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How are you, Dags? Where is everybody? Nothing to fight about? It's been a long time since we saw a really good conflict.
Let me see if I can think of something. I seem to be pretty good at inciting bad will, only occasionally deliberately.  JP

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Hmm.. It's been so long, I guess I got my wires crossed. See what happens when you get old? Well, there's no way to figure out who it was--we were still at the old site.
My apologies for any awkwardness. JP

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Thanks, Randy--What a thoughtful idea, to let us know what's coming up. I wonder if we could implement a site bulletin board, to let people know when a work is finished, and how much longer it will be around.  JP

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Norm d'Plume wrote:

I spent six years working on a book that I will now probably never publish. Does that count?

Many years ago,when I was a newbie chomping at the bit to get something published, you advised me to slow down. You said you liked to wait a year before you edited your work. I'd say you're right on schedule. Persevere.  JP

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Yes, I have thrown away stuff I thought was great, then it fizzled and I decided I'd never finish, so I deleted it. Then a few months later, I wanted to go back and it wasn't there. It's sort of like when I was a kid and somebody shot my dog. It can never be replaced.

I try not to save everything, but still, I feel like every idea is brilliant, and it makes me a hoarder. I just went back last weekend and threw out a bunch of story starts, because I could no longer remember what I wanted to do with them, and my computer was beginning to go as slow as I did before I got my hip replaced. We both move a lot faster now.

Even Steven King said he still wants to go back and fix his stories. It's a universal trait among writers. But you can't keep throwing stuff out and doing it over. Save it when you think it's good, and throw it out when it no longer works for you.

You did fine.  JP

Hmm...must not be happening too soon. I just logged in, and everything seems normal. They're still advertising. JP

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letempsviendra wrote:

Hello everyone! I hope to improve my writing and make new friends here!

Love your story! Welcome to the site.  JP

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I have used writing prompts as story starts, as well. My story 'Deadline' is one. Though I've just as often come up blank when a prompt is given, they are a good kind of exercise for those who want to discipline themselves.  JP

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Dill Carver wrote:
Dill Carver wrote:
j p lundstrom wrote:

I'm sorry, Dill, but we heard you the first, second and third times.

Well, I felt that I hadn’t previously made the point (and nor had anyone else) that the shred principle actually works both ways. The emphasis of discussion was more upon those who are reviewed and not those who review.  I feel that the shred principle provides an unambiguous environment in terms of both reviewers and authors knowing where they stand. Expectations are managed and understood.

I’m sorry, p lundstrom, that you’ve once again assumed the prerogative to make it personal (you talk of bones to pick and clearly you have one with me). For my part, I’m not sure about your use of the royal ‘we’. You tend to insinuate that you are speaking on behalf of a body of people? Are you the self appointed spokesperson for the rest of the site, a specific clique, group or the rest of humanity?

In the meantime your incessant authoritative and reiterated posts are to be accepted and enjoyed by the ‘we’ (your) ‘all.’ 

j p lundstrom wrote:

So you have a bone to pick with some dogmatic reviewers who won't accept suggestions when their work is reviewed. Easy solution--don't play with them anymore! Block them. You're not a new member--you should know what to do. .

You say “dogmatic,” I say deluded and self-opinionated. Obviously you misunderstood me? Either that, or you intended to put words into my mouth because I have absolutely no problem whatsoever with “reviewers who won't accept suggestions when their work is reviewed.” It is my adamant belief that nobody has any obligation to accept or entertain any suggestions put to them in within a review. Take it or leave it – no worries either way; has always been my mantra when it comes to reviewing.

My problem (and the point I was making) is with those (few) reviewers who readily dispense authoritative editorial wisdom in the haughty manner of dictatorial review (even though in some cases their own product is not all that good); and who explode or implode with indignation if they receive a review upon their own work that is constructed in the self-same manner as the reviews they distribute.

