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I eliminated the word banking because it was causing confusion, replacing it with come about or circle back. That allows for the possibility of using maneuvering jets and omnithrusters to fly in circles or arc toward or away from the target ship. They circle next to the target ship, not around it. They arc in, fire a few rounds, then arc back out. The reason for "arcing" is to avoid becoming an easy target for nearby novas. I assume the reader understands that they are not running in pure circles, since that would allow the nova operators to predict exactly where the attacking starfighters will be before they get close.

Better?

You have an excellent memory. There are primarily two POV characters: Joseph and Apollo, and I alternate between them, usually on a chapter by chapter basis. The first chapter is an exception since it takes place before either MC was born.

We are in Joseph's POV when he feels himself turn beet red. I could say he blushed severely, which eliminates the problem. We all know when we are blushing and by how much (mildly, severely), even if we can't see ourselves in a mirror.

The entire book is 3rd person limited. Everything I, as the narrator, write is through the point-of-view character's lens.

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amy s wrote:

Are you referencing the movement in terms of the largest visible object? When flying around their own ship, that becomes up and down. If there is a planet, then that beats the ship as largest object.

Didn't understand this. They're flying in circles along the side of the enemy warship, hammering a shield emitter to destroy it.

Just to clarify, the character turning beet red was in narration (Joseph turned beet red and looked to the marine for his reaction). It was, however, from Joseph's POV. It looks odd when written as dialogue.

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I just updated the chapter (offline) to use just 'circle back' and 'come about'. Didn't even need 'arcing'. Now all I need is a design for an omnithruster. Sounds like a task for the Professor.

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Turns out banking as we understand it for atmospheric flight does have a use in space. My cadets execute banking moves as they arc toward/away from the Actium's main hangar bay, trying to overload the shield emitter while minimizing exposure to cannons surrounding the bay. As far as I can tell, it's doable using jets and omnithrusters. It helps that omnithrusters can apply thrust in any direction. tongue  It needs a different name than banking, though, to avoid further confusion. Any suggestions? I was thinking arcing...

Thank you, CJ. Funny thing, I used to work on Wall Street. tongue

I agree absolutely. Blood rose into his cheeks is boring and in this case confusing. I can't tell if the character is embarrassed or angry. I have another one: he gave her a dirty look. I know when I'm doing it even though I can't see it. The latter has a good alternative: he glared at her.

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I really regret not taking physics in high school and university. It would have been a great minor in addition to comp sci. Your explanation is over my head. Let me switch to examples. Assume a 2D plane to keep this easy.

Ship is flying at high speed in the direction of the sun. Pilot wants to reverse course. As far as his controls are concerned, he pulls hard to the left (or right) until his maneuvering jets line up the ship in the opposite direction, away from the sun.. Pilot stops pulling the controls left (or right). The computer then manipulates the big thrusters to completely counter the ship's momentum toward the sun and to provide forward movement in the opposite direction. There is a fixed amount of time when the pilot is facing away from the sun but his craft is still moving toward the sun, even though the thrusters are trying to overcome the momentum of the ship's previous course toward the sun.

Have I got that right? And am I using the term momentum correctly?

I'll add to the example in my next post assuming I got the above correct.

Thanks!

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Correct me if I'm wrong, when you say turn to keep the big thrusters pointing in the right direction, the desired turn (humans pushing flight controller) is *not* the same as what the big thrusters are doing, since the computers need to adjust for the momentum of the earlier course. Yes?  (I may be using the word momentum wrong.)

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K caused trouble on the playground today. He noted (quite rightly) that the flight mechanics in my dogfight look an awful lot like atmospheric flight. I checked through my old posts and realized I had never actually settled on a reason for why my flight mechanics work. Flight cocoons are no longer in the running. Too complicated. There are two remaining possibilites:

1. It's space opera. Deal with it. -- Not my favorite option.

2. A combination of specially mounted thrusters that can fire in any direction (including reverse), and maneuvering jets. Asimov would not approve, but he's dead, so I win. Correct me if I'm wrong, but since the thrusters can fire in any direction, the maneuvering jets are simply there to point the ship in the direction you're trying to move in. That keeps your lasers and missiles pointing in the right direction, even while your thrusters/computer are working like crazy to overcome the momentum from your last course and get you on the new one.  It's a little like ice skating. I should add that there's an inertial dampener ("splat inhibitor") so you don't turn into pancakes when the thrusters kick into a new direction.

Is option 2 possible? I have no intention of explaining it in detail, but would like to know if I understand it correctly. I can throw in a few buzz words in the story like omnidirectiional thrusters ("the omnidirectional thrusters canee take much more captin").

Thanks
Dirk

Thank you, both.

