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Ouch!  Two people got reviews in ahead of me.  I'll do it before 01:00 (07:00 Zulu time).

Chapter up in B2!  Not the one I wanted, but the one after that.  Quotidian, but I hope at least a little engaging.  Now I need to go saw some wood.

Okay, most recent thoughts on the Erevain episode are to get much of the backstory while Mama is interrogating Erevain.  Oh, and Merran's spells lasted a bit longer than she meant them too--and Melayne is impressed and a little frightened about how her daughter managed to straitjacket Erevain's mind.  (All the more reason to be sure that Merran gets someone training her while Mama is tied up.)  I'm not going to work on that right now, apart from writing a little intro to add into my notes.

My sleep and wake times have been shifting again, and on top of that I've had some good thoughts and conclusions, both about the Erevain episode (Thanks, Nicholas A.!) and some (much) later story thread/theme/plot matter, so I've spent a little time on them.  I'm also thinking about sending Melayne back to get more info from Pengrit when her trail dries up ... which means a stop at the Academy to find out from Kirsey where Midlich lives--before Threckesrom gets word that Merran may be on campus.
And either tonight or tomorrow I plan to see =Fastball=, and the nearest theaters are an hour or so away.
And that's why Paddy won't be at work today.

Or Cogito Ergo Dumm.

But the question wasn't character description.  It was balance and movement between description in general and action, and between summary and close narrative.  Anyhow, on description I quite agree with the 'sludge' paragraph of this early review (assuming that tNBW will let you see it).  You have to know what to describe, and how to do it economically.

Not sure just how to take that (grin!) but that second episode has the right plot but the wrong telling.

There are two balances I'm trying to strike.  One of the earliest reviews I got, when I finally got B1Ch1 posted, praised my spare style.  OTOH, one of my reviewers here is constantly pounding me for more detail.  It has to be the right detail, in the right place.

The other balance is between summary narrative (telling) and close narrative (showing).  Part of Tolkien's genius was his ability to get both of these just right.  I've got a long way to go.

I plan to read =The Continental Op= tonight after I finish making notes on those four pages.  Purely for research, you understand.

I'm still working on my next chapter.  No title yet.  The opening episode is running a bit long, and I need time to think and prune.  I've got the second episode done, though, and I hope you'll like it.  I also hope I didn't overdo parts of it.

Meanwhile, I've got a slow-crisis that is speeding up, and I have less that 16 hours to put things straight, so I won't be writing for probably 30 hours.

edit: I may also be working on the last of the infection.  I'm stilll on the levifloxacin (sp?) and I'm still slowly improving.

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The sovereign has always been accorded latitude.  The sovereign has the job of establishing public order, and stopping the killers and the spoilers is part of that.  If the only means that will stop them is killing them, it's still within the common defence.
Killing in war falls under the rubric of just war.

Please note comments on the review reply.  Will try to get to your short.

You don't say?

Okay, mod complete.  Maybe a little less elegant of its own, but I think it flows better from the previous chapter.