These people exist, a very small minority and not by any means exclusive to tNBW, but universally. I cannot be the only person to have come across this?

Anyway, my only point was that the ‘shred’ principle might elevate this practice.

j p lundstrom wrote:

As for your experiment to evaluate others' reviewing behaviors--how insulting that you should believe yourself so superior to the rest of us you may approve or disapprove each of us. Who do you think you are?

This vitriolic outburst is truly a WTF? moment and pushes your post over the episodial edge.

Again the royal ‘we’ as if you speak for the entire site, outraged upon their behalf?

All that I said, or intended to say, was that occasionally a reviewer, if reciprocated with a review in-kind, might not accept and be upset by receiving the self-same approach to a review upon their own work that they might inflict upon others. Again this is a small specific percentage of reviewers and their psyche and behaviour is self-evident and I’m surely not the only person to have experienced it?

I am genuinely mystified as to why you are outraged against me on behalf of the rest of the reviewers in the world? I have no problem with any reviewer within this thread nor 98% of reviewers that I’ve ever come across. My only beef is with that small minority who can dish it out but cannot take it. Why do you act as if my displeasure in respect of this small dysfunctional group of reviewers relates to a supposed judgment across the entire reviewer community? 

You ask ‘who do I think I am?’  Well, the truth is that I don’t’ know; I’ve never really thought about it but I can assure you that any insecurities that I might display stem from an inferiority complex rather than a superiority complex. You are probably immune to irony, but your judgment of me (not from a personal POV, but that of spokesperson on behalf of the rest of the community), for being judgemental is the epitome of irony.

j p lundstrom wrote:

I used to admire your linguistic skills. Too bad skills don't make the man. JP

You know nothing of me, ‘the man’

Just as I don’t have clue who the hell you are or what your agenda is. Your assassination of my character means nothing.

I stand my ground in a world of liars, cheats, thieves, rapists, murders, rapists, sexists, racists, paedophiles, sycophants, bullies, terrorists, extortionists, philanders, narcissists, sexual predators, animal abusers, abusive parents, abusive spouses, adulterers, political militants, religious nutters, sociopaths et al, and I can hold my head high, for I will have none of it. I would readily stand between anyone on this planet and those people. I have been true and proved myself in terms of loyalty, trust and honesty over and again to those who actually know me.  There have been times within extreme situations where my courage has failed and I could have (should have) done more; so I am not proud of myself, In fact, most of the time I am ashamed.       

I mention it not for sympathy nor any motive other than that people here might begin to understand or at least consider it a factor when evaluating my words on this site; I am military veteran with over a decade of mostly active service behind me and I have long been diagnosed with PTSD.

I swing from glass completely empty to glass overflowing. Some days I spend in remorse, failing to comprehend why I am not dead and other days are spent euphorically celebrating life. Some days I read something I wrote and neither recongonise nor recollect it. But no excuses, I speak my mind and the truth as I see it. I may be wrong and not know it.

I made the mistake of revealing on this site that I find the individual nature of Hillary Clinton abhorrent and that I consider atheism the only true religion and my trend toward libertarian principles in terms of politics. The death of me on this site it would seem, those revelations apparently offending all and sundry, or at least the mass of all of those represented within the p lundstrom ‘we’. All I know is that if I so much as speak in the forums now, it draws a disparaging comment from the indignant ‘we’

So here I am, sat with the black dog and he is panting hard and I can tell you p lundstrom, without the use of admirable linguistics, that your petulant misappropriation of my words and your personal attack upon me is actually revealing more about you than it is about me.

"You are old, Father William," the young man said,
"And your hair has become very white;
And yet you incessantly stand on your head—
Do you think, at your age, it is right?"

"In my youth," Father William replied to his son,
"I feared it might injure the brain;
But now that I'm perfectly sure I have none,
Why, I do it again and again."

"You are old," said the youth, "As I mentioned before,
And have grown most uncommonly fat;
Yet you turned a back-somersault in at the door—
Pray, what is the reason of that?"

