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Ronald, I find all the extra detail overwhelming. I thought A.T.'s original was already too crammed full of content. Here's what I read in yours: Shadyia, Silver Rose, Demos Azari, Innocenti, sisterhood, demon, enchanted box, slaughter humanity, enchanted ruby, labyrinth, sworn enemy, magician Aaron, city of Anderholm, ruin.

It's like trying to stuff Lord of the Rings into a paragraph. Shadyia (Frodo) is the book's main protagonist. Have the heart of the paragraph be about/follow her. The Demos (Saruman?) and Aaron (Gandalf) appear to be secondary players. Mention them briefly, if at all. The demon seems to be Sauron, with the ability to wipe out humanity. Keep that in the paragraph. The city of Anderholm (Middle Earth?) isn't as big a deal as the destruction of all humanity. If you had to punt one or the other from the paragraph, which would it be? Things like Anderholm, Innocenti, and Silver Rose are great names, but you need more page space to do them justice and reduce the complexity of that paragraph.

Your mileage may vary.
Bill the Cat

My apologies, Ronald. I was trying for a bit of cultural humor from the Bloom County cartoons. Turns out, Bill the Cat says ack, not gack. My bad.

I was using Google Docs years ago. None of the export options to get it into Word worked completely. I think I just finally cut & pasted, created the styles I needed in Word, and then went through the whole draft, applying styles manually. It's not as bad as it sounds. Set everything to Normal first, then go through applying other styles where needed. Google still enhances Docs, so hopefully the export options work better now.

Also, be aware that Docs only supports about a half dozen styles, most of them headings. It's been like that forever. The only way to create your own is to modify one of the existing styles. I don't think you can rename them, though, so you may have a style called Heading 3 that you use to format indented text, an epigraph, or whatever you're trying to highlight. The other option is to use the default styles as is, and manually format wherever you need formatting other than Normal and Headings. The lack of user-defined styles was a key reason I bought a refurbished Windoze machine over the cheaper Chromebooks..

Aggressively passive.

Ancient cave paintings.

That's a lovely red chemise you're wearing, Dr. Ess.

No, she's more of a physical fighter. She beats their brains in. She's present at the fight between Joseph and Apollo at the Neuer Mond dinner. Apollo, of course, has his enhanced abilities from God. Joseph will have Billie. I still need to make Joseph lose, though, so Joseph has to find a way to reign her in.

In what demonic paint store did they make you work in? Green and blue make white?

We all gotta die sometime. I believe in doing it spectacularly! Just ask Trump.

It seems little Anikh will be returning in v3, having been totally dumped mid-story in v2. She's the girl Joseph rescued from the hospital who died in his arms and took up residence in his head. I didn't have a good use for her. Until Bill K. returned to TNBW! His review gave me the idea to resurrect her. Picture Regan from the Exorcist (her head all a twirling) in Joseph's head. Her new name in v3 will be Billie, naturally. Among other things, she's going to be the ghost who takes on the pedophile guard in King of the Slaves. No need for Joseph to do it when I can let her at him! I have got to rewatch the Exorcist! She can also take over in a TBD prison scene where Joseph is almost raped. She'll be off pouting when Joseph really needs her to kick the shogun's ass.

Manticore-skinned Veethan? As Thurston Howell once said, "Watch your language! There are ladies present." And Amy's here, too. :-)

I'm glad you're laughing. For a minute I thought you took my post seriously. If it moves, shoot it! I should make that my signature.