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Well, Memphis. I've tried to reread all of the above with "A careful reader finds more truth in good fiction in one night than he is able to find in a true story in a lifetime" in mind, and --

I've not heard the Lincoln/Fredrick Douglas story. For the most part I am dubious of historical works. I believe fiction is the place where the great truths of men's advancement (or decline) are told. I like to read about our shuffle to the grave through the eyes of thinkers unfettered by the constraints of dubious agendas, lost records, or secret conversations. I like well-thought out fiction that rips at the fabric of history as written by historians.

--  reads quite differently now! I have to confess that I wasn't understanding you at all for much of this thread (obviously). I thought you meant you like to get your history (actual historical facts) directly from historical fiction! I couldn't work that out. That's why I told you that whole story about the novel I read about Rowlandson. I was trying to say, "No! Don't rely on historical fiction alone! You're just getting potentially faulty interpretation! Faulty because it's tarnished by knowledge of what happened AFTER. You have to pair that stuff with primary source material!"

My apologies. This thread is not my finest hour! In my defense, I often visit here while deep in homework (as a break), and so I often read with one eye still on the stacks!

I'm going to give this one more attempt:

Forget historical fiction. You're talking of literature as a whole -- art, the human culmination, life brought down to the drop. Human truths in literature are more authentic for you than facts found in historical sources. History repeats itself and is swayed by its interpreters anyhow. What matters is what humanity made of it, and that is in fiction. Fiction lies but not as history lies: fiction lies to get at truth, while history lies to obliterate truth. History is obliterature. (Ha! That last part was just for funny.)

I will have to read it several times to see how it dovetails with my belief that great fiction tells a truer story of man's climb from the swamp than great history.

Ah! I can read this passage now and understand it, but somehow I wasn't processing it earlier. You're not saying fiction actually is history (the archives of history, I mean). You're saying that fiction is the reaction to history, and within it is the lies we speak, perhaps, and the truths we cannot help. And within humanity's journey, that art is what matters.

Well, I'm too ravenously curious about history to entirely agree, but I believe I get your point now -- which should have been glaringly obvious. You said it quite plainly above. If I've still misinterpreted your view, we shall shake hands and talk about the weather, for I am obviously not following.

Pardon me for being a brick and a half, Memphis!!

(Can I get a "By George, she's got it"? CAN I?) wink

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Dill Carver wrote:

My war on 'got' within this novel (from another forum thread).

I have minor issues with the slack-jawed lingo and phrases like ‘a hot cup of coffee.’  This is a cup of hot coffee surely? But realise this is American and so probably colloquial but,… ‘They got a hot cup of coffee and a firm handshake when they got home.’

'Got' is such a dumbed down vocal expression. Surely, give this astronaut fellow some diction?

‘They received a cup of hot coffee and a firm handshake when they arrived home.’

But the cup is hot?

Your rewrite sounds far better, but would this character speak that way? He reminds me of my brother, who would never say "received" and "arrived" when "got" would get smile him to the end of the sentence faster.

You spoke earlier about using the natural speech patterns within dialogue. To alter this character's speech pattern would change him.  I actually agree with you that all the "gots" started to grate in the early pages, before the story picked up. But after the story picked up, I didn't notice them at all. I just wanted to know what would happen, and I believed this character was real because he spoke authentically.

If the author was narrating this way third party? That would be a shame. It's different in an epistolary novel. The narration is the actual character.

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You're welcome! It appears I've still misunderstood your perspective. Still an interesting look at the deconstruction of those documents, though. smile

I quite like that aphorism. Thank you for sharing it.

Right now I'm reading A Farewell To Arms. More truth may be there than in the archives of actual history, is your point? I can't say I disagree with that line of thinking. Art as the great lens on life. I (may be) beginning to understand. Pardon me for being thick!

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Dill Carver wrote:

What is 'proper' tragedy to a masochist and a martyr? Any drama or discomfort will do.

If she GETS cool drama and discomfort, that's a comedy. If she doesn't, that's a proper tragedy. For her.

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Dill Carver wrote:
corra wrote:

(I don't think Tess would make it on Mars.) tongue

The place sounds uncomfortable, barren and tragic. She'd love it. wink

If she loved it, it would hardly be a proper tragedy.

