Didn't new members used to get a small amount of free points when they joined? What happened to that? It would help newbies to jump in with both feet. As I recall, the thing I disliked about other sites I tried was that you had to 'earn' the right to post your stories. It seemed like way too much hoop-jumping to me. In comparison, tnbw was extremely user-friendly. I liked it from the start.

Maybe Sol never existed.

After all, the name Sol is most often applied to our star, the one we call the sun, giver of life to plants and thus to all things and subject of worship among many peoples. Perhaps some genial, unsuspecting person allowed his picture to be taken for a use that was never disclosed to him. For all we know, those instigators of said photography created a site for gullible would-be writers, luring them in by calling them 'the next big writers' and declaring the existence of writing 'contests.' Posting a picture on the masthead of such a site, they gathered in all their victims' personal information, including financial and location. They encouraged 'members' to write a profile, disclosing more about themselves, their hopes and dreams.

And now that these masterminds have motivated us all to come together for discussion, and we're recruiting friends and family members to join our cause, the real agenda is set to emerge.

Will we be the subject of some malevolent experiment? Is the fictional 'Sol' our Dr. Moreau? On waking one morning, will we find ourselves with extra limbs or a lot more hair than we had before? Is it conceivable that we will have lost the powers of language? Consider yourself in the future, your thoughts unexpressed, with ungainly digits that refuse to keyboard, and a tongue without the power of speech!

Or could it be worse? Let your imagination run wild, for in no other way will we be prepared to combat the machinations of the devastation that is Sol.

Yes, my friends--we have walked, willingly and with eyes wide open, into a trap the likes of which have not been seen for almost a century. Let this be a warning to you. Do not trust Sol, or anyone, to solve your problems and provide for your needs. If you want a contest, get off your you-know-what and make it so!

Are people no longer going to see The Nutcracker at Christmastime? Thank God! That was the dumbest story I ever had to sit through. Sorry, all you ballerinas.

Memphis Trace wrote:
j p lundstrom wrote:

All those in favor of a contest initiated by the members, say 'aye.'

How about a contest sponsored by the members?

Memphis Trace

However you want to run it is fine by me. I fear Vern is the lone volunteer.

If we don't want to sink to the level of a popularity contest, I have the scoring rubric, a thoughtful, intelligent instrument designed by Janet Taylor-Perry, we used in the Cop Shop contest a couple of years ago. It's easy to use and score, also.

But don't forget, popularity is what makes a best-seller. The number of reads and reviews can be equated to the number of sales in the real world. Oh, for a return to the five-star system! (Just kidding--I didn't like the Lazy Rater any more than anyone else did.)

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Thanks, Ann! Very kind of you. Another incentive for me to finish something!  JP

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I never noticed Alabama was missing. JP

All those in favor of a contest initiated by the members, say 'aye.'

In case there's anyone left who didn't know the words to 'The Twelve Days of Christmas:'
1.    A partridge in a pear tree
2.    Two turtle doves
3.    Three French hens
4.    Four colly birds (‘colly’= black, or coal-colored)
5.    Five gold rings
6.    Six geese a-laying
7.    Seven swans a-swimming
8.    Eight maids a-milking
9.    Nine ladies dancing
10.    Ten lords a-leaping
11.    Eleven pipers piping
12.    Twelve drummers drumming
Next year: 'Good King Wensceslaus.'

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Sherry V. Ostroff wrote:

All,

...someone above made the case that too many "was" is boring for the reader. That's not true. "Was" is an invisible word. Just like "said" is an invisible word. That's why writers are prompted to use "said" as a dialogue tag rather than other tags because the reader doesn't see it.

But

If said and was were invisible, nobody would care how many of each were inserted into a writer's work. But since there are so many opinions and practices about both of those, we can hardly call either word invisible.

When I said that a reader tires of reading something that is filled with repetition of a word, I also mentioned the words 'not consciously.' It's something the human animal does.

We do a lot of things without being aware that we're doing them. Hold our breath during the national anthem? Eyeball an attractive member of the opposite sex? Read these rants in the forum? Feel compelled to respond? There's no accounting for the things we do.
JP

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Memphis Trace wrote:

To be or not to be: that is the question...
Memphis Trace

be--2
is--1
3/12= 25%

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First off, let me say this: if there weren't a need for the word, it wouldn't exist. And seeing that it does exist, it's perfectly natural to use any form of the verb be: am, is, are, was, were and any contractions thereof.

