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I'm talking about the action in a particular scene, as discussed in a particular review.

As to stripping characters away, I suggest you compare Star Trek TOS with just one plot per episode with TNG, which often had two, or B5, which usually had three and sometimes four.  Amy doesn't have too many characters.  She needs to linearize some places in her action.

You could pretty much solve the classic mystery =I the Jury= by watching who was left alive.  Spillane got away with it, but it gets overworked.  It also undercuts the Happy Ever After, and reduces the impact of the deaths.  When Hedwig was killed, we knew where =Deathly Hallows= was going.  We felt it, far more than we would have felt a random death at Antietam or Shiloh.

Further thought on the Problem with Elves: There could be real truth to what Lucas says about Kha living out of his culture.  His link to Sil could be based not only on his moral choices, but also on his mixed heritage.  Mages among Elfkind might bear special stigma, or special status (which would make Lucas an outcast among his kind, even as he cants about Kha's heritage rejection).  (And doesn't he do this with Anver around?  So Anver has to realize that Kha is half-elf.)

Pity we don't meet one or two others.  (Are they susceptible to Horrors?)  (Do they have links to Behira or Saundon or anyone else?)

Or have one of those nobles mention the Empress in the third person ... and Madame say something that makes it clear that The Empress is indeed an absent third person.

Hey, I was going to do this in book nine or ten, but I'll do it now instead.  Nothing says I can't do it again ... and you asked for this one.

Well, I think I =may= have a timeline for Day 2 Maurand that has everything in the right order.  I have to move a couple things to Day 3 and one back to Day 1, and decide just how the timeline maps onto the linear time of day.

Meanwhile, I have an appointment tomorrow, and at least one delivery to expect, and something I want to get built before the appointment, if I can.

I'm still working on sequencing all the little events of Maurand Day 2.

Amy, I might give you a gross little scene of his treatment, just for you. 

Oh, what about a lower cut that opens a femoral artery near the abdomen?

I'm going out of my gourd right now.  I've replaced my cellphone but--the existing stock of slide phones are incompatible with all the apps that were loaded on my old slidephone, including yahoo mail, chrome, and the Google play store app.

So either I have a phone I can type on, that can't run my apps, or I have a phone that the apps will deign to run on, but that I can't type on.

I feel like throwing wooden shoes through the touchscreen factories ... .   If I'd bought the new phones in a certain narrow time window, they would have gotten the update to the Android OS.

And I still can't schlepp my computer around with the PbSO4 battery pack.  I've just shelled out money for three spare flaptop batteries.  If I can keep them charged, I'll be able to use it most days (while I rehab my legs).  (The problem is tying up another hand with that 28+lb battery pack.)

Norm, when you get your list of curses, send it my way.   I need it.  (My good guys never curse.  My bad guys have yet to do so, but their character will be worse than any words they could utter.) Sorry, this is this best U-tube I could find.

It seems that GoodReads has the same idea ... but this is a Kindle ebook giveaway handled through Amazon, and it can be done with pre-publication works.

Dragon Balls!  Rat spit!

You can also take mythic figures from your history: Bloody Caesar!  Arthur's Eyes!  That may help you introduce myth that is important to your story.

Going to try to get the next chapter laid out.  All the little things I've listed have to fall into place, and so I need to get them in order.  This may be a sticky-notes problem.