"In my youth," said the sage, as he shook his grey locks,
"I kept all my limbs very supple
By the use of this ointment—one shilling a box—
Allow me to sell you a couple?"

"You are old," said the youth, "And your jaws are too weak
For anything tougher than suet;
Yet you finished the goose, with the bones and the beak—
Pray, how did you manage to do it?"

"In my youth," said his father, "I took to the law,
And argued each case with my wife;
And the muscular strength which it gave to my jaw,
Has lasted the rest of my life."

"You are old," said the youth, "one would hardly suppose
That your eye was as steady as ever;
Yet you balanced an eel on the end of your nose—
What made you so awfully clever?"

"I have answered three questions, and that is enough,"
Said his father; "don't give yourself airs!
Do you think I can listen all day to such stuff?
Be off, or I'll kick you down stairs!"

I didn't write it, but it expresses my sentiments.

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vern wrote:

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In any case the Shred Group would be no different for those who don't join than any other group on site which you don't join. Just as you have joined many groups beyond Premium because you evidently feel they will offer something different, so too it would be with the Shred Group for those who join.

If there wasn't some minimal support for such a group as the Shred, it wouldn't have been established. The same could be said for all the groups you have joined. The real difference being that as far as I know, there is no one opposing all those other groups despite the fact that most are seldom used and offer nothing to benefit or entice most members.

In short, why would you "protest" an already established group you don't have to join or even acknowledge its existence? Put the shoe on the other foot for the groups you belong to. Just my opinion. Take care. Vern

You are correct. It isn't my right, nor my responsibility to know about the workings of a group which doesn't affect me. Unless I'm being encouraged to join, in which case I want to look before I leap.

But I hope group members are not restricted to reviewing only each other. They can still review the works of people outside the Shred group, won't they? What a tragic, limited experience they'll have at tnbw if they're not allowed to go outside the group. And what if they're members of multiple groups? Will they be excluded from reviewing the work of people in their other groups because they might be sensitive?

I accept the group for what it is--another one of many. I don't need to know anything more. Go in peace. Live long, and prosper.  JP

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Dill Carver wrote:

I believe that it also provides a safe environment for reviewers. There are some members who are authoritative and forthright within the reviews they dispense (fair enough), but who for some reason will not accept the self-same degree of attention towards their own writing, however legitimate and technically substantiated that critique might be. 

Strange but true. I have consciously experimented in the past. I have reciprocated reviews in-kind. Measured the review to legitimately suggest the same degree of alteration and change within their own writing that they suggest within the work they reviewed; and yet the author(s) have felt insulted. Apparently within some people there is no assumption or acceptance that you should ever take back what you dish out or reap what you sow.     
Anyway, within the Shred it should be safe and sensible. Only those authors level-headed enough to happily receive the same style and degree of critique they dispense will utilise the group. 

My main optimism for the venture is that extended discussion upon word craft and writing analysis might break out within the Shred group forum.
Cheers!

I'm sorry, Dill, but we heard you the first, second and third times.

So you have a bone to pick with some dogmatic reviewers who won't accept suggestions when their work is reviewed. Easy solution--don't play with them anymore! Block them. You're not a new member--you should know what to do.

As for your experiment to evaluate others' reviewing behaviors--how insulting that you should believe yourself so superior to the rest of us you may approve or disapprove each of us. Who do you think you are?

I used to admire your linguistic skills. Too bad skills don't make the man. JP

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jack the knife wrote:

I've read all the posts on this subject so far and, sorry, Sol, but I don't see the need for this shred group. If an author can't take the heat of unfavorable critiques, they can leave. If reviewers are mean-spirited and vitriolic, they can be removed from the site. And we already have a Fight Club group for members who like to duke it out. As far as I know, the Premium Group does not require "niceties" and "encouragement" from reviewers, though most reviewers will try to find something positive in their critiques. They chose to review it after all when they could have passed on it. Finally, I wouldn't want the Premium Group to get the reputation of the place where reviews aren't "honest."

