not poverty per se. Still, in literature, we often speak in abstract or hyperbolic terms and there is nothing wrong with using such implied concepts in pointed prose. The author is the judge and jury for his work. My no food stamps worth. Take care. Vern

I see nothing wrong with "climb down/up" per se as it can denote a direction much like the points of a compass, but if the phrase draws attention from the author, one could restate the situation to avoid it entirely. Take the staircase example: "With his advanced arthritis, tackling the rickety staircase wouldn't be a walk in the proverbial park. Nonetheless, once he managed the journey, his old bones didn't squeak as much as those damn steps." Or such depending on context. There's always another means to the end. Take care. Vern

Learn something new every day. Thanks, MJ, for increasing my vocabulary. Must admit I'd never heard "ultracrepidarians" before so had to look it up. Learning new stuff is the best part of threads going off target at times. Take care. Vern

If you don't have a working voice for the narrative, I doubt it makes any difference which POV you choose, so you might as well choose the one you wish to tell the story. If the voice is the problem why don't they just say so and stop all the pretense of the curse of the omniscient POV. And if all those editors were so perfect in their decisions we would never have all the rejections of what eventually becomes a best seller. No one way of writing is the Holy Grail no matter how many times it is repeated by editors or strict followers of the imperial decree. Some times the king loses his head. Just saying. Take care. Vern

A quick fix might be to place a note in bold letters at the beginning of the chapter per se until such time as the formatting might be corrected. Probably more people would see it and read it that way. Take care. Vern

Semi-Colon (2004) - IMDb
https://www.imdb.com/title/tt0427832

Directed by Drew Lewis, Matt Porter. With Drew Lewis. A story of a man, another man, and a big heavy briefcase.

Just for the horror of it. Take care. Vern

I'm forever getting called out on semi-colons. I have cut down, but still use them probably more than I should. They just look so cute, lol. Take care. Vern

His "flaw" could be that he doesn't know who he is and is letting the church push him toward something he isn't sure of. He could also have flashbacks of memories of doing something terrible which he can't remember outright. You might also consider that stories outside the Bible which depict Jesus doing some pretty flawed stuff as a child. Your character could also have childlike outbursts of anger which he controls just in time to prevent a major "sin" or such. Or someone else could enter the picture and know things which others don't know about the character, even the character himself. And as Ann pointed out, the façade of perfection will be seen as a flaw by many; perhaps he flaunts it. Lots of angles. Good luck. Take care. Vern