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My two cents on ellipses versus em-dash? The ellipses imply a pause, or a trailing off. They create a gentler break. The em-dash implies a sudden change in tone or subject.
"Iceberg... dead ahead!"
"Iceberg -- dead ahead!"
You can tie two clauses together with a good em-dash, to imply the same sudden break:
"A woman without -- her man is nothing!"
I wouldn't have picked this up voluntarily. It was assigned. My first science fiction! It was actually pretty good, once it got going.
I really like the title: The Left Hand of Darkness.
From the book:
"Light is the left hand of darkness,
and darkness the left hand of light."
Enormous congrats to you all!
So... I'm currently reading this book.
TIRZ! SPOILERS about THE MARTIAN! LOOK AWAY.
I have to say I agree. I didn't at first, because it's an epistolary novel, and the voice is believable. (We say "got" a lot here.)
But after several pages of it, it starts to feel limp. I think because there are so many "I faced this obstacle, and the following chemical formula, which I shall now explain in detail, got me out of it!" passages. At first it felt intriguing. (My dad worked for NASA, & I inherited a bit of his longing for space.)
But after about fifty pages it started feeling repetitive and tedious.
I work in a bookstore, & a lot people there have read it. They say it's AMAZING, so I'm going to press on for now. I don't dislike it, but so far it isn't nearly as gripping as I'd hoped.
Also, I cannot abide this passage, which opens Chapter Seven:
"I finished making water some time ago. I'm no longer in danger of blowing myself up."
In the book, he actually means he made water from chemicals. That's not how I read it!
In my mind I refer to le Carré all of the time. Funny how some writing sticks and influences.
I re-visited and polished up a story of mine for the current short story competition here on tNBW. I actually wrote it a couple of years ago and it was my big exercise in writing in John le Carré 'style.'
His works are either loved or hated.
This is opening to my piece, The Executioner.
These crazy mock-executions have to stop. It is time; I think we all know that...
I've never read le Carré, but I really like that blunt, abrupt style in the excerpt! He already had me interested in what happens next! I think "tell" can be done very well: it offers the author the opportunity to "show" the character's voice and personality, and to dilute the tale with the character's agenda or perspective. I like your idea that it's like a briefing. I think you and le Carré do it piping well! It would be a shame to cut the character intro to get immediately into action. This sort of opening is the sinkinable kind. (That's a word!)
Somehow I've overwritten your post here corra. I think it is because I'm almost as bad a moderator as you were
Accidentally wiping people out. Power goes straight to the keypress.
You said something like; 'le Carré - you'll need to read them all again"
Just seeing this!
The Grapes of Wrath
To Kill a Mockingbird
All Quiet on the Western Front
Of Mice & Men
A Streetcar Named Desire
The Grass Is Singing
Leaves of Grass (Leaves like pages! It took me quite some time to figure that out! Which is apparently something I shouldn't tell people.)
Long Day's Journey Into Night
The Sound & the Fury:
"She should have died hereafter;
There would have been a time for such a word.
To-morrow, and to-morrow, and to-morrow,
Creeps in this petty pace from day to day
To the last syllable of recorded time,
And all our yesterdays have lighted fools
The way to dusty death. Out, out, brief candle!
Life's but a walking shadow, a poor player
That struts and frets his hour upon the stage
And then is heard no more: it is a tale
Told by an idiot, full of sound and fury,
Signifying nothing."
The Winter of Our Discontent (probably my favorite in this list) -
"Now is the winter of our discontent
Made glorious summer by this son of York;
And all the clouds that low'r'd upon our house
In the deep bosom of the ocean buried."
"I have forgot much, Cynara! gone with the wind,
Flung roses, roses riotously with the throng,
Dancing, to put thy pale, lost lilies out of mind;
But I was desolate and sick of an old passion,
Yea, all the time, because the dance was long:
I have been faithful to thee, Cynara! in my fashion."
– Ernest Dowson
It will be an excellent discussion! I do have to get back to my studies for the moment, but I love the idea of eventually shredding this novel with you! I have no idea when I'll read it, but I was leafing through my copy a bit ago & feeling the tug. I'll definitely pop in here to let you know when I do read it.
That line you quote does sound pretty bad.
I don't regret the distraction! I regret lacking more time. I love this!!! and x x 10,000.