Hear, hear!

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It'll be interesting to see how the shred group develops. But I'm curious about a few things.

1) If the Shred group members insist they are doing nothing but offering the truth about grammar, spelling, etc., why are they separating? Isn't that what we signed up for?

2) If new members are to be offered nothing but 'kind,' non-confrontational reviews, aren't they being robbed of the critiques they signed up for?

and 3) Aren't those pandering, say-nothing-of-substance reviews what people spent a month complaining about last year, and still regularly disparage as ineffective? Who wants 'em?

Give me a shot of truth serum from the Sheriff or Keanu anytime. I want to know what needs fixing.  JP

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Ann Everett wrote:

I don't usually comment on the forums, but here goes. I see the Shred group as a transition group. Let Newbies get critique, edit their work, develop a thicker skin, then give the shred group a try. I think it might be a nice place for second/third drafts.

I don't know, Ann. People most often prefer to remain static. They don't voluntarily transition. Who would shepherd members through one group to another? At what point is someone ready for change? In theory, it sounds good, but it seems like it would require a lot of oversight, and who's willing to tell someone it's time to sign up to be shredded?  JP

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JeffM wrote:

Hello,

I'm pretty new to the site also, but I've benefitted quite a bit from the honest feedback. It seems to me a writer won't benefit as much from watered-down reviews.

Editors may be good people, but they're not nice.

Perhaps another approach is for the moderator to give warnings before removing someone from the Premium Group? I agree with Gray, that the quality of reviews may suffer as a result of such measures, especially in light of not having clear policies and procedures to this effect. To me, that represents a breach of contract, as a paying member: to be removed from a group without following the site's own policies.

From a policies and procedures perspective, I reviewed the FAQs and policies of the site. Now I truly may have missed the part about how a member may be removed from the Premium Group. Normally a site like this would have a policy that could be followed regarding member conduct. Where none exists, the question of equitable treatment comes into play.

Besides lacking policy, there's the question of promotion. The site promises to "guarantee...substantive feedback" for new members. It may be argued that those who provide honest feedback and thorough reviews help to fulfill that promise, not detract from it.

Just my 2-cents. Jeff

Good on ya, Jeff!

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graymartin wrote:

I hope this doesn't mean "flagged" reviewers will be banned from the Premium Group, because this will marginalize some of the most talented -- albeit brutally candid -- members. Criticizing a writer's fundamentals (grammar, punctuation, dialogue) is not abuse, and we all have the ability to block or ignore reviewers we consider offensive. Looking back at grade school and college, some of my most insightful, constructive teachers seemed like real jerks at the time.

The last thing we need is for the Premium Group to become a Wattpad clone in which reviews are the What good is that? equivalent of Facebook or Instagram "likes" used to garner reciprocal praise with no substance.

1) What's a "flagged" reviewer? Who are they? Who flags them? Why? Does this apply to me? See what a can of worms you opened?
2) I hate to harp on a subject, but didn't we have the equivalent of "likes" when the reviews used to be rated from one to five? The practice was being phased out when I joined, so I never appled the rating system--and a good thing, too, because I didn't know enough to use it. How does a newbie have enough experience to give ratings to reviews? Even if a new member comes from another site where work was reviewed, they still don't have the tnbw vibe. A new member could conceivably use the block and the review rating as a shelter from the truth. What good is to be gained from that?
3) OMG--Wattpad?
JP

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SolN wrote:

So that still leaves the problem of reviewers leaving hurtful remarks in the other groups.  That's the problem that needs to be addressed.

That problem has also been resolved. If a reviewer simply isn't able to provide considerate criticism then Premium isn't the right group for them and they are removed from it. Once that's done, they cannot review new members, unless new members elect to join the Shred Group.