I guess the thing that bothers some people is the repeated use of the same verb over and over, when there are other perfectly good words, and often more precise, that a writer could use. In your passage above of 181 words,you used Was-6 times, I’m (a contraction of I am) twice, and Is—8 times for a total of 16. (16/181 = almost 9%)  So, 9% of your writing is the same word.

Think of it: if 9% of your writing were a word like spaghetti, or conundrum, or supercalifragilisticexpialidocious, people would say "Can't this guy think of another word to use?" Readers might not consciously notice the overuse of the forms of be, but after a while they will begin to tire of it. They will see reading your work as a chore, sort of like trying to read a semester's worth of history the night before the final. You tire, start thinking distracting thoughts, and eventually put the book down without having internalized the material. In other words, you get bored.

Do you really want to bore your readers into putting down your hard work without getting anything out of it? And maybe they never come back to read anything else you've written because they remember how tiring your words are.

Or is it worth the time to find some other words to express your thoughts? Maybe not because there's a 'rule' about it, but because you want to write stuff that will interest readers, make them think, and bring them back for more.

Yes, it's natural to use forms of be in writing, but sparingly.

JP

Nice work, Jack! Number four and number 12 are different from mine, but I think they'll do. Your answer to number 5 doesn't fit the clue, though. JP

Happy Holidays, crime writers! Well, it’s taken me three years, but I finally finished the Christmas quiz. Not that I was working on it all this time—I’m just a procrastinator.
Maybe you can answer the questions faster than I wrote them. Use the words in the Christmas Carol to help you.
1.    First Day—An inept television show host exploits a hostage situation
2.    Second Day—Divorcee and her daughter are caught up in a life-threatening situation.
3.    Third Day—The bad guys get caught by a lawman in a chicken costume.
4.    Fourth Day—About to be released after fifty years in prison, a con releases his pet bird.
5.    Fifth Day—Not rings, but specially-minted gold bars cause a falling-out among thieves
6.    Sixth Day—The sound of geese play a critical part in the solution.
7.    Seventh Day—A dancer is accused of hitting her rival with a car.
8.    Eighth Day—A woman is convinced her husband plans to kill her with a glass of poisoned milk.
9.    Ninth Day—1920s dancers wind up in jail for murder
10.    Tenth Day—Who murdered Sir William?
11.    Eleventh Day—Australian military officer executed for revenge murders
12.    Twelfth Day—Knifing, shooting and general bedlam arise around an oblivious drummer.

ANSWERS
1.    Alan Partridge—Steve Coogan
2.    Betrayal of  the Dove (1992)—Helen Slater, Billy Zane
3.    U S Marshalls—Tommy Lee Jones, Robert Downey, Jr.
4.    The Shawshank Redemption—Tim Robbins, Morgan Freeman
5.    The Italian Job—Mark Wahlberg, Charlize Theron
6.    Arabesque – Gregory Peck
7.    Black Swan—Natalie Portman
8.    Suspicion—Cary Grant, Joan Fontaine
9.    Chicago – Catherine Zeta-Jones, Renee Zellweger
10.    Gosford Park—Helen Mirren, Clive Owen
11.    Breaker Morant—Brian Brown
12.    The Mambo Kings—Armand Assante

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Thanks for playing, Janet and Jack!

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Janet Taylor-Perry wrote:

Is #4 Mr. & Mrs. Smith? Brad & Angelina???

Nope--and it's not Undercover Blues with Dennis Quaid and Kathleen Turner, either.

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jack the knife wrote:

Extra credit:   Treasure of the Sierra Madre  Humphrey Bogart

You got it!

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Here's where we stand:
#1--Correct
#2--All relevant answers are correct.
#3--Correct
#4--
#5--
#6--Correct
#7--
#8--Correct
$9--Correct
#10--
Extra Credit Classic--

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Hi, Janet! Thanks for playing! You answered #1 and #8 correctly. Of course the clues are confusing--it wouldn't be any fun, otherwise. Don't give up! We have a whole week.