Virginia Hall and Andree Borrel, Nancy Wake, Violette Reine, Cecile Pearl Witherington, Odette Hallowes, Diana Rowden, Vera Leigh; Lise de Baissac...
now we are talking women outside of any binary.
Add that darling woman child Ann Frank to that list too.
Wonderful, courageous women, it sounds like. But they all came after Hardy, F. After two world wars which shattered illusions. It was a different world in Hardy's day.
Again, I'm not suggesting such women didn't exist. I'm suggesting that (until people started pointing out the discrepancy), history failed to remember them.
Men dominate history and are nothing but for the women behind them. We all know that.
Yes, because people made sure it was known. LIKE WOOLF. Sir Pah!s-a-lot.
Do I read clinically? Absolutely, especially when it comes to women's history. I've said somewhere else I read classics like primary documents, and I do. That's the way my brain works, and that's where my interest lies. When a good story can make me forget I'm reading, I know it will be a favorite. That hardly ever happens for me. It did with Gone with the Wind. It was only after several rereads that I was able to pull back and begin to analyze it in parts. My first couple reads were all story.
I'm not sure I expressed myself well above, if you think I question the integrity and validity of Gone with the Wind. I wasn't knocking it for a second. I think Mitchell knew exactly what she was doing. People still read Gone with the Wind and assume Mitchell was pining for the old days when she wrote it. In reality? She was a vibrant young woman (she wrote the novel in the 1920s) who had seen civilization as she knew it, with its Victorian morale and idealism, shattered by World War I and the Spanish influenza. She was raised by a grandmother and father who insisted she comport herself according to outdated standards of femininity grounded in the Victorian era. Meanwhile, she lived in a world where women chopped off their hair, cursed, got jobs interviewing prostitutes, and smoked cigarettes. Her mother was a suffragette who pressured her to be STRONG and REBELLIOUS while simultaneously insisting she fulfill her role as wife and mother. Her mother would have pointed out the incompatibility of the Southern legend of chivalry alongside the reality of "the rule of thumb" which went along with Southern marriages -- as long as your stick is no bigger than your thumb, it's perfectly legal to beat your wife. Southern chivalry suggested that women should be prized like angels and kept on a pedestal, where they were entirely useless. (Trapped, under the name of chivalry.) Mitchell is questioning the Old South illusion, and she does it BRILLIANTLY by borrowing the female is good / female is bad binary and turning it upside down.
When I say Scarlett wasn't a real woman of the Victorian era, I don't mean there weren't rebellious women who thought all sorts of brilliantly independent thoughts in the Victorian era. I mean that Scarlett was written by a woman who had seen the world transform after World War One. Scarlett is a brilliantly anachronistic character, I think. Sure, she starts out as indoctrinated into the social ideal as any other Victorian woman. (Surely many questioned it.) But a Victorian woman could never have written Scarlett as Mitchell wrote her.
I don't know if I'm making sense. What I mean is that you are comparing a diary written in the 1940s, and a novel published in 1936, to a novel written in 1891, and you seem to be suggesting that the prior two are more realistic, and therefore Hardy should have shut up and let a woman write Tess's story. I find that to be unrealistic thinking.
There's a scene in Jane Eyre where Jane has left Rochester & is knocking from door to door, pleading food. Bronte leaves the reactions of those who shut their doors to Jane unspoken, but the clear implication in the Victorian era would have been obvious: Jane is well-dressed and alone. This suggests that she has worked somewhere and has abandoned her post. ("Good") women didn't walk the streets alone, & it would have been foolish to abandon her post in such a society. Therefore, she must have been found in a precarious position with her "master" and been ejected from his employment. Such a woman was a "tainted" woman: alone, filth, fallen. Once she was found this way, she had nowhere to turn. She was destitute. She would never work again.
This was an actual fact of female life: a single woman was wholly reliant upon her employer to be the moral ideal Victorian society expounded. But the reality? (Which I've researched in primary source material.) Often the man in power sexually assaulted the woman in his employ, until she wound up pregnant, when he expelled her from his home immediately. A single pregnant woman in the 1600s in England? Would be physically whipped for entering a parish seeking help: even if she was in the middle of giving birth. The parish didn't want the responsibility of paying fees for her baby, so they would whip her and send her on to the next parish. During labor, an unmarried woman would be tortured to provide the father's name. (By the midwives.) It was a horrific society for women, if they didn't meet the mold.
