The problem with Dark Eden's opening is there are quite a few items named here that I have to either remember (until they're properly defined) or gloss over and forget. It wouldn't be until a second read of the novel that I could fully understand the above lines. Not a great opening, in my opinion.
3,176 2016-09-26 01:42:42
Re: First Person Multiple Narrative Young Adult Book Anyone? (32 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
3,177 2016-09-26 00:57:16
Re: The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B. (1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Kdot wrote:
Send you two replies on your chapter 37 and 38
Thanks. I saw a few new comments in 37, but not in 38. Either way, I'm keeping all the reviews for v3, so it's all there,
3,178 2016-09-25 23:05:31
Re: The Naked Forest - Akhere I. (10 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I went back into the review to answer your questions or expand on something I said. I don't think the system automatically notifies you about my second round of feedback. If it does, please let me know. That would be useful to know.
3,179 2016-09-25 22:10:25
Re: The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B. (1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Does anyone know what happens in the following scenario: if I review someone, and they respond, and I go back into the review to leave more feedback, will they be notified about the additional comments? It's my impression the system doesn't support that. Correct?
3,180 2016-09-25 13:45:28
Re: Roll call (Originally Role Call) (42 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Wool makes me itchy.
3,181 2016-09-25 13:23:24
Re: Say the first word that comes to mind... (1,634 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Brilliant nerd.
3,182 2016-09-25 03:33:17
Re: Say the first word that comes to mind... (1,634 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Nerd
3,183 2016-09-25 03:08:01
Re: The Naked Forest - Akhere I. (10 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Oh, dear. It didn't occur to me that you may be past the trial period. I hope you can open my inline review...
3,184 2016-09-25 03:04:14
Re: Roll call (Originally Role Call) (42 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Did you 'off' the first husband, or just planning ahead? ;-)
3,185 2016-09-25 03:02:04
Re: Say the first word that comes to mind... (1,634 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Andrew Lloyd Webber
3,186 2016-09-24 20:31:36
Re: First Person Multiple Narrative Young Adult Book Anyone? (32 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Your 3rd POV will probably be fine, as long as the reader knows whose POV he/she is in. Don puts the name of the POV character for each chapter just below the title.
I also alternate between two POV characters throughout my book, but it's 3rd person limited. I have one chapter that needs to be in another character's POV, and it worked out fine.
3,187 2016-09-24 17:14:55
Re: First Person Multiple Narrative Young Adult Book Anyone? (32 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Don't forget to join the Medieval Fanatasy/Magic group. There's a group of reviewers there who would be happy to help. Create a thread there with your name and book/name(s) in the subject line. Many of us do that. You can use that to brainstorm with other members about your book. There is a member there named Kdot who just recently posted that he's looking for new material to review.
3,188 2016-09-24 17:04:08
Re: First Person Multiple Narrative Young Adult Book Anyone? (32 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Don Chambers on this site uses first-person multiple POVs. He frequently alternates between two characters on a chapter-by-chapter basis. You may want to contact him to see what guidance he can give. Perhaps he can recommend one of his books to read/review. He's an excellent reviewer.
I started with omniscient, but most current fiction is third limited, so I switched. Fortunately, I did. There are several chapters that absolutely would not have worked in omniscient. If you plan to self-publish, you can break whatever rules you like. Some of the best-selling fiction of all time used omniscient, although the ones I know were written a long time ago.
3,189 2016-09-24 14:15:52
Re: Roll call (Originally Role Call) (42 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Ah, maintenant je comprend tous qui passe. Kdot, est que vous et en France pour les vacances?
Wow! My French sucks. Only slightly better than my English.
3,190 2016-09-24 14:06:48
Re: Say the first word that comes to mind... (1,634 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
trip li'l cat
3,191 2016-09-23 22:54:02
Re: Roll call (Originally Role Call) (42 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Kdot wrote:
bimmy wrote:Hey ya'll. I'd love a roll with some honey butter.
so... a baked ball of controlled fungus with bee vomit and a cow's fat-based mucus
That's not a nice way to describe bimmy. For shame!
3,192 2016-09-23 17:16:11
Re: Roll call (Originally Role Call) (42 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I'd love to roll in some honey butter.
3,193 2016-09-23 10:05:27
Re: Viewing reviews for inactive chapters? (13 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
I think I finally found what Vern is talking about. Choose Portfolio-> Edit-> Content. It lists all the active and inactive content is one pace.
Thanks all.
Dirk
3,194 2016-09-23 02:39:36
Re: Say the first word that comes to mind... (1,634 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Duplicate
3,195 2016-09-23 02:37:52
Re: Roll call (Originally Role Call) (42 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Kdot wrote:
Who are the rest of you who don't pipe up in here? I need new cannon fodder.
You're getting senile. Where's my review? And where's your next chapter?
Bzzt!
3,196 2016-09-22 22:44:42
Re: Say the first word that comes to mind... (1,634 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Huh?
3,197 2016-09-22 16:26:23
Re: Say the first word that comes to mind... (1,634 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Portugese
Portly geese
3,198 2016-09-22 02:59:46
Re: The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B. (1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Thank you both.
3,199 2016-09-22 02:20:38
Re: Ran across this today (7 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
I own several. Bricks running Windows.
3,200 2016-09-22 00:22:24
Re: The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B. (1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Silly question: are human-like tones in speech considered to be "modulated"? The dictionary definitions are a little vague.
