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Congrats, Marilyn!

Congrats, Sheriff.

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lol

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Does your detective have to notify the next of kin of their beloved's death? Did you know there are no standards for how death notification is done?
You could develop this into a very dramatic scene.
https://www.officer.com/home/article/10 … e-bad-news
Army death notification--https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Death_notification
And one more--https://coronertalk.com/ct14

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Found this article a while back. It was directed at those creating scary games, but it works for writers of scary stories,as well.
https://www.gamasutra.com/view/news/126 … y_Game.php

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Writers Workshop: Four elements every mystery needs   http://liamodonnell.com/feedingchange/2 … ery-needs/

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njc wrote:

If pre-law is 'define ____', does law school begin 're-define _____'?

I don't know--I didn't go. I got tired of being in school. It was the sixties, after all.  JP

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These are different things, all useful in their proper place.

Blurb--A blurb is a short promotional piece accompanying a creative work. It may be written by the author or publisher or quote praise from others.  Blurbs were originally printed on the back or rear dust-jacket of a book, and are now found on DVD and video cases, web portals, and news websites.(Wikipedia)
Not a technical term, this is what you write to pique a potential reader's interest in your book.

Summary--Abridgement, the act of reducing a written work, typically a book, into a shorter form  (Of the several types listed by Wikipedia, I felt this was the most applicable)
A three-page summary is what an agent/editor may request. (Some of you may have had a different experience.) This includes the entire plot and ending. Too long to be a blurb, it would be a spoiler if it were to be presented to potential readers.

Synopsis--A book synopsis is simply a very short description of the main theme of a nonfiction work. The synopsis deals with the novel’s central characters, their conflicts and their relationships. However, it does not get into any subplots unless they directly affect the central plot.
The book synopsis is typically used by editors to determine if they want to work with a new (or seasoned) author. Though editors (and agents) will probably read a sample chapter or two of a novel first, they’ll then want to skim the synopsis to get a feel for the whole work. (Explore Writing)
http://www.explorewriting.co.uk/what-sy … e-one.html
Again, TMI for a blurb.

Review--A book review is a form of literary criticism in which a book is analyzed based on content, style, and merit. A book review may be a primary source, opinion piece, summary review or scholarly review. (Wikipedia)
This is what someone else writes about your book. It might claim that your book will be a bestseller, or it may not. Ii's entirely up to the reviewer.

Sorry--I can't help it. I went to a school for pre-law where every discussion began with "define_____." Hope it helps.  JP

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Congratulations, Cobber! I just picked it up at Amazon. JP
https://www.amazon.com/State-Vengeance- … +vengeance

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It took me fifteen years to discover I had no talent for writing, but I couldn’t give it up because by that time I was too famous.
– Robert Benchley

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Here are three of my most recent, still on tnbw.

The girl was dead.     from Bete Noire

I finish washing my dishes -- a plate, a fork and a Tupperware container.    from Smokey

I never even noticed her.     from At the Movies.

Yes the first line is important, as are the first paragraph, the first page and the first chapter. I have read different articles that claim if a writer hasn't introduced everything important by one of these (depending on who wrote the article), the agent, editor, or whoever wields the power of life and death over a story tosses the manuscript. I've also read that said person may be having a bad day, so the story gets junked.

I think you have to be concerned about all of it. There's not one that's more important than any other. Every single word, sentence, paragraph, page, chapter, and idea should be the very best you can do. There's no skating here.  JP

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A long time ago. when I first started the Cop Shop, I vacillated between the two designations. I went from 'points' to 'no points'and back again. Sol made the changes for me, because after the initial setup I didn't have access. I don't know if that's still how things work. The group's founder or a moderator would probably have to request the change.

However, if you publish to the Premium group along with the Historical group, your work will award points to reviewers, so it's not an issue. Go through your portfolio to edit and change the 'Publish Settings' to include the Premium group. It's a good temporary fix, unless you don't want everyone else to read what you've written.

Hope this helps.   JP

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Now I understand! I don't  know where one goes to learn these rules,but thank God we have Dill to help us along!

As long as you can promise the reader he/she won't get whiplash from zipping back and forth between POV's, by all means, use whatever technique you think works best for your story. In the case of my story, I just didn't see an advantage. Come to think of it, in the case of supernaturals vs. humans, multiple POV's might work better.

Can't wait to read your story, Norm.  JP

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C'mon, Norm --

Are you kidding me? The classics are written from the POV of just one, whether it's a character in the story or the omniscient narrator. The multi-POV claptrap is a recent pretension, ostensibly used to impart the attitudes and emotions of more than one character. This is something the great writers did using only one POV. Of course it can be done.

Yes, I employed the multiple-POV artifice in one of my stories as an experiment. I didn't find it any more effective than anything else I've tried, just for the heck of it.