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See, now you have been infected with the toothpick chewin' lingo of the Novel in question.

True enough! lol

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Robinson Crusoe in a space suit is right! With funny monologues. During a very tense moment:

“I can't wait till I have grandchildren. When I was younger, I had to walk [SPOILER]. Uphill! In an EVA suit! On Mars, ya little shit! Ya hear me? Mars!”

Made me laugh. smile

(I don't think Tess would make it on Mars.) tongue

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lol

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Dill Carver wrote:

And there I was thinking you had to get naked with an Agent.

I don't think that would be too outlandish.

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It's epistolary: the protagonist begins the novel writing as he would speak. He has no idea anyone's actually going to read the logs. The voice sounds authentic to me, and you get used to it. I didn't know where it was going at first, but it was piping good.

Look at this: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Ue4PCI0NamI

(I hadn't watched a preview yet because I didn't want the story spoiled! I have actively shoved friends away for the last two weeks, because they all wanted to tell me just a bit about the book, and STOP SPOILING IT, PEOPLE! There is no significant spoiler in the preview, but don't watch it if you plan to read the book, because it may intrude on the suspense.)

When Mark talks in the preview, that's how the book reads.

It's definitely not high literature. I pointed out a place in Chapter Seven for Dill which made me chuckle, because it was just bad writing. But this is a good lesson (I think) in the story far surpassing the medium. Maybe I'm still on the story high.

I judge you, Vern; I judge you and your semi-colon of doom. lol

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Dill Carver wrote:

Yet there it is; passed the agents, editors and publishers....

I don't think it passed any of that, actually. The author originally self-published the book (in 2011) and offered it free on his blog. He targeted the readers rather than the industry. They sent him through to Hollywood. smile

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vern wrote:

I've seen some ads for the movie which might be better than crawling through the book in this case.

My lit student heart just skipped a beat. Did you actually suggest watching the movie first? wink tongue

Hey Sol. I wasn't sure where to post this, but I got a connection request from someone named ZAMBAZAMBA30, who strongly wanted to show me her pictures. Before I could delete her connection request, her account was closed. So now I have a big red "Connection Requests - 1" note on my Home Page which won't go away because when I click it, it says I have no connection requests. I don't personally care, but I thought I'd point it out as a glitch. smile

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Dill Carver wrote:

There must be a good story in there under the ‘junk’ prose.

I pressed on after I wrote that comment to you, Dill. The story picked up quickly after. It's been keeping me up late for two weeks! I woke up early this morning with sixty pages left. "WHAT WILL HAPPEN TO MARK?" is what I was thinking. smile I grabbed my copy and finished it a couple minutes ago, actually.

The story is EXCELLENT. Sincerely, by the end, I don't even care how it's written. The protagonist is very funny. The plot carries the tale, and the writing -- eh. It's not high literature or anything, but it gets the job done.

That is my review. smile I can't wait to see the film version!

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Really great point. It's like those exercises they have online that fill in numbers and such for letters within words, and the brain just fills in what's missing. Poorly described smile but perhaps people know what I'm talking about.

“Sometimes I could put myself to sleep saying that over and over until after the honeysuckle got all mixed up in it the whole thing came to symbolize night and unrest I seemed to be lying neither asleep nor awake looking down a long corridor of grey halflight where all stable things had become shadowy paradoxical all I had done shadows all I had felt suffered taking visible form antic and perverse mocking without relevance inherent themselves with the denial of the significance they should have affirmed thinking I was I was not who was not was not who.”

- Faulkner (The Sound & the Fury)

I feel like the brain supplies missing punctuation here? At least in the first few sentences. At the start of the passage, the cadence is intact, so one can naturally place punctuation without seeing it. By the end, the cadence is so frayed (I) had to reread the final words to make sense of them. Faulkner sets up a pattern with the cadence, allowing us to fill in the missing punctuation. Then he changes the rhythm. The effect is disorientation and chaos.

The form matches the scene. smile An attempt?