Well done, Sol. Contrary to the belief of some, there are guidelines for reviewing.  JP

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Hi, Sharon--
Happy to have you with us. Love that you have a medical/technical background. Be prepared to answer questions! At the same time, feel free to post your own questions, opinions and requests for advice/ help.  JP

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Go. Janet! Amazing--you deserve it!
I just got both books!  JP

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Words

Why am I late this day? I am no slugabed, nor was I philogrobilized, but here’s the truth of it, without twattling.

A pleasant winter’s night of grufeling under a pile of warm blankets was interrupted foully last night as I envisaged living in a kakistocracy. Shamelessly, the top snollygoster came before the people to deny the accusations leveled against him, not the least of which was putting his unwelcome hands on whatever callypigian peg puff crossed his path. He harangued us with his self-deluded history of imagined good works and, just to be on the safe side, cast the blame on his associates. Alas! When I awoke, I found it was all true.

I have never been one of those grumbletonians, but the uhtceare of this realization hung over me like a fog. In shivviness, I stewed over the Lanspresado’s abligurition for some time. The man is a fudgel, incapable of controlling his cacoethes. He has always been a political groke, desirous only of prestige and power.

Do not think me an ultracrepidarian when I say he must go!

Suffering from extreme dysania, I decided to perendinate the day’s work and went back to bed. Living in this country has left me frobly-mobly.


They're still good words--very cathartic!  JP

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SolN wrote:

Anyone have any thought or suggestions?
Sol

Yes! Best Western (play on words there)--historical or modern
There are so many ways the Western can be treated, it offers something for everyone, and it's a genre we haven't dealt with before. Here's a sampling (from online sources):
Types of Westerns
•    Classical Western—crime, pursuit and retribution
•    Acid Western—bizarre characters and occurrences, use of maimed and dwarf performers, and heavy doses of Christian symbolism and Eastern philosophy.
•    Charro, or Chili Westerns—standard of Mexican cinema, horsemen in rural Mexican society, with cultural concerns very different from the Hollywood meta-narrative,
•    Comedy Western—imitative in style in order to mock, comment on, or trivialize the Western genre
•    Contemporary Western—contemporary American settings utilizing Old West themes and motifs
•    Electric Western—performing rock bands in an otherwise American West setting.
•    Epic Western—emphasizes the story of the American Old West on a grand scale, often set during a turbulent time, especially a war,
•    Euro-Western (Spaghetti Western)--include revenge seeking, rough violence, bandits, bounty hunters, etc.
•    Fantasy Western—mix in fantasy settings and themes, and may include Fantasy mythology as background
•    Noir Western—cynicism, character complexities, flawed outlaw heroes, and dark pessimism.
•    Revisionist Western—takes the side of Native Americans
•    Horror Western--aliens, monsters,vampires,etc.

In addition, there’s
•    Time travel
•    Knight errant
•    Romance
•    Mystery
Which can all be set in the West, historical or modern.

Who needs ho-hum inner-city when the Western offers such variety?

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Welcome, Christine! Wonderful way to start the new year. JP

Ha! Now try telling this former California girl how you "love the seasons." Nobody loves the cold. I'll just stay right here in AZ where 'cold' means less than 98.6.
Just so you'll know--the older we get, the more sensitive we are to the cold. You might want to start making preparations now for your retirement.
And boy, am I glad I never bought into that 'global warming' crap. Anyone with an ounce of gray matter knows the earth's climate is cyclical, and nothing we do influences that. It's as Mark Twain said: "Everybody talks about the weather, but nobody does anything about it."
The last cold spell was in the eighteenth century, a period that produced some of the greatest thinkers in history, and saw some of the greatest changes. Apparently, cold weather is good for the human condition.
JP

Marilyn Johnson wrote:

They...don't seem to stick around for long.  I don't know if it's because of lack of reviews, or because the reviews they get don't live up to the expectations they've put on their work.  But I doubt any new folks will get any reviews if they don't post in something that pays points.  Sometimes I log on and get the feeling that I am the only person in the world on here.  It's a strange feeling.

