I don't think I'd call it wisdom, especially if it means you must never thrust a spear into the monster's belly.
You'll always have a reader who'll turn Twin Peaks into the literal translation of Grand Tetons. How much do you let that churl spoil things for everyone else?
Read the review. *shakes head* njc, njc, njc.
From the romance writer who's determined to look under the monster's tail? All I have are spells circling an oversized walking-stick.
So it's YOUR fault? I should have known!
Say, whatever happened to Ghen's glowing green privates? https://www.youtube.com/watch?feature=p … 108o#t=339
(Edit: That one's for you K. Rewind to the very beginning.)
It wasn't dirty until Amy told you it was.
4WD and AWD can help keep you going, but because you already brake with all four wheels they will help very little in stopping. Thus they can get you deeper into trouble, and not help you out.
I'm not going to ask and just make my own deductions ... *shakes head* Amy, Amy, Amy.
She read the same chapter you did, or nearly. You read all the same parts.
Rule #1: If you have an automatic car, the average person controls the car with the brake. (A manual controls the car with the accelerator.) When driving in ice, it is a key control point to stay at a steady speed because the acceleration is what makes you spin out.
Don't be afraid to put the automatic in low gear so you don't have to brake as much. Conversely, there may be times when it helps to push the tranny to a higher gear so the drivetrain can't put the same burst of torque on the wheels.
Be aware that (on most cars) only one pair of wheels pulls or pushes. Both brake. I've seen someone stopped in the slushy snow with their rear wheels turning even as they were holding the car with the brake and the front wheels. Front wheel drive has the advantage that the strongest brakes are on the drive wheels, so that shouldn't happen.
With an automatic tranny, you manage the car's energy state by feeding energy in with the accelerator and bleeding it away with the brakes. The manual allows you more direct control of the car through the engine. (But the newer, many-geared manumatics change that a little.)
Remember--the ONLY control you have of your car goes through that 100 or so square inches of contact patch.
It's all physics.
Without H being inconsiderate, I have to think of something else why she would sleep with M after 10 years of not sleeping with anyone else
Ten years is a bit of a stretch. Less than five seems improbable to the story; ditto more than eight. And besides, she and M were childhood friends. She was what, five years younger? That will make M rather old to be unmarried, no? And to undertake his various physical adventures? (I mean with the steel, not in bed!)
Nice!
Watch the whole thing!
Now, Amy, appropos the pulsating spells on the shaft of Erevain's staff ...
The scene is a schoolroom, a small school from years ago. It reads best with a Scots burr.
Teacher: Mistress Mary, will you stand up please.
[Mary stands]
Teacher: Now Mary, can you tell me: What part of the human body, when properly stimulated, grows to nine times its normal size?
[Mary blushes]
Teacher: Mary, what part of the human body, when properly stimulated, grows to nine times its normal size?
[Mary looks down at her shoes]
Teacher: Mary, quit your stalling, stand up straight, and answer my question. What part of the human body, when properly stimulated, grows to nine times its normal size?
[Mary bites her lip and tries to stand straight.]
Teacher: Very well, Mary, you may sit down. Master Johnny, will you stand up please.
[Johnny stands]
Teacher: Now Master Johnny, let us see if you can answer my question. What part of the human body, when properly stimulated, grows to nine times its normal size?
Johnny: The pupil of the human eye, when properly stimulated, grows to nine times its normal size.
Teacher: Very good, Master Johnny. You may sit down.
Teacher: Mary, I've three things to say to you. First, you've not done your homework, that much is for certain. Second, Mary, you've a dirty, dirty mind. And third ... Mary, I fear you are in for a grave disappointment!
I luvvvvvv central heating, especially on those days when the minimum is something like 22F and the maximum 34F.
Yeah. In the southern US they don't do that nearly as well. You should have maintenance on the system late every summer. The things are marvellously reliable. Keep it taken care of and you can go ten years or more without a failure.
Then maybe merge 19 with 20, especially if the music swells and climaxes there? https://www.youtube.com/watch?feature=p … bzuk#t=723
I've amended my review to answer your question.
You and I are Jack Sprat and his wife. (I'll let you decide which is which.) Your strengths are my weaknesses, and vice versa.
And, regarding your review of my chapter, there's a lengthy joke I've a mind to post.
I can't speak to merging it with the next chapter until I see that next chapter, but I think you should leave open the possibility of taking the previous chapter through this double-thread climax and reworking all the chapter breaks.
Correction. Chapter 4. Book 1.
Review done. Good job.
Not by the number of comments! I'll reply to each in full later.
I just incorporated people's comments for Ch6: Erevain. If anyone really wants it, I'll repub for points.
I've had things on my mind that have made it hard to work on new material. I hope that's clearing now.
See, my solution fis the story logic, it just means you have more to write about. Having H's family come into the story is embarassing complication for C, but it would provide the opportunity for a remark or two that can -later- be interpreted to indicate the hobby/hubby situation.
You're assuming that H's kids are his. With a winner like that, would it surprise anyone if she had a hobby as well as a hubby?
One more piece of mystery ...
Are you going to make me look up 'Kell(+)'?
You're assuming that H's kids are his. With a winner like that, would it surprise anyone if she had a hobby as well as a hubby?
But how does anyone in the story know that H is the problem? The assumption can always be that it's C's problem, assumption unchallenged until experience proves otherwise.
Why not just have H. sterile, reasons unknown?
You should see their Lab Full of Exploding Things #5.
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So ... evil (the Defiler, presumably) can cut into Behira's magic ... but whatever has preserved and restored Jaylene can also do so ... and that something APPEARS good, but might actually be trying to manipulate events toward its own ends, more likely ill than good. So does Zyrt know what's happening?