“Sometimes I could put myself to sleep saying that over and over, until after the honeysuckle got all mixed up in it. The whole thing came to symbolize night and unrest. I seemed to be lying neither asleep nor awake, looking down a long corridor of grey half-light where all stable things had become shadowy, paradoxical. All I had done? Shadows. All I had felt suffered, taking visible form: antic and perverse, mocking, without relevance, inherent themselves with the denial of the significance they should have affirmed, thinking, 'I was. I was not. Who was? Not was. Not who.'”

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I was objecting specifically to the word "proper." What is "proper" -- civilized? superior? Says who?

From my standpoint, proper English exists. It's the written language following a set of common sense rules that allow all of us understand it.

That's actually called "standard written English," though. smile And it changes A LOT. Style books (which themselves vary) have to keep updating their books to keep to date on conventions.

One can be linguistically astute and ignore the conventions of standard written English:

"Nay, nay, he's noan at Gimmerton," said Joseph. "Aw's niver wonder bud he's at t' bothom uf a bog-hoile. This visitation worn't for nowt, and Aw wod hev ye tuh look aht, Miss — yah muh be t' next. Thank Hivin for all ! All warks togither for gooid tuh them as is chozzen, and piked aht froo' th' rubbidge ! Yah knaw whet t' Scripture ses." - Wuthering Heights

“What's the use you learning to do right when it's troublesome to do right and ain't no trouble to do wrong, and the wages is just the same?” - Huck Finn

If I approached either of these two characters with-whiching, would they be "improper," or would I? Language is elastic.

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njc wrote:
corra wrote:

So, I was reading The Elements of Style, prepared to shake my head at the all-or-nothing rules and feel smug and skeptical ...

Some skepticism is called for, not the skepticisms of a natural doubter, but the care of a craftsman making sure that the tool fits the job.  A few of his composition rules best fit essays, but if you look at how they affect the result, you can see how the rules that the statements represent apply also to narrative.

And look again at the famous Rule 13.  Each clause, each phrase of the Rule illustrates itself!  It is a brilliant piece of writing, and of rhetoric.

You were quite right, njc! It's a brilliant little book. I like rules 16, 17, 18, & 22. (As those are weaknesses of mine.) wink

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Dill Carver wrote:

For fun and interest; anyone want to have a stab at punctuating this Cormac McCarthy passage?


he walked out in the gray light and stood and he saw for a brief moment the absolute truth of the world the cold relentless circling of the intestate earth darkness implacable the blind dogs of the sun in their running the crushing black vacuum of the universe and somewhere two hunted animals trembling like ground-foxes in their cover borrowed time and borrowed world and borrowed eyes with which to sorrow it

He walked out in the gray light and stood, and he saw for a brief moment the absolute truth of the world: the cold relentless circling of the intestate earth. Darkness implacable -- the blind dogs of the sun in their running, the crushing black vacuum of the universe -- and somewhere two hunted animals trembling like ground-foxes in their cover. Borrowed time and borrowed world and borrowed eyes with which to sorrow it.

I'm starting Sula by Toni Morrison (for a class.) smile

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Charles_F_Bell wrote:

VW may have equated féminisme with equal civil rights, or just a moral sense that women are not inferior to men, and the quotes you cite reflect only that, but not the equality of results, and sometimes the undisguised hatred of men by womyn, that post-1960's feminism advocates, in the same vein as pre-1960's negro rights movement, which politically was complete in 1957 in the U.S.A.  with that year's Civil Rights Bill, is not the same as today's thoroughly racist-socialist tone.

I'm not sure how you can possibly suggest that the Civil Rights Movement politically ended in 1957? I find such a remark sickening. Google Jim Crow.

I did enormous research a few months ago on the struggle for the ERA in Georgia in the 1970s and early 1980s, and I can tell you that it was a sight more complicated than "we hate men." I read of a woman in Georgia who proposed in the state Senate that a law which insisted that no rape charge go through without a witness be amended: after all, a charge of theft could go through without a witness. She was the only woman there, and the reaction among the men? Was laughter, and the general consensus that any woman who gets raped asked for it. She was disgusted and certainly did role up her sleeves to fight. Then she went home to the husband who loved and respected her. It wasn't men she abhorred, you see: it was stupidity.