THIS is what (I believe) Hardy is supposed to be challenging in Tess. I have heard that the plot is a bit over the top, as Victorian novels often were: lots of twists and coincidences. (I think it was serialized, which would explain that.) But he is trying to challenge the idea that a woman who met with the fate I lay out above was FALLEN. He was illustrating the abhorrent way society crushed a lone woman who was unlucky enough to deal with a man who didn't fit into the Victorian illusion of the way the world "should" operate. (I read a bit about the novel because I find it difficult to discuss knowing nothing at all on the topic.)
There was this thing called the "cult of the domesticity" in the nineteenth century. That was the foundation of an acceptable woman's role: be desirable enough to get married, and then be the very best moral woman you can be, so that your husband has a gentle example to guide him, and you have an important position: mother to the future men of the world.
Before the Victorian era that cult didn't really exist yet. Lower and middle class women worked alongside their husbands in family businesses growing the food they would eat. When industrialization came along, women were winnowed out: men went on to work (rightly enough) and there was really nothing left for women to do, but watch over the children and be placed on moral pedestals.
In America, women entered the public sphere in waves for the first time in the nineteenth century, working in social roles to rid the world of prostitution, slavery (Northern women did this), and drink. This sort of public activity was generally approved because by this time in history, women were considered more moral than men: pure, devoted, etc. Any woman who didn't fall in line with ideal this was considered tainted. Not a real woman. That was the binary: the all or nothing philosophy that a woman was either THIS EXACT PICTURE OF FEMININITY or expendable, evil, a witch.
A woman was frowned upon for any other public work, however. Acting? On the same par as prostitution. Writing? Oh, my. Absolutely prideful. Sinful even. I mean, it could be done, but it was best to do it anonymously, and unless you said what the men wanted to hear, it was pretty unlikely your words would be preserved. (History belongs to the victors, after all.)
Woolf directly addresses this point when she is on the hunt for a record of female history in her essay. She can find a few queens, but really no one else. She isn't saying no one else existed: she is saying -- men (who were in charge of the annals of history) had not recorded the lives of real women. The only history that had been preserved was a few queens, and a giant collection of classic literature written mostly by men, which implied that in the whole of history, beginning with the witch-like Eve, there were only two versions of women: evil temptresses ("you don't want to be like that, ladies!"), or appropriate and acceptable females ("be like these gentle angels, and mind your place.") GIGANTIC AGENDA. There. And also likely ignorance.
I adore Anne Frank, Dill, but she wrote that diary a half-century after Hardy wrote his novel, in the privacy of her bedroom. It's not realistic to expect that a woman of Hardy's day could easily toss out a work in her own words. It definitely could happen, and probably did, but it wasn't easy. She had to find a way to get it through the publishing company, & guess who ran that? Which means she had to have it approved by a man, which means that she had to have it approved by someone courageous enough to go against the social standard, and risk his own reputation. Which means it was rare, and even then, it had to be read to matter.
You (seem) to fault Hardy for being a man & writing a silly melodrama about a woman when that story ought to have been told by a woman? Well, welcome to the feminist movement, my friend. That's the point: so many things ought to have been done by women, but unfortunately, they weren't. Luckily, those who did have a hold of the publishing machine sometimes tried to put in a word to spark some thinking. You have to remember that the audience Hardy was writing for at the time wasn't from the twenty-first century. It was accustomed to melodrama. Hemingway and World War One would shatter that. Melodrama was the language Hardy spoke, & he tried to use it for the right reason (I believe. Again, I'll have to read the novel to see for myself.)
You don't have to convince me of the integrity of Gone with the Wind. It's the most valid novel I've ever read. I think Mitchell knew exactly what she was doing with that illusive literary binary: Melanie Hamilton is the perfect, sweet, idealistic representation of the prized female enthroned within her domestic sphere. Literature by men in the Victorian era? Would have loved her! (Think Lucie Manette.) What happens to Melanie, & what happens to Scarlett? That's the point of Gone with the Wind, I think. When the pretty illusion is gone, when that pretend world of courtesy and chivalry falls away, what must a woman do to survive? Be the silly, simpering fool the men at the start of the novel want Scarlett to be? Or the shrewd woman who breaks the rules to survive? And does either Melanie or Scarlett live happily ever after? There is no place for either: they are pinched, suffocated, & destroyed whichever way they turn. Mitchell is brilliant because she snuffs out both of her females, but she complicates them, and implies that beyond their suffocation, they were real, they were courageous, & they lived.
