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Here's the revised version: Caesar, this procedure is excruciating. Replicated tissue produces a flood of uncontrolled nerve signals for hours, causing intense pain. It’s like being burned alive. It completely overwhelms any safe dose of narcotics I could give you. You must not attempt this without anesthesia.

I'm going to put some of that in. The biggest improvement is that I now have consistent growth of nerve cells across both medical scenes.

Thanks, njc.
Dirk

Caligula convinced Nero to forbid anesthesia for Apollo. He either has to live with the scourging scars or undergo the procedure while conscious. I even added a medication he has to sip to protect his vocal cords while he's screaming. The doctor tells him the medication is referred to as sewage by patients and that the stomach rejects it, causing the patient to vomit as much as they drink. Seabrass thought the medication was over the top. :-)

Now I just need a way to reconcile the two aforementioned medical procedures (one creates nerves while the other destroys them), all while making the scourging treatment excruciating. One option would be for the scourging treatment to cause pain by some other mechanism than burning existing nerves in nearby healthy tissues.

Amy, help!

4017 human cell replication problem:

As you may recall, Apollo burns off his arm in Act III and orders the doctor not to reattach the nerves when she regrows his arm, which takes only a few days. I can stretch the regrowth indefinitely timewise, since the arm is useless without the nerves, so he doesn't really need it right away for story purposes. However, I'd like him to have a normal working arm eventually, which means nerves can be regrown under the right circumstances.

The problem arises in my latest chapter, Apollo Gets Spanked. Apollo is forced to undergo an excruciating procedure to rapidly treat/heal many scourging wounds on his back without anesthesia. The procedure uses rapid cell replication to fill in and bind the wounds together like a zipper. But what makes it excruciating? Tentatively, I have the procedure burning away at existing nerves in adjacent healthy tissue.

These two forms of cell regrowth strike me as inconsistent. The first can regrow an entire arm, including nerves, whereas the second destroys nerves. The only reason I destroy nerves is to make the procedure painful. Can anyone suggest a different/better reason why treating the scourging wounds would be excruciating?

Thanks
Dirk

I need to get you to name new characters for me. Yours are cool. I have a character named Maximilian Hunter. I like the first name, as it's important to my short story, but Hunter is crap.

Aussie has masterminded an attack on the Royal Family, resulting in 12 dead Royal Guard officers.
She's about to plan an attack on a parade of teenage cadets. In v2, it was a slaughter. Not sure how to write it for a PG audience.

My next chapter, Apollo Gets Spanked, is up. This is mostly new unless you were around for my aborted v1.

Quick, go read!
Dirk

P.S. Counting my short story, I'm actually 2-3 posts ahead of some of you. How cool is that? Amy gets a pass because she's on chemo. As for the rest, I owe some reviews, so write something!

No worries. I'm not allowed to cross the border anymore. The details are hidden in my autobiography, Into the Mind of God. :-)

I'm still on Office 2007 (runs on Windows 10!), so I just turned the feature off, as it's more annoying than helpful. There are some things software doesn't excel at yet. Try translating from English to another language using Google Translate, then translate back, and you'll see what I mean. Too many subtleties to language. Scholars still argue to this day about the translation of individual words in the Bible and how they affect the meaning of verses.

Bzzt!

I don't understand why third-person would be harder. My characters reflect all the time in third-person. It can go on for paragraphs. Occasionally, I switch to first-person/italics to emphasize certain thoughts.

How about Captain Maya?