How about that, J P?  I didn't bash the president (though he needs it!).  smile

Don't worry about the bashing. I'm used to it now.

About the disappearing members--what you say about points as an incentive to review is probably correct. I remember being stunned after taking the time to write reviews and not getting my Pavlovian reward. This happened a few times before I caught on (Pavlov was right). I still get caught from time to time, but that's not my main criterion for reviewing.

If I spot a work that has an offensive (this is purely subjective), boring, or ungrammatical title, I don't read it. If after skimming the first few paragraphs, I find the substance to be any of the three above, I don't review it. Then if, after reviewing the first few chapters, the author still shows no sign of learning the difference between 'then' and 'than,' 'its' and 'it's,' or when to say, 'Joe and me,' rather than 'Joe and I,' I write them off.

So I think maybe your second reason is more likely, which is why we don't ask our friends and relatives to review our work. Friends and relatives, sharing the same environment, have the same level of literary expertise. After being surrounded by people who praise our writing, it's tough to take the hard truth. I know I quit the site after only a couple of months of folks telling me I was 'head-hopping,' or 'telling rather than showing,' or the most damning, my 'character showed no signs of problem-solving.' The reason? I was too dumb to know what any of that meant!

I tried a few other sites, and they were totally worthless--just a few kids bragging about their social life and writing new episodes of Star Trek. So I came back, and with the help of a few thoughtful reviewers, I have learned a lot. Now when I write a review, if I feel the writer won't understand my critique, I explain why I'm saying something, and may even give them links to online sources. This is more helpful than throwing buzz words at them. And the people who really want to learn how to write will come back.

But you know what? Life happens, things change, and humans adapt. There are any number of reasons why our friends have not been active, including family tragedies and grave illness, even death. There are positive reasons, too--when your writing takes off and you're going on book tours and appearing on the Today Show, can you really say you'll still be logging in to tnbw faithfully? Or maybe you'll hit the lottery and decide to travel the world. Will you still have time for the rest of us then?

Stick with those of us who are still here and don't worry about the rest--they'll either come back, or they won't.

JP

Marilyn Johnson wrote:

I'd like to get away from the groups anyway.  Not sure how effective they are.

Just my opinion.

I remember the hue and cry over the groups--'we don't need them', 'they won't work anyway,' and 'how come we can only join five?' Sol upped the number to ten before you could say Jack Robinson (I've waited a long time to use that phrase--I may have forgotten the fellow's name). But the hardest part (for me) was figuring out what to make a group for. I started with Cop Shop, thinking crime was a good bet, though not necessarily as a career choice, and it worked for a while, with people offering their expertise to answer others' questions. But it's a thankless job filling in the blanks for folks who don't care to do their own research, and our 'authorities' gave up on us after a while. Nowadays it seems nobody does more than take a look to see if Jack and Janet have already answered all the quiz items. I don't know if people got wise and started doing their own research, or if they just don't care. But I do know that the Group never became the fount of intellectual discourse I envisioned. Or even good gossip.

I started Mama,Trains and Pickup Trucks for fun--I liked the sound of the words and my friend said there ought to be a group for my kind of 'poetry.' Unfortunately, not too many people seem to find fun in the same things I do. MTAPT is REALLY quiet these days.

I've tried some of the other groups from time to time, but they don't appear to do a lot of talking to each other, either. Recently, I've started posting topics on the Premium Group Forum just to see if I can get a nibble. It's nice to know there really are other people out there, even if the only thing they want to do is bash the President. (Doesn't matter who it is--there's always something to bash them about. Sometimes I get carried away, myself.)

Where was I?

Oh, right--the Groups. Well, I said my piece, and so did Verne and Marilyn, so there you have it.

Happy new year, by the way. JP