And in real life, the real words of the most victimised and courageous of young women who never once asks for sympathy and who rips my heart asunder.
Despite everything, I believe that people are really good at heart.
She wrote her own story in her own words and because of that they can never, ever give her the Hardy treatment and I’m sure they would have, if she hadnt.
x That's a favorite of mine. I believe all women would have preferred to write for themselves.
Within the context of thsi thread I think that the impressions that you are left with are more important than direct quotes. It's like a meal; whether you enjoyed it or not is one thing. The ingredients are another
Well, I was barely able to supply plot.
In my opinion women don’t need enormous sympathy; it is condescending and patronising. In truth within novels as in life itself, they need equality. Showing a woman debased in order to for us to feel sympathetic achieves little. It is a cheap emotive trick, like having your helpless little blind character mugged so we appreciate her plight.
Does Scarlett O’Hara need the Hardy treatment lest don’t feel sympathy? No we don’t. With Scarlett we feel enormous admiration; for better or for worse she is a "force du jour". She lives in a time of female victims and unlike Tess, ‘victim’ is never a word you could use for Scarlett.
Did you just meet me? I wouldn't be fooled by a silly, overwrought depiction of female life. Nor would my friend, who is quiet, gentle, & very intelligent. I can't speak to the novel's plot as I've not read it. I believe it's dark and tragic & may involve a rape & what happens to a woman after the fact? That's the extent of what I know.
You talk of giving women equality in literature as well as life, & letting them write their tale in their own words? Preaching to the choir, my friend! I've just finished a read of A Room of One's Own, and Woolf says the same: (me summarizing Woolf in what follows) -- "Have you actually gone to the British Library and tried to locate the history of women? In history, they were forced to marry whomever their parents pleased, they were beaten in their homes and no one batted an eye, and yet they exist nowhere in the history that was valued and preserved. You might find a queen here and there, but where are the other women? They have vanished. If you go through literature, men have written them in relation to themselves, either as angels or monsters. They don't exist as real women. Where are they, ladies? We have no precedence. We must begin writing so that the women of the future can look back and find some evidence that we were here." That was written about forty years after Thomas Hardy published Tess.
Scarlett O'Hara was written by an incredibly lively woman from the 1920s who was using a modernist frame to critique the Victorian past. She sticks a woman who was all but a flapper into the 1860s & says, "What? It could happen." Scarlett is not your average woman of the Victorian era. She's a firestorm. You'll notice that in Gone with the Wind, Mitchell creates that female binary that was usually present in fiction written by men in the Victorian era and prior: Melanie is an angel, and Scarlett is a monster. She complicates the binary by saying, "Well, maybe the monster has some goodness in her. And maybe the angel can stand before her friends and neighbors and say, 'be good to my sister the monster, or you may leave my house.'" Maybe the woman Mitchell was trying to put before the world wasn't entirely Scarlett, or entirely Melanie, but something in between. She shatters the classic female binary in that novel, & probably sticks out her tongue right after.
Mitchell would probably hate Tess. She liked adventure novels.
Anyway, by "sympathetic," I didn't mean cartoon sympathetic, as you must know, since you know me. I meant sympathetic as a fellow human being. Hardy had a publishing reputation and a name highly revered in literary society, & could write a "what if" to get people thinking, when MANY people back then weren't thinking particularly clearly. On the topic of women. The literary style back then was different than it is today: I'm guessing his veers toward the sentimental? Like Dickens in Oliver Twist, who wanted to shed a light on the plight of the orphan & did so through the genre which was selling. I wouldn't call that a cheap trick. I would call that writing in the medium that people are reading, to gain the widest audience for the message. Meanwhile, "I would venture to guess that Anon, who wrote so many poems without signing them, was often a woman." - Virginia Woolf
The friend who recommends the book knows I'd prefer not to know the plot, so she only urges me to read it when I have the time. Which I shall. If I am appalled, you will be the first to know. x
We treat the line as if it were poetry. Normal writing rules don't apply.