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Fly, be free!

One of my reviewers says the POV character can't "see" himself turn beet red (ignore mirrors), therefore it should be wriiten something like "blood rose into Joseph's cheeks." Personally, I know when I turn beet red (blush severely) and don't need a mirror to tell me so.

Thanks

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Amesome! What is the common site on the body to do an IO? I read it's the upper tibia.

I'm considering splitting the chapter into three, rather than have three scenes in one endless chapter. At this point into the book (almost done), I don't mind if the remaining chapters are short. It would give me room to expand them, especially Apollo's revival, which is currently only two pages.

Thanks!
Dirk

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Amy, I got the following from Wikipedia:

Many EMS services and hospitals are now using IO as their first line solution for vascular access in both adult and pediatric cardiac arrest victims, enabling administration of lifesaving drugs much earlier than previously possible with traditional peripheral IV placement.

Why does IO allow administration of the drugs faster than an IV? In either case, you still need blood flow to get the meds moving. Yes?

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No rush. I'm going to incorporate everyone else's feedback while I wait for more reviews.
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Chapter 36 is back up. The new title is Joseph's Sword. It doesn't include feedback from other reviewers yet. Originally, when stuff blows up in Joseph's face, God told him it was due to insufficient faith. That would have required changes in numerous earlier chapters to show his increasing doubts, rather than his Gomer Pyle naiveté. I decided I prefer the latter, until this moment in the story, when serious sh*t happens.

Bombs away! (Hint)

Thanks
Dirk

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For those who haven't read/finished chapter 36, originally titled Joseph Acts, please hold off. I'm reworking the ending so it doesn't seem like the reason for Joseph's failure comes out of nowhere. I decided I want Joseph to be all-in until it blows up in his face. Needs a little more work.

Back soon.

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I'm still not sure I get this. :-) Is the point that you think someone else should initiate the conversation about the timing and the AI? You want someone to slow him down? I suppose one of the other passengers on the raider could bring it up. Or, he can spot the dead AI at the front of the ship. I like that better, so it's just him and God (plus medical expertise from the doctor). Have I understood your point?

Seabrass gave me similar feedback about the minute or so that Joseph and Christian spend arguing/kissing. Whereas Apollo's moment above is essential to the ending/next book, I'll probably keep the kiss just because I want it. It's a small progression for the gay subplot, but it's mostly for humor. I like that Joseph goes flying across the corridor when Christian slips him the tongue.

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Kdot wrote:

Ok... reviewed the section. hat I said about not having enough power to affect a direction change in time appears to stand. Should I draw out the diagrams?

Dear God, not the diagrams! :-) There's nothing in the chapter that limits Eve's ship's power. She has as much power/time as she wants, including the ability to plow into the emitter. The only exception is that she doesn't have the power/time to get back to the Ark.

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I suppose pilot A could have a working generator, with no coolant loss, but the power isn't getting through to the onboard systems. Failed power conduits. Of course then I have backup power which does reach critical life support systems, even though main power does not. It's a stretch, but it might work. Basically I say that main power conduits are damaged, even though the generator is working fine. Still meh, I think.

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But there's no way for her to know if she'll die in one minute or fifteen or an hour. Even if I was coughing up blood, I couldn't predict my own time of death. If I know for sure that I've got maybe one to two minutes left to live, that would drive me to ram a shield emitter for the good of mankind. Otherwise, I'd be holding out hope.

How much do you know about fission reactors. Technically, the power generators in my fighters are not nuclear reactors, but the same principles might apply. Namely that they can go supercritical without coolant. One of my pilots is not losing coolant, but he's lost main power. The other pilot who sacrifices herself does so because she's losing coolant and the power generator will explode. How do i reconcile those? How is it that pilot A loses power without his generator exploding, while pilot B is about to explode because of coolant loss?

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njc wrote:

She suffered internal injuries in the torso and realizes she has just enough consciouness time to take one usedul action.

Getting warmer. Losing consciousness is not potentially fatal. One of the other pilots is adrift, so she could be too, both hoping for rescue.

I'm looking for some kind of looming fatal technology failure, since her fighter was damaged in battle. Air loss I did last chapter with a raider. I suppose I could make it so the power core is going supercritical because of lost coolant and she can't shut it down. Meh.

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Kdot wrote:

Yes... what njc said.

Your ship has 100 units of momentum. Your internal power can create 50 units per second of change in momentum. You need 110 units per second to avoid collision. It become impossible to avoid collision. Therefore, the solution is not to avoid collision but to embrace it.

*if we want to get technical, this is a rate of rate of change. Eg 50 units per second per second.

Um, no. :-)  I'll wait until you read it. Easier to discuss in context.