Well, no, he's also under a Barricade, so he can't use Sorcery. The pain spell was Merran's camoflage for the Barricade---though she also meant to disable him if the Barricade failed. She did not plan on running for three days under a terror geas.
What fighting Merran has learned she learned from Harsan (mostly) and Glasias. But since they had the same training as Merran there will be some similarity.
Well, he'd gotten there little by little. (The text now says 'reached') The time estimate is an inference from the time w/out sleep.
Possessions
Okay, I've made some changes to meet your objections. I'm afraid he'll get out of his predicament altogether too soon.
If you put another such scene it, that action should be background to other events. Maybe show Mathew as a versatile fighter?
You didn't say anything about the medical parts: using lack of sleep and fear from the hallucinations as an escape from the pain spell--or about surviving four days instead of three without water.
I'll have to give this one some thought. It feels like some kind of turning point and rebuild in the story. If you planned Taz-man for this, you did a really good job.
We'll see about ChiTown this year. (Assuming that one R. Emanual doesn't find a way to scuttle a landlocked city.)
That's the one.
Even as I try to get other things done, bits and pieces of large-scale plot occur to me, falling perhaps near their final places. I've got at least a dozen notes from the last 24 hours, and at least four of them have to do with large-scale plot. They range from B3 (which includes Pike Observatory) past B6 (when Caneth is freed).
B1-B3 are Part I; B4-B6 are Part II. Parts I and II make up First Account: Ceremony of Innocence; Parts III and IV make up Second Account: tbd.
position
I recently bought the Epson Workforce 3640 all-in-one printer for $120 at Staples. It's a bit big, but a fantastic home printer.
All-in-ones are compromises. My primary printer now is a wide-carriage photo-capable Epson R1900. I don't see any good replacements out there for it, so I'll keep it running as long as I can.
Okay, go ahead.
da gallop
Wait 'til 21:00. I've got another edit to slip in.
Cryselephantine
Oh, with everything else I've obtained a copy of John Boyd's briefings.
Boyd was the Air Force combat instructor who rewote the textbooks on aerial combat, then went on to teach himself aeronautical engineering and revolutionize the design of fighter aircraft, and then digested and assimilated both Sun Tzu and von Clausewitz--and eclipsed them both. He died almost twenty years ago, and he's still the most important military mind of =this= century.
His briefings, which include only the slides and not his talking, are the distillation of his life's work. Not a small matter to absorb, but if I ever get up to and beyond Caneth's release from Shogran's trap, I'll want as much of that as I can get.
Amy, owe you a reply. Surprised you didn't take up the new chapterlette in B2.
Green dot
Sol--a possibly easy request to go with all the hard stuff you've got right now:
When the 'new inline reviews' are displayed on the home page, could the reviewer be displayed along with the author?
No-See Zone
I now have a 5x8 index card with a storyline worth probably four chapters. The notes just barely spill to the next page.
Tomorrow will be dedicated to other things.
I spend more for printers. $12.50 for each of the six cartridges. I stretch them by overriding the default settings and printing in text or text-and-image mode. I don't know what I'll do for my next printer, though.
A note on my status: I've been getting some work done, including some during my trip to visit my brother and his wife last week. I've been organizing--or starting to organize--the hundreds of plot, character, and theme notes that I have. And I've got some other tasks that I need to get done in the next few days.
I've done a few reviews, and will do some more. I've got a list of edits for the existing Erevain chapters, to try to trim at least 1,000 words from them. I've got notes for some changes in the transition from Book 1 to Book 2, and another thread I want to open near the end of Book 1, as well as notes on some of the changes to be made in Merran's training.
And I think I can answer someone's question about the Orienting spell.
I may make provisional chapters of some of the things burning a hole in my mental pocket.
I'm using Rolodex-like notebooks for my collection of `loose' notes. I bought them on a carriage-trade website, but some of the parts are available at Stapes--at a higher price! I've got two notebooks with 2" disks and two with 3" disks.
Polyjuice potion.
We're having more open and open-ended discussions now over in the MF&M group. You can debate the wisdom, but we're finding it helpful. Then again, I think most of us there are still trying to develop the facility and speed you've got.