Yes!! This is where the texture of the work is as intricate to the experience as the character development and plot. She doesn't use words simply as tools to shovel out dialogue and description: she uses them to contribute to the experience of the whole. I LOVE "felled, fallen, full." Poetry is right! And it isn't overegged. It's got the integrity I mentioned: it reads as if it belongs there. Why? It's confident. It's direct. It's specific. It's consistent. I trust this writer to make me believe that "felled, fallen, full" is a part of the tempo of this place she's bringing to life.
Now, if she'd said, "Felled, dazed, silent, he has fallen; knocked full length on the cobbles of the yard. I looked out the window and pondered the purple places on the pavement where people had plopped. Plopped, plopping, they placed themselves peacefully on the pavement for plopping," I'd start to wonder about her. But she isn't in it to be fancy. She's using repetition strategically. Right away we're in a scene. Those three falls subtly suggest that the soul to start has fallen, fallen, fallen before the novel has even begun. The repeat of "So now get up" creates a sense of disorientation: does that line come before or after the three falls? The description between gets us curtly into the scene. She is using the language BEAUTIFULLY to create a stark, harsh world and contrasting that with the subtle emphasis on "fallen", and the disorienting entry into a very disorienting world.
This character has FALLEN -- the historical connotation in the word is interesting. I trust this writer because of that. Just a few words in, and she is dazzling and INTERESTING. That's the integrity! I think.
Reviewers changing an author's 'voice' to be more like their own, when the difference is purely subjective preference.
That's the cardinal sin in editing. Yet it's such a fine line. Does a line need to be condensed? Why? We should always ask "why." If the only answer is "because I'd condense it if I were writing it," that isn't good enough. Sometimes just letting an author know how the sentence/passage may effect a reader is more helpful than insisting on condensing it. The author may be able to address the issue without condensing.
And I should not tell you what I'm readings...as it's mindless, happy trash but its what I want to read right now..and I enjoy it. I"m reading SHelly Laurenston who I find incredibly funny, sweet, sexy and just a good time. But are they great pieces of literature? Ugh, not really. I love her romance series...but not her new crow series.
I have been playing with the idea of buying '"The Martian' though.
I read for the historical archive, if that makes any sense. Old books have been read by MANY people, including my own relatives, so I like to read them to read what history has read. It feels like hearing history speak. But I am utterly happy reading letters, journals, biographies, telegrams etc. For me, it's the archival voice. That's just what personally makes me happy. I read it for the same reason you read Shelley Laurenston.
When I really want to relax, I read a Margaret Mitchell biography. Yes, I am obsessed. I've been told. By my brother.
Most of those titles listed above were for a lit class. (Not the Plath. I read that for myself.) If I could be reading anything right now? I'd be reading...
I had to think. In just this moment, I'd pick up Anne of Green Gables for a reread. I find children's classics incredibly cozy.
(I've been waiting on The Martian for weeks at the library. I'm currently #10.) x
First paragraph is totally over-egged. "slip away down cobbled Parisian byways" made me laugh. There's a lot to criticise but if I just pick on this one passage (pun). The author means a cobbled ruelle, a byway in France is an interstate freeway in the USA and that's the image here.
That's a mistake I would probably make! Had no idea!
One of the issues for me with Sci-Fri is that nobody has been there and nobody has lived it. If you read a war scene from someone who has experienced armed conflict, you'll feel a certain authenticity. Same as writing about riding a horse, an experienced horseman/woman will always give you bit extra. A car driver etc. This piece feels to me like somebody describing a fantasy concept rather than relating actual experience. Nothing here feels real and because it is off, I can't buy into it.
Yes! This: the distance, the lack of integrity! That's what I was trying to say about Maddy Clare in the other thread: I simply didn't believe it. I don't mean "integrity" as if I doubt the author's word; I mean the story has to have integrity, or it isn't real.
I think you're spot-on. And I agree: it isn't that it can't be done. I think part of it is that there must be specific detail, especially to start a story. Certainly not as a rule: an author may want to pass over detail to a purpose. I don't think "Floating and still flimsy, embedded yet unfettered" is purposeful vagueness.
Ever picked up a novel and couldn't see it through?