Wait a minute! I said you could name any film that fit the description for #2, so you get that one, also!  JP

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We know the bad guy’s plan is supposed to get foiled, right? But sometimes the crook’s failure strikes a sympathetic chord in the moviegoer’s chest. Some of my favorite movies are on this list. Name the movie and the starring actors.
NOTE: These did not all start out as crime novels, but what the heck—they still had to be written, didn’t they?

1.    Mob enforcer sent on a job in California gets bitten by the movie bug.
2.    A veteran mobster is sent to eliminate an inept newbie, but winds up his mentor, instead.*
3.    So these two escaped cons walk into a monastery…
4.    She took the hit on him, and he’s supposed to whack her.
5.    A bumbling police inspector works to foil the efforts of a notorious jewel thief, not realizing his wife is the thief’s accomplice.
6.    Stressed-out Mafia don needs a psychiatrist
7.    Put-upon brother can’t deal with his sibling’s temptress girlfriend and her other lovers.
8.    The best con man on the continent and his American copycat are flimflammed by their female counterpart.
9.    Incompetent goons demand ransom from the wrong guy—and then they ruin his rug.
10.    Timid kidnappers’ plan to ransom a wealthy man’s wife is foiled when she starts ordering them around.
★    Extra Credit Classic: Trip to Mexico in search of riches is a bust.
*This could describe a lot of films, so name your poison.

ANSWERS
1.    Get Shorty (1995)—John Travolta, Rene Russo, Danny DeVito--based on Elmore Leonard’s novel
2.    In Bruges (2008)—Colin Farrell, Brendan Gleeson
3.    We’re No Angels (1989)—Robert De Niro, Sean Penn
4.    Prizzi’s Honor (1985)—Jack Nicholson, Kathleen Turner, Anjelica Huston
5.    The Pink Panther (1963)—David Niven, Peter Sellers, Robert Wagner
6.    Analyze This (1999)—Robert De Niro, Billy Crystal
7.    A Fish Called Wanda (1988)—Jamie Lee Curtis, John Cleese, Kevin Kline, Michael Palin
8.    Dirty Rotten Scoundrels (1988)—Michael Caine, Steve Martin, Glenne Headly
9.    The Big Lebowski (1998)—Jeff Bridges, John Goodman
10.    Ruthless People (1986)—Danny DeVito, Bette Midler, Judge Reinhold, Helen Slater
11.    Extra Credit Classic: The Treasure of the Sierra Madre (1948)—Humphrey Bogart, Walter Huston—based on B. Traven’s novel

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Not our best showing, but hey! We were all busy last week, and traveling this week. Maybe we'll do better on the next quiz. Hope you'll give it a shot. JP

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Your presence will be missed. Let's hope your return is speedy.  JP

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Blessings and good wishes to you.  JP

I buy books in batches, when I've finished reading the last book in my current batch, or when those I have left are serious or look too daunting and all I want is to be entertained. It's 9:00 pm and I just finished placing my order for this evening's and tomorrow's reading.

I'm retired, so when I'm not gardening, quilting, baking, canning, or writing, I read. I typically finish 1-3 books a day. I enjoyed the recent discussion about pricing your books and/or enlisting with Kindle Unlimited--I appreciate both cheap and free books. Before Kindle, I was a lifelong fan of the public library.

When ebooks were almost unheard of, Steven King published his book for free. And I would never have met Harry Bosch or Jack Reacher if I hadn't found great deals. Those free or cheap books are meant to get the reader hooked on an author. After all, you can't expect a reader to shell out 29.99 or even 10.99 for an author they never heard of.

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jack the knife wrote:

"I want to spend Christmas in Elmira with my family." That's a direct quote from It's a wonderful Life. I can't get any closer than that! At first I thought of Trains, Planes, and Automobiles, but that was for Thanksgiving, not Christmas. I give up.

lol mine is closer!
But not to be mean--I'll accept it. Here's a hint for mine: think Nakatomi Tower (Plaza?).

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Jack--Jackie Brown is right. I can't believe I forgot what she was smuggling. It's been a while since I last watched it. It used to be a family favorite. I think my son had a crush on Pam Grier. What's not to love about a bad girl who outsmarts the system?
As for #10, that's still not it. The clue is almost a direct quote!
This is fun...