Now, what is your real motivation for starting this discussion?

JP

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Happy birthday, Jack! Congratulations on a life well-lived. And on your continued writing success. I look forward to seeing your stories at the movies.  JP

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Sherry V. Ostroff wrote:

My friend, who served in Vietnam, just wrote a memoir called "Thing I'll Never Forget." His name is Jim Dixon. If you have a kindle, (and the author produced an ebook) you could download a sample and see if it works for you. It starts with his decision to join the army, boot camp, all the way to his last day in Vietnam, and after.

Sherry

Thanks, Sherry. I'll check it out.  JP

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Hello, CV.
Not too late at all. Right now I'm trying to clear my desk of unfinished projects, so I'm just doing the reading for now. Thanks for the referral.  JP

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lolololol  jp

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Did I put Denzel somewhere on the list? I considered him, then forgot to put him on. My favorite of his would be Devil In a Blue Dress. Nothing wrong with a little laughter.

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Hello, Janet! My favorites were so different from yours! I like my crime with a side of laughter, though not all of these have funny moments.
1. Clint Eastwood -- True Crime
2. James Gandolfini -- 8MM
3. Samuel L Jackson -- Pulp Fiction
4. Brad Pitt -- The Devil's Own
5. John Travolta -- Get Shorty
6. Chazz Palminteri -- Analyze This
7.  Steve Buscemi -- Fargo
8, Harvey Keitel -- Reservoir Dogs
9. Willem Dafoe -- White Sands
10. Edward Norton -- Primal Fear
11. George Clooney -- Ocean's Eleven
Extra Credit: Marlon Brando -- On the Waterfront
Luckily, nobody's wrong--we just all have different tastes. Anyone else?

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This one is more like a survey, so you don’t have to be ready with any facts. All you have to do is name your favorite crime movie starring the following actors. (You might notice many of them played the bad guy.) You feel lucky? Make my day.

1.    Clint Eastwood
2.    James Gandolfini
3.    Samuel L. Jackson
4.    Brad Pitt
5.    John Travolta
6.    Chazz Palminteri
7.    Steve Buscemi
8.    Harvey Keitel
9.    Willem Dafoe
10.    Edward Norton
11.    George Clooney
Extra Credit: Marlon Brando

And I still didn't get them all!

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I think you will find most successful authors claim the conflict and the stakes are the heart of a story.

That being said, there is no one who says that word choice is unimportant. I choose my words very carefully, so that my stories read naturally. I hate it when it's obvious the author didn't take the time to choose the best words for the job.

Which means an "artist" who is obsessed with selecting the most erudite-sounding word on the palette is wasting the reader's time. In some cases, the reader won't know the word, and will be driven to the dictionary. In many, many others, the writer has chosen an ill-fitting word (or, God forbid, a homonym), so that his prose looks like donation day at the Good Will. I used to tell my students, "If you don't know that word well enough to use it in fifty different sentences, don't use it in your writing."

In other words, fancy word choice does not equal a good story. Just read Mark Twain.

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Janet Taylor-Perry wrote:
vern wrote:

Okay, I'm going to get a little nit-picking here as far as the subject of moving the story forward is concerned -- any good thread always seems to veer from the path somewhat. That being said, if we're going to move forward, it just as well be logical. My concern is the use of "he paused" as a speaker tag as presented above. I bring this up only because it has been used in more than one post. It seems to me rather impossible to speak a pause. You can certainly have a pause after speaking, but you can't speak that pause; therefore it is not an effective speaker tag imho. Thus a period rather than a comma would seem more appropriate in the sentence "'I have terrible news,' he paused." ("... news." He paused.) Just a thought. Take care. Vern

My thoughts exactly. I cringed when I read it.

I wasn't going to say anything, since that wasn't germane to the discussion, but you're both right.

And getting the reader involved in the story isn't a question of the mechanics (grammar, word choice, POV, etc.) of writing. It IS the art of storytelling--the stakes, the unanswered questions, the goals, and all of those unmeasurable qualities that make a reader want to know how it all turns out in the end, another reason why cliffhangers are so disappointing.

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max keanu wrote:

I am still alive. Back very soon with the past behind me, but with lots of stories about that past.

I wish you would write your memoir! I'd love to read it.  JP

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Having gone through dry spells myself, I have to say it's the nature of the writing beast. Add to that the fact that we'e all balancing the demands of career (congrats to those whose writing has taken off!!) and family plus other obligations and illness, and you can see why people seem to drop off. It's not that they're not interested anymore--things just have a way of catching up with you.
Naturally, when we come to tnbw all dewy-eyed and brimming with excitement at the possibility of becoming a real author, we dive in heartfirst, writing and reviewing like crazy. It's just that life has a way of getting in the way, and as time goes on, we don't participate as often as we'd like. I think the oldies are still out there, for the most part.