Oh, you said "novel." Clarissa by Samuel Richardson. It's 1,500 pages long using very small print. I read the first 500 pages & then nearly passed out when I dropped the book on my face. It's a brick! I do love the story & will probably spend another year reading the next 500 pages, then set it aside & finish later. I tell you what, that novel made me piping mad! On Clarissa's behalf. The only other time I've gotten so mad I threw the book was when I read Rhett Butler's People. A book I detest. I was actually vocally disgusted with the doings in Clarissa. Not the book -- but the characters. They are AWFUL. (Do I talk about classics too much? That's mostly what I read.)
I read The Haunting of Maddy Clare a couple months ago, because a friend recommended it. I didn't particularly like it, but that might be my taste, not the book. A lot of people like it, but I found the writing pretty flat. I finished it because I was curious if it would ever live up to my friend's recommendation, but I could easily have stopped reading it after the first twenty pages.
It just didn't make me think or thrill me or make me forget I was reading. I forgot I was reading with Clarissa because the characters seem REAL and HORRIBLE. In this book, I never forgot I was reading, & I could see the writer throughout all of it, perhaps because I'm hyper-aware of the writer by nature, and it takes a lot to turn off my editor side. I just never forgot she was writing, and I never believed anything that was happening in the story. There were a couple scenes so silly I laughed aloud, but I can't recall what they were. They were supposed to be serious and earnest, but they played out like stick figures going through the motions.
The love story was just really unbelievable. Oh, hello fire hydrant. Why, you have such swelling muscles and touseled hair. I believe -- why yes! I am female, and you are a fire hydrant! Therefore, I am in love.
No.
I read The Last Summer by Judith Kinghorn recently. That one was really good, I thought. It was a slow start, but it built up well. FAR more believable. The characters seems more sincerely motivated.
(Sorry for the vague remarks! I don't have the books with me to supply details & am going off a shady memory a few months old.)
The Faerie Queene!! I was all pumped: I am going to MAKE THIS HAPPEN.
But it's like this:
“What though the sea with waves continuall
Doe eate the earth, it is no more at all;
Ne is the earth the lesse, or loseth ought:
For whatsoever from one place doth fall
Is with the tyde unto another brought:
For there is nothing lost, that may be found if sought."
That's actually kind of pretty, but I feel that there are more pleasant things to read...
Do people just say they love it, to conform? Do they feel that they were expected to like it and so, do?
Probably. I think a lot of people really, really like his work though. His treatment of the female story is supposed to be revolutionary for its day. I haven't read Tess (or anything by Hardy beyond a few poems), but I have a good friend who absolutely loves his work. I think she's read everything by him. She's not the type to say she loves an author if she doesn't. She is strongly moved by his work & has often encouraged me to read him.
(I don't know why his treatment of women is supposed to be revolutionary because I've tried to avoid spoilers. I believe he writes with enormous sympathy for Tess, and that's why that book in particular is so loved.)
Trifles is done both as a story and a play. The Yellow Wallpaper is one of my favorites. Is she mad or is he trying to drive her mad. Is John her husband or her doctor. Fun.
Then you have all the history--of people being told when they had issues to remain calm and rest when now we know exercise helps depression.
Yes, "A Jury of Her Peers" is the story, I think? I got to read Mrs. Peters's lines in a readaloud. I think Glaspell played Mrs. Hale in the original.
"The Yellow Wallpaper" made me think about Bertha Mason in Jane Eyre. Which came first? The "madwoman" or Rochester's lock? :-)
This group never notifies me when you post things....so unless I look I never know there are discussions in any group.
So if i miss anything, I'm sorry.
Are you not seeing the "subscribe" link at the top right of the screen? You should be able to see it within each individual thread, or in the forum as a whole by going to the full list of posts. I think that way you get a note for new threads. It works on my end (if knowing that is useful.)
Just saying hello. I just reread "Trifles" and "The Yellow Wallpaper" for a class. I remember you recommending them a few years ago. EXCELLENT. x
Passages that pull you up. Not through bad writing but lines which introduce a concept or notion that cause you to pause, to evaluate, ponder or think through before you continue reading.
Love this! (Sorry for my brevity today. I wanted to slip in and mention Hemingway in the other thread, but I have to write a paper. Hope all is good!!) x