(By the way, I was forced to research the archives of primary source material within our university's library to find this information. It naturally didn't make it into any of the institutional history books. Which is actually what Virginia Woolf was writing about. You appear to be enormously uneducated on this topic.)

You've heard of The Harlem Renaissance. Not actually a united front. Within the movement were those who wanted to present black Americans before the public without the stereotypes which had been shackled around black American necks since before the American Civil War. Others wanted to exercise their artistic freedom and write of black characters with raw honesty. (See Richard Wright.) Then there were the white benefactors like Charlotte Osgood Mason, who paid writers like Langston Hughes and Zora Neale Hurston to work according to her agenda.

A civil war existed within the movement. The same is true of feminism.    

In the 1960s, white women who had the time and the money ("give a woman 500 pounds and a room of her own") took on the feminist movement in America. One of their central goals was to get women out of the house and working. They were strongly inspired by the book The Feminine Mystique: what is this feeling of deadness in middle class white women in America? why aren't we happy? perhaps because we have no meaning in our lives, and simply exist to wash the dishes. we should get jobs. (Was the basic trajectory.)

Women who had to work to keep body and soul alive didn't see how winning the right to work was such a victory. They'd been working all along. Women of color and women who had immigrated to America? Were left behind.  They wanted help supporting their children, help against abusive husbands, help for mothers who were deserted, help in the face of rape, help existing as marginalized figures three times oppressed in America: for their gender, for their color, and for their lower "class" existence.

Many of the women at the forefront of  the movement in the 1960s (generally middle class white women with a nuclear family) felt that winning the right to work alongside men was the end of the feminist movement. Objections from marginalized groups within the movement were ignored. Some women starting protesting loudly that men were the enemy and female power was EVERYTHING. These people often caught the attention of the media, and still do today. Some women scorned other women who chose to marry and stay at home as RUINERS OF feminism. They insisted upon a radical stance. Others strongly felt (and feel) that feminism should defend the right to choose, and worked to defend women who went to college to get an M.R.S., married, spent twenty years at home with no work history that was valued by the public (for they certainly were working all along), and then found themselves deserted by husbands who preferred a younger wife. Women in this position were left with children to feed, no work history, and no hope. Feminists both fought in defense of them and aggressively attacked them, because feminists (shockingly enough) come with different personalities and agendas.

I was chatting with my mother recently (pardon me, I may begin to babble here) about the pay inequality situation in America. She mentioned that women currently make 78 cents on the dollar compared to men, which is a three cent increase from the pay difference when she was a secretary before she married my dad. There was a long moment of silence, and then we both burst out laughing. Part of feminism today is about that. The moments when mothers and daughters glance at one another and realize that in the entire life which has passed between them, we have achieved three cents.

Much of the movement today is generated within Women's Studies classes in universities (where the average college student is illiterate.) The current discussion centers on how to get the movement out of the classroom and back into the media. The radical stuff you see in the media doesn't represent the movement as a whole: it represents personalities within the movement who scream loudly enough the media notices. Meanwhile, you don't hear as much about the quiet souls who haven't a drop of aggression in them, but who want to work for peace. On behalf of the mothers who fought before them, on behalf of a history entirely ignored by the media. Much of that struggle centers today on an awareness of the reality of intersectionality, and seeks to gain equality for everyone -- male or female, American or Saudi Arabian, gay or straight, black or white. It's a movement in defense of humanity.

During the struggle for the vote in America, many women picketed outside the White House and created all sorts of havoc to force the President's hand: give us the vote, sir, or you are fighting for democracy overseas and denying it to half the population here at home. That certainly offended a few staunch gentlemen (and ladies) who had no idea why the women were picketing but sure as  shoot knew they were doing something which hadn't always been done.

The picketing made it into the media and was certainly an in-your-face tactic. Thank goodness.

I say all of the above in response to your remark "and sometimes the undisguised hatred of men by womyn, that post-1960's feminism advocates." You have no idea what post-1960s feminism advocates. You're just a fussy-breeches with a bee in his bonnet, who makes the same disgusting jokes that those men in the courtroom in Georgia did forty years ago ("ride-side-up"). We have advanced three cents, apparently, but you, sir, haven't advanced at all. (That's the college student in me talking, not the feminist. You'll have to forgive me. I'm ridiculously ignorant, as well as illiterate.)

PS: If you Google the woman you imply needs a ride, you'll find that she is a soul who suffers from depression, and that she imprinted that tattoo on her leg to artistically capture the way the world sees her ("I'm fine") and the way, when she glances down at the same tattoo, she sees herself ("Save me.") Shame on you. For your filthy mind, for your filthy remark, and for your misogynistic lack of sensitivity. Poor you. So a few women are angry. Is it any wonder?

That, sir, is the feminist speaking.

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Dill Carver wrote:

quote=corra]

...it is un-funny feminist propaganda...


Charles_F_Bell wrote:

....Who knows or cares to know about Leonard Woolf, by the way? Or Clive Bell, for that matter.

Wasn't it Leonard Woolf who when asked, 'How many feminists does it take to change a light bulb? replied, "None, feminists can't change anything."

...and that's why his wife had, "change this you bastard" inscribed upon his headstone?

lol x 10,000!

Me too.

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Dill Carver wrote:
corra wrote:

A friend of mine keeps insisting I read The Road ...

It is quite engaging and the writing style is immense, but I found the story deeply depressing (for such is the authors intent, and the quality of his story-telling) it put me in a dark mood for weeks. I was depressed as if I'd suffered a trauma in real life. If ever there was a 'feel-good' book this is a 'feel-bad' one. In some ways I've never recovered from it, for just like a real life experience I visit scenes from it in my mind now and again. When I do I'm always depressed with a prevailing feeling of hopelessness. 

If you are a sensitive soul, it is not a story that comes and goes; this one sticks. When I see the book in its jacket upon my shelf, a black ball of gnawing dread forms in the pit of my stomach.

Farewell to arms, on the other hand, is lifting my by my heart and opening my mind to dreadful and wonderful things. I feel the humanity within it.

(Sorry to the Thread if this post has gone off piste - no hijack intended smile)

To be honest? My recent read of "The Snows of Kilimanjaro" affected me as you've described above. I was thinking about it for several days after I read it. I couldn't shake this sense of heavy darkness lit by humanity, weighted by regret. Not the first time, or the second time I read it. Then I was reading for "how he wrote." Looking at the mechanics to see the structure. (I've told you this is a flaw of mine.)

By the third read, I was able to forget all that and simply read for the magic he put to the page. That time I was deeply impacted.

The person who recommended The Road to me is an enormous fan of Hemingway. He's read everything Hemingway wrote, I think, and claims The Sun Also Rises as his favorite novel. He is forever after me to read that one. He didn't tell me anything about The Road. He just suggested I read it, and a few people around us groaned. smile He says it's incredible. If it's dark enough to get into the soul that way, it must be something, though I'm a bit hesitant, because I do get mooded by literature.

I think I'll begin with A Farewell To Arms tonight. That passage you cited in the other thread really got to me.

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Charles_F_Bell wrote:
corra wrote:

...it is un-funny feminist propaganda...

“The history of men's opposition to women's emancipation is more interesting perhaps than the story of that emancipation itself.” ― Virginia Woolf

In-your-face feminism has had nothing to do with the mere right to vote and other citizen rights. It is pure up-and-down gender supremacy that from the bottom is about equal results, rather than equal opportunity, and from the top about more than just more. Who knows or cares to know about Leonard Woolf, by the way? Or Clive Bell, for that matter.

I offered you a few quotes by Virginia Woolf to show you what an actual feminist agenda looks like.  The exercise which began this thread is about the way different perspectives can alter the way we read -- and punctuate -- a sentence. And how with slight of punctuation, we can transform meaning.

I'm not sure how "who knows or cares to know Leonard Woolf, Clive Bell, or Charles Bell" has any relation to the topic of this thread. You seem to be wandering again. I'll leave you to it.

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Quite an interesting suggestion, Dill! I found Charles's comment about words as punctuation in Joyce mighty interesting, too. A friend of mine keeps insisting I read The Road -- but I may have to read A Farewell To Arms first. smile

I agree -- this thread makes me look at punctuation with a sharper eye, as our shreds usually do.